The Hangout....where sanity is overrated.

[Abandoned Dreams]

Psh. "Hero"... rolleyes

I'd love to see your webcomic. whee  

[Iyou]

All right, you asked for it... whee

Page 1 - Behold the overly dramatic first shot! Who needs a smooth beginning, anyway?
Page 2 - Disgustingly short fight. Lack of contrast, but everything's white anyway...
Page 3 - Kill.
Page 4 - Behold my terrible scenery drawing skills. Introduction of annoying square narrative bubbles.
Page 5 - Run from the angry housewife!
Page 6 - WIP. Terrible handwriting.

If anyone's wondering what they're doing, they hang out at this restaraunt and try to guess the occupations/personal info/etc. of the other people who walk in. (This'll be cleared up in future pages.)

My main concern is that there's too much dialogue... I don't know exactly how to explain it, but things just seem a little too "talky." I'm also worried if the sketchiness of the pencil lines makes it less pleasing to look at, but I'm too lazy to start inking everything anyway.  

[T H I N N]

Abandoned Dreams

AD's Art Final Extra Credit Question:
What are the five steps of the creative process?

AD's Answer:
1 - Idea
2 - Scrap the idea; it sucked anyway
3 - New idea
4 - The new idea doesn't work
5 - Bloody head on table

Repeat steps 3-5 until an idea works or you pass out.

That's giggle inducing. biggrin I love it!

Iyou>> I would be thrilled to take a look and see if I could give you any help. 3nodding  

[Abandoned Dreams]

Iyou - The only thing that confuses me is the speech bubble in the main frame of the second page. The tail is too short and I couldn't tell who was talking at first.

Aside from that, it looks good. As far as being too "talky" goes, I'm really not one to complain. xd So far, so good. I know you didn't ask for this crit, but the "housewife" doesn't seem to be drawn terribly differently from the younger characters. Maybe adding wrinkles or something would help? Just an insane nitpick.  

[Iyou]

AD - Thanks. whee I had a terrible time drawing the cranky housewife. "Need fat! Need wrinkles! Can't draw...augh! *implode*" Seriously, I can't draw fat people, and that's sort of creepy. o_o I'll try to make her look older/wrinklier.  

[Abandoned Dreams]

xd ! It's hard to draw people who deviate from the "perfect" body type, particularly if you learned to draw from anime. Besides, drawing fat people is just plain painful. o.O

So how have you been? We haven't seen you in a long time!  

[T H I N N]

Iyou>> Wow! This is pretty good. The story is intriguing because the reader doesn’t know what’s going on yet, so they’ll read on to see what’s up with these three. Hmm…I’ll give a frame by frame critique to make things easy (hopefully xp )

Frame 1: This could have to do with my ignorance towards proper fencing stance…but the body looks like its falling backwards a little…and the chest looks like it’s a little out of place. Otherwise…this looks great!

Frame 2: Looks good!

Frame 3: The way you portray Cass is priceless. xd I love it! I don’t see any problems here.

Frame 4: Excellent job with the hands! The scenery’s not bad, its effective enough I think.

Frame 5: She doesn’t look to happy…Anyway…Good scene, I don’t see anything out of the ordinary.

Frame 6: I want to know what they mean and what they’re talking about! xd

The dialogue is fine, really.  

[Deuxia Devonair]

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[Iyou]

Ashram - Thanks! I actually took a photo of myself to use as a reference for the first page, so the stance probably sucks because I really do suck at fencing. xd

AD - Eh, I've been all right. I think I'm finally realizing that overloading myself with work is bad, which is largely why I disappear from Gaia for large periods of time. sweatdrop (As I begin a webcomic... hah.) My semi-clingy boyfriend and I have also agreed that we should leave each other alone for a while, since we've been at each other's throats for a while now, so I guess I get to be single again, woot. whee Not much else besides studying for AP tests now, which are on May 6 and 9. I'm really freaking out about the US History one, because I absolutely hate history and really don't want to fail the AP test only to take it again in college. Dead white men have been dancing before my eyes for the last few days and will continue to do so until I take that stupid test. >_>

Deuxia - whee heart *huggleattacked*  

[Saisei Hoshi]

Iyou - I like your webcomic. It make me wounder what's going to happen next and that alway a key thing for me.

Webcomics are normally what keep me going everyday. I have so many bookmarked that I can read at least 6 everyday. Plus I keep adding to the list all the time. I'd love to start one but I lake all forms of dicipline to maintain one.

In other news I'm now in my musicals phase. Musicals are my greatest weakness, I'll drop everything to see one. So right now I've got 20 musical soundtracks in winamp and it's set on shuffle. I ish sooooo happy right now.  

[Abandoned Dreams]

Deuxia - Sorry to hear about your test. sad At least you're above average, though! xd

Iyou - Meh, clingy boyfriends are NEVER any good.

UGHGHGH!! AP US History! WORTHLESS! I got a 3 on that, which was a miracle. I hate history with a passion. stressed Good luck on yours.

Akahoshi - Do you know Joseph and the Amazing Technicolor Dreamcoat? It's my fav.  

[Deuxia Devonair]

Iyou> *giggles* 4laugh

Tulokyn> Welcome to the guild!!!! biggrin heart


AD> neutral Meeeehhh... *shrugs* Better luck for the next one. *sigh*


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Side note> Engrish never ceases to amuse me. xd




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WTF?  

[T H I N N]

Iyou>> Ah...I guess that explains it. xd

Hoshi>> Music Man; My Fair Lady - Check them out 3nodding

Deuxia>> Heh heh heh...Grope Tourists whee  

[Chibi Koji]

Iyou~ Awsome web comic! ^ ^ History=only thing I feel confident in right now. D: I take my tests starting tomorrow, hope you have fun. x3

Hoshi~ Dang, I needa get my lazy self playing more, everyone I know is passing me up. ._ .;

Deuxi~ Ohh...wow. xD I want something deep fried and look like squirrel. xDD


Has anyone seen the new Got Milk? commercial? I laughed waay too hard. I got slapped. xD;  

[Ryuuhou]

I liked the webcomic, Iyou. I think is really good biggrin it can turn into a nice juicy plot twisted I'd be more than willing to read smile

Deuxi - OMG ENGRISH! *dies*