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 Posted: Sun Feb 05, 2012 7:06 am
 C h a n . J i a n g
"snow river"
雪河
Username : GreenInkling
Lunarian : Chan,
female,
Chinese
Alliance : Legion
Path : Priest,
living soul conduit
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Posted: Sun Feb 05, 2012 7:09 am
A p p e a r a n c e (外貌)
Skin Tone -- pale or fair, with yellow undertones and a coral flush
Body Style -- straight, boyish, lacking curves with just a bit of a waist, average height
Hair Color/Style -- light black/gray, with center-parted bangs that lie flat against her forehead and are cut at two levels; her hair is worn long and kept neatly trimmed so the ends are perfectly straight and even and come just below her shoulder blades
Eye Color -- spring green, round and wide
Clothing Description -- a traditional Chinese hanfu called a ruqun (襦裙), in solid cream/off-white with pale green embroidery and detailing
Accessory Description -- [coming soon]
Unique Attributes -- Chan's eyebrows are short and shaped like sideways teardrops
Notes -- her scales and fins are a yellow green, similar to her eyes
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Posted: Sun Feb 05, 2012 7:32 am
P e r s o n a l i t y (個性)
Devout -- Devotion comes naturally to Chan. She was raised in her faith according to her culture but grew to love it and accept it for what it was, not just tradition. Chan always felt that life was a gift and generally good. As a small child, she was in awe of the beauty of the world around her, from the intricate veins in a dragonfly's wings, to the warm buttery color of yellow. It was a privilege to be able to look at a dandelion. What had she done to deserve it? This feeling presupposed that there was something or someone to whom she owed gratitude. It couldn't be to nature itself, for nature was a created thing just as she was. She found the answer in faith. The more she learned about it, the more firmly she believed in a higher power whose will is directed toward the ultimate good and that conforming one's will to this deity is the simplest way to live happily. She loves the Goddess dearly and is sad when she learns that others do not share her devotion. She does try to convert people directly, but also believes that by example and prayer, others will come to acknowledge the need to worship within themselves. Chan makes time daily for ritual and prayer, but is not scrupulous; she believes that the action of ritual can reinforce and help direct her soul during worship. She follows ethics and rules not as empty entities but as subsets of her religiosity.
Thoughtful -- Chan likes to make others feel comfortable and appreciated because she likes to feel comfortable and appreciated. Expect holiday greetings from her, remembrances of birthdays, and little gifts "just because." She records important dates in a calender and gives presents - whether it is a wildflower picked spontaneously in the garden or a year's compilation of recipes for someone who enjoys cooking - because she enjoys receiving presents. In her case, a quickly scrawled note of correspondence or a new piece of jewelry please her almost equally. She is happy someone thought of her and was thinking of what she might like to have, making her feel treasured and loved. If she perceives that someone is uncomfortable or unhappy, and she knows the cause of it and it is within her power to remedy, she will do her best, provided it doesn't go against her conscience and strict moral standards (see Empathetic).
Empathetic -- In accordance with her faith and desire to be a good and devout person, Chan tries to empathize with others' pain. If she does know someone is upset, she will set aside time to talk with him, and as she listens, she tries to imagine herself in his place, how he must feel, how she would react in such a situation, and keep company with him so he doesn't have to be alone. She is not always successful, especially if a particular person does not want empathizing. Chan can also be tempted to try to fix a situation for someone, which has the potential to cause lots of problems. How is it Chan's responsibility to "fix" others, and how does she presume to know what's best for another person? Who is she that she needs to correct others before correcting and perfecting herself (see Opinionated)?
Lazy -- Chan's practical birth mother disapproves of Chan's laziness, but all efforts to channel the child's focus into productivity were resisted. Instead, she would find her daughter lounging under a tree with a book and dreaming. Chan tries to slink out of the room when clean-up is imminent. She abhors exercising. She's terrible at sports. Not only physical but mental exertion, if it is not something she enjoys or sees as a religious obligation, is avoided at all costs.
