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 Posted: Sat Sep 22, 2007 10:10 pm
First off, let me admit that yeah, this is from a tabletop RPG again. xD But before you jump down my throats, I DO intend to write it into a story. xD Slightly modified of course, but the general idea will be the same.
I think this is the saddest I've had so far. But also the funniest. I was laughing and tearing up at the same time, so hardcore that I almost barfed. xD
Situation--
The team had been trying to recover an artifact that had been stolen from the family house, along with the armor of one of our teammates, for about two weeks. We were at a dead end, the artifact had apparently disappeared, and the armor was locked away in the mercenary guild.
So amidst the general atmosphere of, "well, we're ********," Zarr decides, "I'm a damned sneaky b***h, I bet I can at least get the armor back."
So he goes to the mercenary guild, and finds it -- of course -- very heavily guarded. So he rolls up his sleeves and starts scaling one of the outer stone walls. He gets to the top...and...CRACK! A fifty-pound boulder gives way, spilling him back to ground along with it.
Out of dumb luck, he manages to avoid injury, and duck off into the shadows as the guards rush over, wondering why the hell their wall is suddenly crumbling. Zarr scales the opposite wall without further mishap, and gets into the compound.
Once inside, he's faced with a hallway -- laughter to the left, silence to the right. So he heads towards the right, goes downstairs...finds a store room, an underground water source, and a barracks. He has to hide to avoid attention a few times, too. xD
To the left, he discovers a mess hall with 30-40 people in it, drinking and partying...along with the armor, up where everyone can see it.
Zarr decides he's got to distract them, and goes back to the store room. He collects three small barrels of firepowder, leaves two at the top of the stairs, and creates a trail leading from the barrels to the center of the hallway.
He takes a torch and lights the trail.
And very quickly learned that firepowder is NOTHING like gunpowder. A tiny amount of it will fire a cannon. So in short, the trail he lit EXPLODES, burning the ******** out of him.
He has exactly half a second to register total surprise and "oh shi--" before the trail ignites the barrels.
THAT explosion vaporized him completely.
The explosion from the two barrels sets off the HUNDREDS in the store room, levelling pretty much the entire city block.
...the good news?
The armor had special properties, and survived the blast. It was picked up by the rest of the team that same night.
And the artifact turned up in the ruins of a levelled tower the next day.
gonk
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So, what was the saddest death you've ever written/ever will write? What was the purpose of it?
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Posted: Sun Sep 23, 2007 6:22 am
Kokoro Kiko was executed at the start of the second 'season' of Foxglove by a group of nasty kitsune who took great pleasure in seeing her die, slowly and painfully, in front of her lover.
Reason: the kitsune council realised they had to punish Shigure (the lover) for basically screwing up the world. And Kokoro's family had decided they didn't like her, either. So they killed two foxes with one stone - or nearly did, as Shigure almost committed suicide/died from grief several times afterwards.
It's sad because... she really didn't need to die. I just needed something for Shigure to do, and I didn't want normality to rear its ugly head. If anyone's investigated my fanfictions (god, please no!) you may have realised that this happens:
Characters: "Well, everything is back to normal again! Isn't it nice, Illidan?"
Illidan: "Sure is. Now I'm going to kill myself."
Why? So that they can spend time bringing him back for another crrrraaaazzyy misadventure, of course...
I sicken myself.
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Posted: Sun Sep 23, 2007 10:49 am
EDIT: About the Mary-Sue thing-this story was from when I was in fifth grade, so don't judge. 'Kenna' from my current story scored only a nine, so... don't think that allll my characters are like Tsuki. sweatdrop xd
Even though she scores a 99 on a Mary-Sue test (No. Really.), Tsuki's death(s) were the worst. When I created her story I was OBSESSED with tragic, romantic deaths. And these aren't even that good.
I kill her like... three times.
But the second and third time (she dies FOR REAL the third time) were sad. The second time was in the eighth 'book' and like... twenty years after the first time, because the eighth 'book' is about her kids. (She has eight.)
