First I want to thank Xavier Damien for making me a Crew Member smile Much appreciated lol.
Second of all, I'll post a few of my poems and I'd appreciate any criticism you can offer smile
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Love in Affliction
I wrote this about my best friend and I, we care deeply for each other. But life's gotten in the way. I hope you enjoy it smile Any criticism is welcomed. By the way I've gotten a lot of tips on using meters, and whatnot. Personally I feel using meters is a little binding so I don't use them much. Thanks smile
Day after day you run through my mind
You’re definately one of a kind
The colour of your hair
That smile I love to see you wear
But I can’t keep thinking about you
I can only hope you’re thinking of me too
You’re the one who broke my heart
You’re the one who let me fall apart
Why do I keep trusting you like this?
Is it true, ignorance is bliss?
I need to remember but never forget
Put all this behind me and have not one regret
Every word I spoke was true, no word was a lie
You knew it too, yet you still told me goodbye
Nothing is perfect, but if you care to let me boast
You definately came pretty damn close
But you just turned around and walked away
Never even gave me the time of day
You told me you felt the same then disappeared
I waited for all my questions to be cleared
The tears spilled over, flowing down my cheek
I wish I could tell you but I guess I’m too weak
I love you now, I love you always
I can tell you now it’s not a phase
I know you have to go, you want to go
I understand, you know that I know
Life’s taken us in different directions
This tells us our love’s in affliction
I want you to know, I want you to care
Know that I will always be there
No matter what you decide to do
I want you to decide what’s right for you
Where ever you go I want you to be happy
Even if it means going on without me
Second of all, I'll post a few of my poems and I'd appreciate any criticism you can offer smile
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Love in Affliction
I wrote this about my best friend and I, we care deeply for each other. But life's gotten in the way. I hope you enjoy it smile Any criticism is welcomed. By the way I've gotten a lot of tips on using meters, and whatnot. Personally I feel using meters is a little binding so I don't use them much. Thanks smile
Day after day you run through my mind
You’re definately one of a kind
The colour of your hair
That smile I love to see you wear
But I can’t keep thinking about you
I can only hope you’re thinking of me too
You’re the one who broke my heart
You’re the one who let me fall apart
Why do I keep trusting you like this?
Is it true, ignorance is bliss?
I need to remember but never forget
Put all this behind me and have not one regret
Every word I spoke was true, no word was a lie
You knew it too, yet you still told me goodbye
Nothing is perfect, but if you care to let me boast
You definately came pretty damn close
But you just turned around and walked away
Never even gave me the time of day
You told me you felt the same then disappeared
I waited for all my questions to be cleared
The tears spilled over, flowing down my cheek
I wish I could tell you but I guess I’m too weak
I love you now, I love you always
I can tell you now it’s not a phase
I know you have to go, you want to go
I understand, you know that I know
Life’s taken us in different directions
This tells us our love’s in affliction
I want you to know, I want you to care
Know that I will always be there
No matter what you decide to do
I want you to decide what’s right for you
Where ever you go I want you to be happy
Even if it means going on without me