Proud -- Chan hates what she views as belittlement and does not react well to criticism, even if it is genuine; she'll make excuses for herself and argue. If all else fails, she'll become angry and storm off so that she doesn't have to listen and endure the discomfort of being faced with her own faults (see Empathetic). If she perceives that she is not being taken seriously, she likewise becomes defensive. She won't back down from letting someone know she is offended and will lash out verbally. Chan is also angered when she is told she is wrong about something she holds to be absolutely true (see Opinionated). It is even harder for her, therefore, when something she had previously assumed she is good at or right about is disproved. In such a situation, she prefers to retreat and think over this disturbing revelation in privacy, until she can either begrudgingly come to terms with it or return with a rebuttal, some say denial.
Opinionated -- Chan believes she knows what's right, and she'll tell you about it. She isn't judgmental, but she speaks out with too much certainty about a sensitive topic or situation and ends up with her foot in her mouth and her pride offended (see Proud). This is especially the case when it comes to her religion and her efforts to convert others. Her obstinacy knows neither age, class, nor gender. The only thing that could curtail her corrective dialogue is if she perceives an individual is in distress; and even then, the expression of her opinion is merely postponed until what she feels is a more opportune time (see Empathy).
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Posted: Sun Feb 05, 2012 7:33 am
H i s t o r y . a n d . A l l e g i a n c e (歷史和忠誠)
The Jiang clan are textile merchants and a numerously branched middle class family. Chan is the only offspring of a controversial marriage between her father (Papa), a man of good business sense and laid-back disposition, and her mother (Mama), the daughter of a wealthy family. It was thought that when her mother was young, she would become a talented musician, but she married and became a housewife, successfully and skillfully co-managing her husband's affairs. Chan inherited a pretty singing voice from her, but other than that, no instrumental skills.
When she was seven years of age, Chan's maternal relatives saw that she was intellectually promising. Fearing that her natural affinity for scholarship would wain in her home environment, they arranged for her to be raised and educated in an upper-class family. From then on, Chan's life would be split, though not unpleasantly, between the daily living of her foster family and the frequent visiting and meal-taking with her birth parents.
Chan flourished under the care of her foster family and many foster siblings, learning skills such as poetry, philosophy, painting, and manners. It was here that she first made a serious study of religion; early devotion had already begun to show itself while still a small child. Her foster mother (Mother), a devout woman herself, was pleased, and the children's tutor was told to instruct her about Lunarian magic. While able to get her intellect wrapped around it, she seemed to lack the application needed to excel in it practically, and it was put aside for the time being.
In her foster family's house, Chan was exposed to the concept of unquestioning devotion to the Emperor. She was able to connect what could have been a mindless obeisance with her growing faith, and rationalize that being a good subject was right and just, and duly required of one wishing to sincerely and reverently practice her religion.
Chan's heart is set on becoming a priestess. Her natural compassion and studious inclination make her a good candidate, but she is worryingly lacking in magical application. Having little to no contact with deceased souls, it has been decided that she will study live soul conduction. Her birth parents and foster parents agreed to send her to the Academy, both for formal education and socialization with her peers. It is here that she will first touch the growing rumblings of the empire's social unrest .
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Posted: Sun Feb 05, 2012 7:36 am
H o b b i e s (愛好)
Literature -- Chan is a connoisseur of classical and scholarly literature. She collects books and scrolls and can lose an entire afternoon glancing through something she has read several times before. Her favorite type of literature is folklore, and she usually avoids popular and modern literature, unless it is modeled on older types. She does compose her own poetry from time to time, but is very private about it. Chan might show it to someone whom she trusts, if they ask sincerely. She also likes to study maps of the country and read up on cultural, physical, and linguistic differences. Chan hopes to indulge this wanderlust and travel after leaving the Academy; however her maternal relatives and foster family would likely not allow any extensive traveling without an escort.
