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Princess Angelishia
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PostPosted: Fri Mar 04, 2011 10:30 pm


Main Plot

It's finally here!
This is the finalized plot based on everyone's collective suggestions. If anyone has any major problems with it, please PM me.


Preface
(This will be posted at the start of the ball.)


Once upon a time there were 14 demigods. Their names were Pride, Envy, Wrath, Sloth, Greed, Gluttony, Lust, Humility, Love, Kindness, Zeal, Generosity, Temperance, and Chastity. At first, the 14 young demigods cooperated and balanced each other out, keeping the world at harmony. But as time went on, the 14 began to bicker like small children.

Normally, people bickering like small children is just annoying, but not all that harmful. However, with all the power these 14 possessed, the world began to fall out of harmony. Gaians were being overwhelmed by the influence of these demigods. Men were becoming full of greed and harming their neighbors for personal gain. Children were overtaken by Sloth’s influence and refusing to do anything but lie around all day. Some were overtaken by the influence of demigods like Generosity, and gave away everything they owned, leaving themselves in poverty.

After seeing enough of this suffering, the other demigods decided to put an end to the people’s strife. They tricked all of the bickering demigods (and a few beings that associated with them) into a magical tower, and then sealed them away. To make sure that no one ever opened the tower again, the older demigods and gods decided to place a spell on the seal. Unless someone uttered their chosen password, the door to the tower would remain sealed. They picked a word so ridiculous that they reasoned no one would ever think to utter it in front of the tower’s gate.

Once behind the magically sealed stone walls, the demigod’s harmful influence over the Gaians began to fade again. It was as if the magic of the tower was balancing their influence once more. The demigods turned the use of their magic to creating customized mini-dimensions within the castle, to make their time spent incarcerated bearable.

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Millennia later, a group of Gaian children were playing far out in the forest. They played hide and seek, and eventually ended up not being able to find themselves. The children were lost and scared. As if things weren’t getting bad enough, it began to rain.

Then the oldest child spotted something looming just above the nearby trees, and pointed it out to his playmates. The group of children reasoned that it might be shelter, so they went to investigate.

After pushing aside vines and branches that looked as though they had been undisturbed for ages, the children came upon the stone tower. However, the door to the tower was cemented shut, and appeared to have some sort of magical seal on it.

They tried pushing. They tried pulling. They tried smashing. They tried looking for keys. They tried sitting on rocks and pulling all the branches near the door.

“Maybe it’s a magic word?” suggested the youngest little girl in the group.

“Open Sesame!” shouted one child.

“Abracadabra!” another exclaimed.

“Please?” Tried the youngest.

They shouted cliché passwords at the door until the rain had drenched them to the bone. “Oh poppycock,” said the oldest in frustration.

As soon as he spoke, the door began to tremble, and the stone gate to the tower swung open before them. Mouths open with surprise and gathering rain, the group of children rushed into the tower.

To their surprise, they found 14 very confused demigods waiting for them.

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“Are we being let out?” Greed asked after several moments of awkward silence.

Confused, the eldest child spoke, “I have no idea what you’re talking about.”

At that moment, other demigods and gods began to show up at the door to the tower, having felt the enormous magic energies of it being opened. One demigod, who looked like he was the patron deity of some leafy vegetable, scolded the children. “Do you have any idea what you’ve unleashed? These are some of the most dangerous spirits in the entire world! We have to get them sealed up again immediately.”

“Now what a minute!” interjected Kindness. “We never meant to hurt anyone!”

“Yes!” exclaimed Zeal. “And we’ve changed! We’re different now, really. We can control ourselves.”

“We’re much more mature now.” Pride boasted. “In fact, we’re the perfect demigods. We could bring real joy to the Gaians. Just give us a chance?”

“We could hold an event, to show our new self-control and good-naturedness!” Generosity added. “We could throw a big gala- a ball! And invite all the Gaians.”

“Please?” Pride looked a bit less smug. “Just one chance?”

All of the other deities agreed. The 14 demigods could have this one chance to show that they could ‘play nice’ and benefit Gaians. And so the 9th Annual Ball came to be.

During the Ball
(This part will happen during the ball, but these words won’t be posted anywhere. This stuff will just happen.)


Each floor of the tower has a door that opens to the location of the room host’s choosing. It can be just a tower room, or another dimension. Be as creative as you want, as long as it’s fun for guests!

The demigods in each room will start to bicker and cause mischief. What mischief this is will be up to each room host, just please have it approved by me (Princess Angelishia) in a PM. I will most likely approve whatever you come up with, room hosts, but I want to make sure I know what each room is doing.

At the climax of the ball, the chaos caused by the bickering will start to cause the tower itself to fall apart, perhaps injuring some NPCs.

During the danger, the guests will be given a chance by each room host set to resolve the conflict of the room, and help the demigods learn to cooperate.

Ending of the Ball
(Same deal as the ‘during the ball’ section.)


