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Nice. I'd say go double check your grammar in a few places, but other than that, I loved it. Cute way of misleading the reader.

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Nice. I'd say go double check your grammar in a few places, but other than that, I loved it. Cute way of misleading the reader.
I agree, it's very good. I think you should change I'll to I will and I'm to I am, makes it sound better

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wow...
i really like it...
although i agree with the first two, some things could be done with grammer.
but still really good.

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Perhaps change the title to "The Flying Maiden" so you don't even know it's a monkey until the end.
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