Jewelry -- While she is not necessarily what one would consider vain in dress and manners, Chan does enjoy shiny things, and collecting jewelry is one of her favorite hobbies. She likes broaches, earrings, hair ornaments, rings, bracelets, and necklaces of many colors, shapes, and decorations. Really, she has no preference among precious or semi-precious stones, as long as they are well-cut and flashing. She has plenty of pieces, but goes half the time without wearing any, preferring to admire them and then put them away for safe-keeping.
Drama -- The good kind. She started by reading her books out loud to herself and then putting emphasis and emotion into the words to breathe life into them. Her foster siblings noticed, and the younger ones brought their own books to her so she would read to them. Chan's storytelling became more involved, until her enthusiasm crept from her voice into her entire body, and she would have the little ones rolling with laughter as she gallivanted across the room or garden. It was only a matter of time before she dropped the text completely and was acting. She sometimes organizes her foster siblings and puts on little performances and shows on holidays and religious festivals. Chan will attend others' performances, professional and amateur, but prefers to put on her own; she can't watch for long before she wants to jump in and join them.
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Posted: Sun Feb 05, 2012 7:37 am
M i s c e l l a n e o u s (雜項)
Favorites
. . . Food: steamed dumplings
. . . Color: green
. . . Animal: horses
. . . Number: 2
. . . Flower: orchids
Family
. . . Mama, birth mother
. . . Papa, birth father
. . . Father, foster father
. . . Mother, foster mother
. . . Ning, foster sister
. . . Lian, foster sister
. . . Park, foster brother
. . . On, foster brother
. . . Xia, foster sister
Likes: flower arrangements, folk tales and myths, lounging, snow, writing letters, giving and receiving gifts
Dislikes: people disagreeing with her, exerting herself, heat, shellfish, committing to difficult tasks, being wrong
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Posted: Sun Feb 05, 2012 10:14 pm
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Posted: Sun Feb 05, 2012 10:27 pm
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Posted: Mon Feb 06, 2012 9:55 am
U p d a t e s
2/5/12 -- under construction.
2/6/12 -- refined and elaborated on Chan's personality traits: Devout, Thoughtful, Proud, Opinionated. Still need help on Empathy. Probably going to drop Defeated Perfectionist in favor of Lazy.
2/7/12 -- replaced Defeated Perfectionist personality trait for Lazy. Edited Empathetic trait and tried to show how each trait ties in with the others. Combined Traveling and Literature under the same hobby. Removed "horseback riding" and "nature walks" under Likes and added "giving and receiving gifts" and "lounging." Changed and expanded upon the Drama hobby. Added "being wrong" under Dislikes.
2/11/12 -- Made slight changes to Drama.
1/28/13 -- back after a long hiatus
4/24/16 -- checking to see if anyone's still around
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Posted: Mon Feb 06, 2012 6:21 pm
Hello > u>... Looks like I'll be talking to you about Chan, tonight!
Her appearance looks great, no qualms there, haha. Nice palette, relatively simple, I'm down with that. I noticed accessories says "coming soon," do you know what kinds of things you might ask for?
Personality Summary
Basically, Chan has no flaws. Even the traits you give her which are nearly a flaw usually salvage her in some way. Like her "opinionated" trait, which has the strongest negative wording, merely says she "politely and firmly informs someone else he is quite wrong." I'd love to see you include some real flaws; if it's not something she could be disliked or judged for, it's probably not a flaw. So hypocrisy, narrow-mindedness, grudges, these are all things which might fit her, but are more obviously negative traits. As it stands, the traits make excuses for her, so that none of them are really negative. Keep in mind: this is her student form, her basest personality; as she grows, her traits can shift. My Lunarian was an awful, selfish thing when she started out, but she learned how to care about others after some rather gruesome fights and a lot of bruises. So Chan obviously doesn't need to be selfish, but she definitely needs more depth to her! As much as she should be loved, she should also have the potential to be loathed, and not for being too empathetic and opinionated. However, there is a lot of good material in what you already have, so I'm confident that if you just flesh it out a little and make sure to weight good with bad more accurately you'll have an excellent Lunarian already!
