Hi Sweeny! I apologize ahead of time for any typos or odd autocorrects I am on my iPad and it does not like me at all.
That said ONWARD TO CRITTING.
Hobbies look good; they're well thought-out and well-explained. :3
I like how his virtues and flaws balance each other; however, we usually like to see an even umber of Virtues and Flaws - so 4 and 4 or 3 and 3. I know it's a little nitpicky, but perhaps a flaw can be pulled out of his "Man of Action" virtue? He overextends himself for the people he cares about, maybe? Or he doesn't really know how to strike a balance between doing nothing and doing
ALL THE THINGS? Just some ideas!
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