The guests will help each pair of demigods reconcile, and peace will be restored to the tower, and to Gaia.
PostPosted: Fri Mar 04, 2011 10:57 pm


I LOVE IT O.O

im trying to read through it more carefully and find any gaps/flaws, but its really early in the morning and i cant think too straight. but since at the moment i cant seem to find anything then it looks great. i like it.

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PostPosted: Sat Mar 05, 2011 12:30 am


Before I say anything else, I want to say how much I love what you've done with the plot, Angel! I also want to compliment your superb punctuational skills! xd All in all, it was very well done. There were a few minor things here and there. I made a few notes and edited quotes so that everything works better grammatically.

-The first part of the second paragraph is worded slightly awkwardly.
"When humans bicker like small children, it is annoying but not all that harmful. But, when 14 demigods with great power and influence bicker like small children bad things happen. Their bickering was so great and terrible that the world began to fall out of harmony."

-Eliminate mention of other demigods in order to preserve clarity. Also, the lock and seal part seemed a little redundant.
"After seeing enough of this suffering, the gods decided to put an end to the people’s strife. They tricked all of the bickering demigods into entering a magical tower, and then sealed them away. To make sure that no one ever opened the tower again, the gods decided to place a spell on the door."

-There is one wording issue and one tense issue in the first paragraph of the second section.
"Millennia later, a group of Gaian children were playing far out in the forest. They joyfully played hide and seek with each other, but they accidentally wandered into a dark part of the forest they had never seen before. The children were lost and scared. As if things weren’t bad enough, it began to rain."

-The second sentence in the next to last paragraph of the second section is very ambiguous and awkward.
-"As soon as he spoke, the door began to tremble, and the stone gate to the tower swung open before them. The children's mouths opened with surprise; but, as it was raining, the group of children rushed into the tower after only a moment's hesitation."

-Typo in part 3 (what and wait)
“Now, wait a minute!” interjected Kindness. “We never meant to hurt anyone!”

-In the last section, the part about the other demigods is clear; however, for the sake of continuity, perhaps the vegetable demigod could be a lesser god. Also, a couple commas weren't necessary.
"At that moment, the gods began to show up at the door to the tower, having felt the enormous magic energies of it being opened. One lesser god who looked like he was the patron deity of some leafy vegetable scolded the children. “Do you have any idea what you’ve unleashed? These are some of the most dangerous spirits in the entire world! We have to get them sealed up again immediately"

I hope those little notes help! heart
PostPosted: Sat Mar 05, 2011 12:35 am


Oh, Chibi, you and your English Degree. <3

Great job on the plot, Angel. I'm so glad everything is getting put into place now. I pretty much have no real issue with it--hooray!

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PostPosted: Sat Mar 05, 2011 12:36 am


I've been lurking and I think this is going to be really awesome. ;w; (for those who don't know who I am, I was Sacch in last year's ball).
This is looking sooo awesome, oh my gosh. I wish I would have been able to cooperate and help with the ball, but college has been kicking my butt... M-Maybe next year... @~@
PostPosted: Sat Mar 05, 2011 7:39 am


lolol
WIN.

Dude I love this plot.
I can't wait for the bickering to begin-
i mean.
I can't wait for it.
period.
8D
EXCITEMENT~
/twirl

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PostPosted: Sat Mar 05, 2011 7:41 am


I think I'm in love with this plot <3
PostPosted: Sat Mar 05, 2011 9:03 am


'Oh, poppycocks.'

And the gate opened.



LOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOL!! XDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDD Wicked. Exactly what we need to kick start on the rest of the work for the Ball.

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PostPosted: Sat Mar 05, 2011 9:33 am


.....Amazing.
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PostPosted: Sat Mar 05, 2011 9:48 am


Looking Forward to the Ball! B)

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PostPosted: Sat Mar 05, 2011 8:48 pm


OMG, love it! But as Chibi said, what/wait... XD and poppycock... XD
Overall, I love it! XD
PostPosted: Sat Mar 05, 2011 9:55 pm


The plot is lovely! <3
Ideas are already spinning in my head!

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PostPosted: Mon Mar 07, 2011 11:56 am


Very nice Angel. I'm so sorry I had to put more work on you sad

I think this plot will work wonders heart
PostPosted: Wed Mar 16, 2011 12:03 pm


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PostPosted: Fri Mar 18, 2011 2:41 pm


ok, i've been gone for awhile. my bad. a few tips here:

"Once upon a time there were 14 demigods. Their names were Pride, Envy, Wrath, Sloth, Zeal, Greed, Gluttony, Lust, Humility, Love, Kindness, Zeal, Generosity, Temperance, and Chastity. At first, the 14 young demigods cooperated and balanced each other out, keeping the world at harmony. But as time went on, the 14 began to bicker like small children."

erm, you listed Zeal twice. this means you put down 14 individual names but 15 names total.


and everything else everyone has said already.

thats...well, thats about it o.o still love it, "poppycock" made me laugh
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