Anyway, everbody defeats the evil kingdom and banish it from theirs. Happy-yayness and crap, until the minion she let free comes back and kills her infront of her twu-wuv/husband, friends, family, and children. It's sad because she was just about to get her life together.
Then, the third time is about like three thousand years later and she's reborn and stuff, then they allll have to die (the royals, I mean- her friends, brother, reborn twu wuv), and get everyone out of the solar system because all the planets/the sun blow up.
They all knew it too. And they're all bitter but do it anyway. And they know they'll never ever be reborn- they are really and truly gonna die, something they've never done.
And they don't come back. I kill them dead that time.
Anyway, as perfect and flat as she is, if you ever READ her death(s), they're sad. They don't sound it here, I know, but trust me, they are.
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Posted: Sun Sep 23, 2007 11:06 am
I'd have to say that Nik's death is probably the saddest for me. I'm not really going to describe it well here, but I was feeling really bad. XD After he gets a letter from his fiancee saying that she doesn't want anything to do with him anymore, and to add insult to injury, commits suicide [Nik doesn't know she was killed by the Nazi death squads for associating with a resistance fighter, and they covered it up], he just kind of lapses into a vicious cycle of anger and apathy. He turns himself to self-mutilation and lashing at anything he sees. Basically goes into a state of emotional and psychological deterioration. Of course, like many others that fought with him, he was sent to a prisoner camp. He ends up dying of abuse, both to himself and from others, about a year or two after the war ends, in complete loneliness and having accomplished nothing but participating in the Reich and dying because of it.
And then, I'm not to sure about the other one. I don't think I'm going to kill Jo. But what I was thinking was, since he's gay, he'd eventually get figured out by his sergeant who turns him over to the Nazi police. They slap a pink triangle on his heart and shoot him and his lover while they held each other.
And I suck at describing. XD My deaths are so cliche, but I'm going to iron them out.
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Posted: Sun Sep 23, 2007 2:28 pm
I think my saddest death is probably Richard. After going batshit insane, murdering the prince, and scaring everyone (straight down to the last decrepit old monk) out of the temple in Emanon, he eventually falls down an enormous flight of stairs and cracks his head open.
It's sad because Richard was a pretty decent fellow before he lost his mind, and the only reason he fell down the stairs in the first place was because the spirit that made him go mad got bored and decided Nathan would make a better pawn in the long run. And really, falling down the stairs is such a lame-a** way to die. xp
Then, of course, Nathan finds Richard dead at the foot of the stairs and is completely devastated--he really (*cough* REALLY) liked him. Vitae and Nathan wind up burying Richard in a hidden spot in one of the temple courtyards to keep his body from being desecrated by the vengeful masses.
The only other death in the story is a simple throat-slitting, so no award there.
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Posted: Sun Sep 23, 2007 5:01 pm
Raincrow -- I actually find the stairs thing damned funny, because I use that in one of my stories. XD Sort of.
Zarr was actually Mr. McNormal until a rebellion broke out and people attacked the castle. In the chaos, he managed to TRIP. Right down a flight of stairs and crack his head open.
Everyone kinda figured he was dead and let him lie there. xD;;
But he survived and went on to be absolutely batshit insane as a result of injuries sustained. xD
Someone up there also mentioned the Mary-Sue test...xD Just wanted to add that I just ran Zarr through that, and I'm absolutely shocked. He scored a TWO. rofl
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Posted: Sun Sep 23, 2007 6:13 pm
... *tries to tell herself that it's the magic making the Mary-Sue scores so high* gonk
Most of the deaths in my stories are sad because they could have been prevented. razz Erin's is not one of them; she was screwed from the start. biggrin Bad Luck Magic+Batshit god after you for being the vessel of another god+Being too ADHD to live=DEAD DEAD DEAD DEAD DEAD DEAD DEAD. heart
...I actually feel better about killing my characters off then abusing them. I think something's wrong with me.
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Posted: Sun Sep 23, 2007 8:02 pm
Aw, that's a hard one . . .
I got a bunch of sad deaths. Lets see . . . um, today, the saddest is . . . Randy's. Even though I imagine I've told this story before:
Randy and the group are hanging out with all the creatures of the night in a big underground complex ruled tentatively by Nox. There's a huge commons area where all the creatures come to hang out and you have to pass through it to get to most other places in the complex.
