((Agh... oki so now I'm back... yes, didn't know I would be able to get more time online today, so ignore my last post will ya
xd But now I have a few things I'm not that happy with after reading your last posts Chaos...
I'll quote you a little:
Quote:
just remember that you are human...and aren't some super human thing
Now back to you or rather your character...
I don't see a single human element in your character... he's over powerfull, he seems flawless and it's impossible to beat him... I'm getting a bit irritated, no human thing can completely change their appearance
scream I also think supernatural abilities are fun (I'm thinking Kenshin style abilites now) but there's also a limit to that and I think that limit should be a lot clearer.
Besides, how the hell can a 15 year old be that good? And how can such a young boy have been able to kill millions of people, it's completely impossible!!! I realize he might be very talented, but come on
gonk I also know and accept the fact that the one making the RP can be more powerfull than others, but this time I just had to say something... it's making me crazy
xp I hope you're not too offended...))
Yumi wasn't fast enough, she couldn't stop the dagger from sinking into Kai's leg. But like through a miracle she seemed to be able to escape. She carried the moaning boy into the safehouse the officer had led her to.
"Don't worry... Don't worry... Don't worry..." Yumi repeated inumerable times.
There inside she could finally see just how bad his leg was. And it was bad, very bad. It took a few minutes before she realized what she had to do, but only a few seconds for her to act. There was a white glimmering, a gurgling noice followed by a thud. After that you could hear Yumi moving over to the bed.
"I'm sorry..." One single tear rolled over her cheek and fell down on Kais horrified face. The next second all the muscles in his face contracted then relaxed.
Yumi silently left the room and whiped the blood from her katana. I need new swords, these're no longer enough. These are a memory of my old life, I need to get rid of them.
Several hours later, an officer and a young boy were found brutally murdered.