Personality Details
Devout: Nice trait to have. Just a few questions which will hopefully allow you to elaborate upon this! If she's very devout, and makes a point to practice her ritual and prayer daily, does she dislike others who aren't as devout? Does she judge them for their lack of devotion? Why does being devout "come naturally" to her, does it have something to do with her past, or is it more to do with her perspective on life? Does she try to convert others? Basically I'd like to know about her motivation behind being devout (usually anyone who adheres to a religion with such devotion expects it to do something positive for them by the end, or some such notion), and how her devotion affects others.
Thoughtful: She must have a memory like a steel trap, I can hardly remember what day of the week it is >> What made her so good at meeting "everyone's needs"? And is she really good at this, or is it just her perception of situations? I can't imagine that anyone can always meet the needs of every other person, so is there a particular type of person she's less good at dealing with? What if someone feels for her romantically, and thus they are sulking in the group, etc... or perhaps they are avoiding her and their friends; what would she do in that case?
Empathetic: This is one of those cases where "too nice" can't really be a flaw. I see how it can be considered a "double-edged" sword, but in the end, it's not a true flaw in any significant way, so I think if it's a gift, it's really just a gift. Does Chan consider it to be a burden, or a blessing, in other words? How can she meet the needs of others if she doesn't have enough control over her own emotions?
Defeated Perfectionist: "Because learning comes naturally to her, it is one of the few things at which she excels" made me double-take; so far, it seems like she's good at almost everything, so what is it that she's not succeeding at ...? It says she's good at learning, but not at application, so wouldn't that affect her ability to practice her "thoughtfulness"? Because people have different ways of behaving and acting, she'd have to observe and learn how to deal with each person on a case by case basis given her empathy, but wouldn't this trait defeat the empathy? Or is it that caring for others bypasses her inability to put things she learns into practice? If you could elaborate on what "easily stressed" and "discouraged" mean that would be great. I mean, if this is supposed to be a flaw... she should probably have a more severe reaction to it than just "she feels a little bad."
Proud: It's all good that she's proud, and hates being belittled, but is it that all things she perceives as belittling make her angry? I mean, what if it's true? Would she acknowledge something that's true as being true, or merely lash out? How does she show her pride? Is she proud only in that sense, or also in the sense of family pride, etc?... What does she do, exactly, if someone takes a jab at her; will she be violent, lash out verbally, stop talking to them etc..?
Opinionated: Does she actually "know what's right" or does she just assume she is right? Is there anything or anyone that can make her hold her tongue? If she's empathetic, does she ever feel that someone else is right, or does her empathy "shut off" when someone has a differnt opinion? Basically, opinionated and empathetic clash, so I'd just like to see where one overlaps the other, and what happens when they do.
History and Allegiance
How did her father feel about the maternal side taking her away? Did it cause any bad blood? Well, there was already a lot, I suppose, but wouldn't he fight to get her back, or was he indifferent, etc?... Or did he see that it would be good for her? It says here that she was ingrained with unquestioning devotion to the Emperor, and earlier to the Goddess, so I was just curious: which devotion would override the other? Would she fight for the Emperor even if he seemed to be violating the Goddess' will, or would she take the Goddess' side? How did the sides of her family set aside their differences in order to consistently come to the same conclusions about Chan's future?
Hobbies: Literature sounds good! Would she ever read anything considered "pop-culture," or is it strictly classical and scholarly that she enjoys? Does she write any of her own? In terms of traveling, would this trait be better called something else?... Because she doesn't really travel, that's not her hobby, she seems to like to study the land and plan to travel. I'd say it's not a hobby yet, but more of a "wanderlust." The actual hobby involves the prep work. I'm not sure you could call it "Geography" though > A>;;... Jewelry-collecting as a hobby sounds fine. Does she prefer antiques, modern pieces, etc...? I think it's kind of great that she likes to actually just put them away rather than wear them, that's an awesome twist >) Drama sounds great, too! Does she have a particular favourite type of performance? I'm just gonna point out here that "learning," "acting" and "singing" are all listed as things in which she excels, but I only see one in her "hobbies," so as much as you can, please remember that ideally she would be most skilled in one thing and then less skilled in the others to reflect that. If things can move her to tears, and there's no trait in her that indicates she has control over herself, how can she be quite good at acting on any kind of significant basis? Perhaps you can clarify what exactly "quite good" means.