Randy walks through there one fine day and hears a terrified scream. Being the hero he is, of course he glances around and sees a kishi with a girl he recognizes from school dangling from his claw.
Randy poofs her to his side and has a long argument with the kishi and his buddies about eating poor little girls and the monstrosities that are people. BUT he does make it away with the girl. He calms her down and makes an effort to remember her name before walking her back to Dae's city. He even walks her further in than he had to just so he can make sure she can get home okay.
And then . . . he gets hit in the face by one of Dae's guards.
Randy wakes up in Dae's palace, bound with iron chains and spells to restrict his magic. He spits blood on Dae's nice white suit, refusing to bow to the man's blunt manipulation.
Dae gets real pissed, grabs Randy by the scruff of his neck, flies him to Nox's complex, and rings the doorbell. When Nox answers he says, "I just wanted you to see how your friend here will hurt you." He raises his sword.
"Say goodbye, Randy."
And the last thing Randy says is, "I WILL NOT OBEY YOU!" before his head gets whacked off like a croquet ball in front of Nox and everyone else crowded at the door.
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Posted: Mon Sep 24, 2007 3:28 am
I'm offically an a*****e. Randy's death made me lawl. sweatdrop Of course, that's because I only read the description; the actual scene would probably make me cry like a baby. Yeah, I'm weird.
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Posted: Mon Sep 24, 2007 6:01 pm
He's a little bitter about that now, actually. I haven't given him the chance to gripe at me about it yet.
In the real thing I threw in lots of words like "defiant" and "cold calculation" and "loyalty" and it was all very wonderful and rebellious of him.
He just thinks I'm vicious cause I let him save the girl, but then it turns out his own chivalrous heroism brings him his death. I don't think he fully appreciates the irony there. rolleyes
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Posted: Tue Sep 25, 2007 12:48 pm
... If I ever killed Aeru, that would top my list. (even though he's a bit of an evil b*****d)
So I would have to say that Stephen's death is the saddest. Mostly because Jack kills him because Coyote says he could die in a really painful way, and then has him die in a really painful way ANYWAYS.
I don't go in big for character death much anymore. I'll ditch them, tear them to shreds, whatever, but not kill them.
Come to think of it, Feragel's death is pretty sad. Mostly because in the end we realize he really doesn't have a whole lot of redeeming qualities, and it looked like he was gonna for a while.
It's not a death, technically, but I wrote a twisted fairy tale where there was this princess who never really woke up after being put to sleep (she was insane) and the part where she was put to sleep was pretty sad.
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Posted: Sun Dec 28, 2008 3:16 pm
The saddest (and only Major) death in the story is the death of Forrest, who is kidnapped and tortured, and winds up falling in love with/being saved by the kidnapper's sister (the Mc). The two of them run into the woods and hide for two days. Eventually, the older brother finds them, beats Forrest to death, and banishes the sister from the house. After watching the brother being arrested, she decides to protect him and her younger siblings by chopping up Forrest with an ace and dumping his body parts in the lake (Named "Mike Lake" by the local kids, after a boy who drowned there the summer before).
The girl (Erin) then goes to the truck road and may or may not kill herself (She puts a fire cracker in her mouth and lays down on the road, but the last sentence is her admitting, as she lights the fire cracker, that she doubts she'll have the guts to do it).
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Posted: Sun Dec 28, 2008 10:47 pm
The saddest death so far in the Royal Contest is [spoiler!]Petunia, the princess's pet iguana = a big lizard that is immediately mistaken for a dragon. Basically, the guards go to the princess's room to go look for clues because she's mysteriously disappeared like good princesses are wont to do, when they're attacked by a big leezard.
The leezard isn't happy, and manages to severely hurt a non-named NPC guard. (Sorry, no cookie for you Mr. Guard. You don't get to die pointlessly.)
Then [omg spoiler!] they find out that the big lizard was, in fact, the princess's pet which had been given a potion that makes creatures grow big and mean[/no more spoilers].
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