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 Posted: Fri Aug 30, 2013 5:42 pm
Hmm I don't mind Bankai Ability One lasting four posts, just widen the area up a another ten or fifteen yards.. Ability two on Bankai is fine. Ability three seems good too, except that the creatures themselves need a post limit they can stay out, in the event that they don't end up taking any shots at all.
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Posted: Fri Aug 30, 2013 5:49 pm
iChan-Chan Hmm I don't mind Bankai Ability One lasting four posts, just widen the area up a another ten or fifteen yards.. Ability two on Bankai is fine. Ability three seems good too, except that the creatures themselves need a post limit they can stay out, in the event that they don't end up taking any shots at all. fixed! And i gave them names so I don't just end up calling them minions xD.
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Posted: Fri Aug 30, 2013 5:56 pm
Hmm alrighty then. Well eight posts is much too long. two or three should be plenty I believe. Do that and let me know when you're done and I think you'll be good to go. Be watchful for counter reviews from Mochii as well, as her word is greater than mine.
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Posted: Fri Aug 30, 2013 6:02 pm
iChan-Chan Hmm alrighty then. Well eight posts is much too long. two or three should be plenty I believe. Do that and let me know when you're done and I think you'll be good to go. Be watchful for counter reviews from Mochii as well, as her word is greater than mine. Done !
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Posted: Fri Aug 30, 2013 6:07 pm
Okay then! You are now officially approved, it's been a long road but one you're done with!
Just be on the look out in case Mochii sees something I missed and be sure to keep in mind that as the guild Captain, her word is law.
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Posted: Fri Aug 30, 2013 6:15 pm
iChan-Chan Okay then! You are now officially approved, it's been a long road but one you're done with! Just be on the look out in case Mochii sees something I missed and be sure to keep in mind that as the guild Captain, her word is law. YES CHANCHAN-SAMA -BOWS- emotion_dowant
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Posted: Mon Sep 02, 2013 9:19 am
Alright, sorry for the wait, but here's my counterreview, as I still see some issues that need to be addressed. Cute avi btw. whee iBrainsharted 2. Chaos Expulse: Rin is able to manipulate and alter the interdimensional space within Kurogane's world/dimension. This allows Rin to multiply, divide, and manipulate her own shadow within a 50 yard radius. (Take for example: using shadow to create a form of a girl or a shield etc). Her creations last for as long as they can handle attacks. For example, a shield will typically hold up longer than if she had created multiple clones of herself. Cooldown is 3 user posts before this ability can be used again. iBrainsharted 4. Obscure Discharge: If an enemy's attack manages to hit one of her shadow manipulated clones or matter, it not only takes the hit for Rin, but the attack is sent to Kurogane's dimension where Rin may release back the attack at any given point in time, with her own reiatsu melded into it. The longer the attack stays in zanpakutou's dimension, the stronger it becomes. She can hold it for up to 5 user posts before the attack dissipates and no longer becomes feasible to use. (Cooldown of 5 user posts.) iBrainsharted 1.-Sovereign of Darkness: Lucifer's Shadow Gate Is able to open Kurogane's dimension and release an attack that affects the surrounding area (25 yards) This area of effect constrains an opponent to the ground and only allows them to move around within those ten yards. This lasts up to 4 posts and has a cooldown of 5 user posts. iBrainsharted 3. Sovereign of Darkness: Decimatio Rin opens Kurogane's dimension and releases creatures/monsters to fight by her side. She can summon 1-2 creatures: 1)Belial (takes on the form of an dark angel) 2)Ubel ( A monstrous looking minotaur) They have the ability to redirect attacks spontaneously (they cannot control the direction they redirect an attack). They are able to do this about twice before they are sucked back into their dimension. These attacks are redirected based on location. If the attack is sent within melee range, it will most likely be redirected right back to the opponent. Whereas longer range, it will be redirected straight up into the air, or around that area. They are allowed to be out for 3 user posts. (Cooldown of 5 user posts before it can be used again)
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Posted: Mon Sep 02, 2013 9:36 am
Fank you :3 I like yours as well o uo. I 1. They are used as a "shield" or defense, considering one of my other shikai "creates weapons". So the other clones that my character creates cannot do physical damage ^^. As for the number...would 15 clones be too much (considering they can't do physical damage)? For the lasting I would say up to 3 posts. And for the cooldown, 5? 2. Hmm, I see what you're saying xD. I would hold non-physical attacks. (Like a kido spell of some sort) 3. I didn't think it was op . w. They can still move around and dodge it on the ground. Should I increase the area (From 10 yards to.... maybe 30 or 40) ? 4. I figured they would just follow my character o wo. And yes, they can redirect physical blows as well.
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Posted: Mon Sep 02, 2013 10:07 am
Fifteen is a lot. I wouldn't even go past five owo. If you had fifteen, you could probably just form a huge meat shield around yourself.
As for the Obscure Discharge, state the highest number of Kido you could hold, and/or the strongest Zanpakuto attack it can hold, i.e. Shikai, Bankai.
The problem I have with Lucifer's Shadow Gate is the fact that if you're fighting with someone, you can use this ability, and then immediately follow up with some super powerful Bankai move that has a range greater than 10 yards. Could you detail the ability more? Why are they constrained to ten yards? Would they hit some invisible wall or something when they tried to go past said ten yards, etc.
And for Decimatio, I meant that if I sent a Kido spell at one of them, at what range could it be deflected. Ten feet from the creature? Five feet? Or direct contact?
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Posted: Mon Sep 02, 2013 10:27 am
I fixed Chaos Expulse and Obscure discharge! Lucifer's shadow gate is like a black circle on the floor that acts like a magnet almost! . w. Their feet will only stay in that circle, but they can slide around in that area xD Their feet are bound to the gate (circle) o wo For Decimatio, it could be redirected/deflected at any range. They just can't control the direction of where it goes.
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Posted: Tue Sep 03, 2013 7:50 am
Edits look good. Just one more issue.
I still think Lucifer's Shadow Gate needs a drawback. Like, maybe, some way to escape once hit? I know that sounds like it defeats the whole point of the ability, but trying to find a way to work around it.
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Posted: Tue Sep 03, 2013 6:14 pm
Mochii Iced Tea Edits look good. Just one more issue.
I still think Lucifer's Shadow Gate needs a drawback. Like, maybe, some way to escape once hit? I know that sounds like it defeats the whole point of the ability, but trying to find a way to work around it. Hrmmmm, maybe the gate actually has like ...little tentacles that grab your feet so they can actually hit/attack that and try to free themselves? xD
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Posted: Tue Sep 03, 2013 7:39 pm
Sounds good. Once that edit is made, you're approved XD.
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