Final Comments: So far, looking pretty good, seems like you have a solid base. Focus on making her a little more cohesive: in her "miscellaneous" section, there are a lot of topics which the rest of her profile doesn't touch on at all. I would consider taking "travel" out as a hobby, and instead putting that in miscellaneous as a sort of aspiration/wanderlust thing, and then you can bump horseback riding into hobbies instead, to justify / elaborate upon her misc love of horses and enjoyment of horseback riding? In terms of her religiosity, per se, what kind of a worshipper is she? Is she humble and discreet, or very focused on ritual? How respectful is she of others, given she is so opinionated? So far I'd just like to see her punched up a notch; there's nothing really wrong with her, but I think she could have a lot more depth. Try to give her real motivations! She has to want things, right? So one easy question you could and should ask yourself to give the profile more focus and drive: What does Chan ultimately want to achieve? Is it power, success, devotion? What are her goals for the Academy? How does she feel about the War? The war is a big, big part of shop lore, so if you can, please try to include more about her perspective and potential role!
If you have any questions about any of this, please feel free to quote me o uo.
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Posted: Mon Feb 06, 2012 6:59 pm
Face your demons
Hello > u>... Looks like I'll be talking to you about Chan, tonight!
Her appearance looks great, no qualms there, haha. Nice palette, relatively simple, I'm down with that. I noticed accessories says "coming soon," do you know what kinds of things you might ask for?
Personality Summary
Basically, Chan has no flaws. Even the traits you give her which are nearly a flaw usually salvage her in some way. Like her "opinionated" trait, which has the strongest negative wording, merely says she "politely and firmly informs someone else he is quite wrong." I'd love to see you include some real flaws; if it's not something she could be disliked or judged for, it's probably not a flaw. So hypocrisy, narrow-mindedness, grudges, these are all things which might fit her, but are more obviously negative traits. As it stands, the traits make excuses for her, so that none of them are really negative. Keep in mind: this is her student form, her basest personality; as she grows, her traits can shift. My Lunarian was an awful, selfish thing when she started out, but she learned how to care about others after some rather gruesome fights and a lot of bruises. So Chan obviously doesn't need to be selfish, but she definitely needs more depth to her! As much as she should be loved, she should also have the potential to be loathed, and not for being too empathetic and opinionated. However, there is a lot of good material in what you already have, so I'm confident that if you just flesh it out a little and make sure to weight good with bad more accurately you'll have an excellent Lunarian already!
Personality Details
Devout: Nice trait to have. Just a few questions which will hopefully allow you to elaborate upon this! If she's very devout, and makes a point to practice her ritual and prayer daily, does she dislike others who aren't as devout? Does she judge them for their lack of devotion? Why does being devout "come naturally" to her, does it have something to do with her past, or is it more to do with her perspective on life? Does she try to convert others? Basically I'd like to know about her motivation behind being devout (usually anyone who adheres to a religion with such devotion expects it to do something positive for them by the end, or some such notion), and how her devotion affects others.
Thoughtful: She must have a memory like a steel trap, I can hardly remember what day of the week it is >> What made her so good at meeting "everyone's needs"? And is she really good at this, or is it just her perception of situations? I can't imagine that anyone can always meet the needs of every other person, so is there a particular type of person she's less good at dealing with? What if someone feels for her romantically, and thus they are sulking in the group, etc... or perhaps they are avoiding her and their friends; what would she do in that case?
