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Groucho and Karl

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PostPosted: Thu Sep 25, 2008 1:22 pm


They sound slightly emo, but tell me what you think.

Raven Heart

In a church, I sit.
I pick up a book,
though I cannot read it.
Setting it down, I cannot pick it up.
I fly far far away.
Over a house I fly,
How nicely they sleep,
How nicely I fly.
Raven Heart, Human Heart.
Both break, both stop.
But mine still beats.

Untitled

Oh what a day.
I lay here, waiting for this moment.
The things i've seen, The things I've done.
Open the door, step into the outside.
Close it, stay on the inside.
Which will you choose?
The one with me, or the one with a chance?
Fall out.
PostPosted: Sun Sep 28, 2008 9:27 am


I liked the first one, but the second one I am still undecided.

Kenutsu Yasashiku
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