Empathetic: This is one of those cases where "too nice" can't really be a flaw. I see how it can be considered a "double-edged" sword, but in the end, it's not a true flaw in any significant way, so I think if it's a gift, it's really just a gift. Does Chan consider it to be a burden, or a blessing, in other words? How can she meet the needs of others if she doesn't have enough control over her own emotions?
Defeated Perfectionist: "Because learning comes naturally to her, it is one of the few things at which she excels" made me double-take; so far, it seems like she's good at almost everything, so what is it that she's not succeeding at ...? It says she's good at learning, but not at application, so wouldn't that affect her ability to practice her "thoughtfulness"? Because people have different ways of behaving and acting, she'd have to observe and learn how to deal with each person on a case by case basis given her empathy, but wouldn't this trait defeat the empathy? Or is it that caring for others bypasses her inability to put things she learns into practice? If you could elaborate on what "easily stressed" and "discouraged" mean that would be great. I mean, if this is supposed to be a flaw... she should probably have a more severe reaction to it than just "she feels a little bad."
Proud: It's all good that she's proud, and hates being belittled, but is it that all things she perceives as belittling make her angry? I mean, what if it's true? Would she acknowledge something that's true as being true, or merely lash out? How does she show her pride? Is she proud only in that sense, or also in the sense of family pride, etc?... What does she do, exactly, if someone takes a jab at her; will she be violent, lash out verbally, stop talking to them etc..?
Opinionated: Does she actually "know what's right" or does she just assume she is right? Is there anything or anyone that can make her hold her tongue? If she's empathetic, does she ever feel that someone else is right, or does her empathy "shut off" when someone has a differnt opinion? Basically, opinionated and empathetic clash, so I'd just like to see where one overlaps the other, and what happens when they do.
Thank you for taking the time and making such extensive topics. I really appreciate it, especially since I didn't realize how much of an art it is!
Okay, I'm probably going to really need your help, please bear with me.
I'm happy to flesh out her devout trait. Thank you for the suggestions, I'll certainly take them on board.
You're right about thoughtful: she is thoughtful in the way that she perceives is thoughtful. So she will generally do for others what she would like to be done for her (golden rule), but she doesn't necessarily know what other people would expect in a certain situation, so it might not be the right thing at all. As for remembering birthdays, I'll add that she keeps a calender where she writes down significant dates. Because she likes receiving gifts, she likes to give them to others. It's what she perceives as being thoughtful. So . . . is "thoughtful" the right word?
Empathetic: I'd really like to keep this one if I can work it in, so I'll try to explain it better. It might be better called sensitivity . . . . or . . .? She is sincere in her concern for others, but there is a line where she can become too concerned with trying to "fix" them. Some people don't want to be fixed. Plus, who made it Chan's responsibility to fix others? She's not perfect herself. And her meddling could make things even worse, besides alienating the subject of her "empathy." What word would be better used to describe this trait?
Defeated Perfectionist: I'll try to elaborate taking your suggestions into consideration. Chan's good at book-learning: history, literature, some philosophy. She can read up on how to paint or play an instrument or mold pottery. But she can't take that knowledge and make her hands do it. Similar to "jack of all trades but master of none." She's not athletic at all. Perhaps I can take this trait and re-work it to make it "laziness," or tie it into laziness somehow, what do you think?
For her pride, great suggestions, I can work in more detailing to make it clearer.
I'll work on the opinionated trait, too, to show how or when it clashes with the other traits.
(More in next post.)
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Posted: Mon Feb 06, 2012 7:35 pm
Face your demons History and Allegiance How did her father feel about the maternal side taking her away? Did it cause any bad blood? Well, there was already a lot, I suppose, but wouldn't he fight to get her back, or was he indifferent, etc?... Or did he see that it would be good for her? It says here that she was ingrained with unquestioning devotion to the Emperor, and earlier to the Goddess, so I was just curious: which devotion would override the other? Would she fight for the Emperor even if he seemed to be violating the Goddess' will, or would she take the Goddess' side? How did the sides of her family set aside their differences in order to consistently come to the same conclusions about Chan's future? Hobbies: Literature sounds good! Would she ever read anything considered "pop-culture," or is it strictly classical and scholarly that she enjoys? Does she write any of her own? In terms of traveling, would this trait be better called something else?... Because she doesn't really travel, that's not her hobby, she seems to like to study the land and plan to travel. I'd say it's not a hobby yet, but more of a "wanderlust." The actual hobby involves the prep work. I'm not sure you could call it "Geography" though > A>;;... Jewelry-collecting as a hobby sounds fine. Does she prefer antiques, modern pieces, etc...? I think it's kind of great that she likes to actually just put them away rather than wear them, that's an awesome twist >) Drama sounds great, too! Does she have a particular favourite type of performance? I'm just gonna point out here that "learning," "acting" and "singing" are all listed as things in which she excels, but I only see one in her "hobbies," so as much as you can, please remember that ideally she would be most skilled in one thing and then less skilled in the others to reflect that. If things can move her to tears, and there's no trait in her that indicates she has control over herself, how can she be quite good at acting on any kind of significant basis? Perhaps you can clarify what exactly "quite good" means. Final Comments: So far, looking pretty good, seems like you have a solid base. Focus on making her a little more cohesive: in her "miscellaneous" section, there are a lot of topics which the rest of her profile doesn't touch on at all. I would consider taking "travel" out as a hobby, and instead putting that in miscellaneous as a sort of aspiration/wanderlust thing, and then you can bump horseback riding into hobbies instead, to justify / elaborate upon her misc love of horses and enjoyment of horseback riding? In terms of her religiosity, per se, what kind of a worshipper is she? Is she humble and discreet, or very focused on ritual? How respectful is she of others, given she is so opinionated? So far I'd just like to see her punched up a notch; there's nothing really wrong with her, but I think she could have a lot more depth. Try to give her real motivations! She has to want things, right? So one easy question you could and should ask yourself to give the profile more focus and drive: What does Chan ultimately want to achieve? Is it power, success, devotion? What are her goals for the Academy? How does she feel about the War? The war is a big, big part of shop lore, so if you can, please try to include more about her perspective and potential role!
You've given me a lot to better mold her history, I'm excited to start. :3
For "traveling" or "wanderlust," maybe I could call it "anthropology"? Or is that too vague? The study of people in different places, their cultures, languages, dress, traditions, etc. And a desire to visit and see these things firsthand.
She's not good at singing per se, she just has a pleasant voice; normal. Maybe if that's the case, it's better not to mention it, since it's not note-worthy. I think learning could fall under anthropology-wanderlust, what do you think? I can edit that so it works.
Regarding crying easily but also being a good actress: I will try to elaborate on this because I don't want to get rid of it. I know it's possible because that's how I am! Would it be good to say that she is a good actress because of her empathy, i.e. being able to put herself in others' places and trying to get in their minds and situations so she can act accordingly?
I think if I can take your suggestion about what Chan wants out of life and what is her overall purpose in the war, it will be a lot easier to fill in the blanks above.
Thanks for your time!
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Posted: Tue Feb 07, 2012 5:13 am
Just as a note (sorry if I missed this). You have listed her profession as a Priest but not said which kind of conduit she is. Conduits come in two types, ones who deal with living souls and ones that deal with dead souls. Since there is already a lot of dead soul conduits in Lunaria, I would suggest making her a living one for the sake of variety, but at the end of the day its up to you. Everything you need to know can be found in the information section of the guild.
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Posted: Tue Feb 07, 2012 5:58 am
BikiCakes Just as a note (sorry if I missed this). You have listed her profession as a Priest but not said which kind of conduit she is. Conduits come in two types, ones who deal with living souls and ones that deal with dead souls. Since there is already a lot of dead soul conduits in Lunaria, I would suggest making her a living one for the sake of variety, but at the end of the day its up to you. Everything you need to know can be found in the information section of the guild.
I did mention it in the history, but I'll make it clearer.
And yes, she's a Living Soul Conduit! <3 3nodding
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