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Posted: Fri Nov 28, 2008 6:38 pm
This is a story that I hope to have published some day. DO NOT STEAL!!!
Title: The Night Express
Book blurb: 100 years after a world crippling war, civilization has collapsed. Nyx, a woman with no past, finds herself in a post apocalyptic world were there are enemies around every corner: Renegades, Inasna, and maybe even some within Central itself. James, a techno-path, must uncover the past to lead everyone into the future. Kira, a girl with a knack for getting into trouble and an even greater ability to get out again, manages to get herself in a game that children shouldn't be involved in. A rumor brews about a weapon left over from the war and a race against time begins in which Nyx must find the weapon before the enemy does... whoever they are.
Rating: PG13
I have been known to take character requests and place minor characters into stories. If you have an idea for a character that would be great in this world and you want to share it, go ahead. I might use it. But be warned! Once, long ago, I wrote a story where the majority of the characters were made by my friends and I let them decide if they were ok with that happened to their character. I had to shut down the story because my 'friends' (two of them) decided they didn't like the direction the story was going and insisted that I changed it or take their characters out. And it wasn't like I was killing off their characters or anything, it was basically the reason why everyone else other than the heroine in the story was chosen. It was an idea that my brother came up with and it was freakin' sweet.

What he said. So I dropped the story, making a lot of people upset. So, if you want a character in any of my stories, I'll try not to kill them off and keep them as close as what you want them to be but ultimately they are MINE. Okay? If you want a character in the story, send me a profile of the character! I'll put a skeleton profile after I'm done posting the first chapter. Either post it here or pm me.
Okay, on to the first chapter.
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Posted: Fri Nov 28, 2008 6:38 pm
(I'm going to be posting in parts. Feel free to post in between parts to tell me what you think.) The New Dawn
11:30 pm, 4 hours and 47 minutes before dawnIt was still raining when she woke up. It had been raining for three nights now and she was running out of time. If it doesn’t stop raining in an hour, she mused, I’ll go on anyway.12:26 am, 3 hours and 51 minutes before dawnShe spent the next hour pouring over an old holographic map that kept blinking in and out if she so much as twitched. She hated old age technology. She would have made better use of an old fashion drawing. Underground or above ground? Neither one was a very good option in her opinion. Death by being attacked by the Inasna and possibly be infected herself (or devoured: they didn’t talk about it in the camps but the recovering Inasna in Dane’s caravan ate rats raw if they didn’t stop him), or be melted. Or I could blow up as the case may be. I have no idea if that machine can handle the acid or if it would get in the… oil tank? Yes, that’s what James called it.12:31 amThe next five minutes were spent berating herself for taking anything that James offered when she knew better. It would have gone much longer but then she heard the most welcomed sound in her life: silence. The rain had stopped. With an overenthusiastic kick, the boulder that she placed over the entrance of her small cave three nights ago went flying, causing a small avalanche down the hillside. She froze, partly in the cave and partly out. If anything heard that, would she hear or see them before they saw her? She was patient. That was why she had finished more deliveries than anyone else. They didn’t have enough patience. 12:41 am After another ten minutes she finally stepped out, shaking her limbs and trying to get the blood moving again. For someone who looked about 25, she was on the willowy side, her job requiring more stealth and speed than strength and force. She brushed off the dirt from her dark clothing and adjusted the scarf that covered her neck and lower face area. The dark clothing was for concealment while the scarf filtered out the toxins in the air. A gas mask would have been better but she hated the way it felt on her skin. She ran a hand through her ebony locks and managed to pick out a bug. The problem with being patient is that it should never be coupled with Rupophobia, the fear of being dirty. When it is, the person with it will spend hours picking out every grain of dirt from her clothing and hair. Hours that I don’t have. But hey, it’s more incentive to get back to base. The showers are working now. Her green eyes surveyed the barren landscape that covered most of the planet. If it isn’t wasteland, it’s ocean. Or both. She thought as the moon reached its zenith. 12:57 am, 3 hours and 20 minutes before dawnTime to go.She turned to the cave and pulled out ‘that machine’. James called it a ‘motor-bike’. She called it a ‘new and interesting way to die’. She checked over the bike twice to make sure she hadn’t hurt it when she made that hasty dash to the cave and stuffed it in. It was for the most part unharmed, it just appeared that the right handle bar was bent slightly. James would be thrilled. She had to make a note not to be present when he found out. Perhaps in the middle of a shower?She took a deep breath, snapping on her goggles before she got on. She needed to stop thinking about the bike and James. The most difficult part of the trip was ahead of her, if the blasted holographic map was true. Her fingers wrapped around the clutch and then turned on the vehicle with a kick start after a moment’s hesitation. James said that it was a lot quieter than how it would normally be because of a ‘new and improved’ ‘muffler’. But she still jumped every night when the complete silence was broken by the gentle purring of the ‘bike’. Please work! She thought as she gently twisted the right handle bar, the one that was broken. The bike responded in the usual way and she smiled despite herself. She changed gears, eased up on the clutch and the bike was off.
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Posted: Fri Nov 28, 2008 7:37 pm
7:24 pm, 5 days earlier
“DID YOU BREAK-” He begins, fury showing in his cobalt blue eyes as his voice echoes in the ‘large’ library. ‘Large’ only when compared to the libraries of the posts and caravans. Central has everything bigger.
“No.” She responds, turning a page in the book she was reading. Her cheek rests on one of her hands, the other turning the pages.
“LIKE HEL-”
“Now, now, James, there are children present.” The dark haired woman shifts the hand on which her cheek leans to point to the group of little kids around a story book without looking up from what she is doing.
“Wench.” James mutters as he put a hand through his messy brown hair, ruffling it. Once he gets his initial yell out, he usually calms pretty quick, unless she’s done (broken) something that really makes him mad.
“How very archaic. And you’re supposed to be the super genius ‘to take us into the future’.” She puts air quotes around the last part with the fingers of her page turning hand as if it was a motto of some kind, her eyes fixed on the page before her.
“‘-by restoring the past.’” James finishes. He slumps down into the chair next to her, places his head on the table in front of them and puts his arms around it as though he is shielding his cranium from the world.
James looks like a man in his twenties when he is angry, but now he looks closer to a boy barely out of his teens. “You’re giving me gray hairs.” He almost whines.
“That’s my line.” Another page turns, her cheek now resting on her knuckles.
He shifts one of his arms to look at her from underneath its protective cover.
“You don’t get gray hairs.”
She looks at him now.
“So far as you know.”
He mutters something under his breath so the children wouldn’t hear.
“Orphan.” Is her reply as she turns back to her book. Whatever he said before was clearly an insult.
“***** raises her head slowly, following with an equally slow blink.
He swallows, wondering if he crossed a line that he should not have.
“James, I’m flattered that you think of me in such a way, but it could never work out.” She smirks then, causing him to relax. “Besides, that’s just gross.”
Suddenly, his nose collides with the surface of the table, hard. She had reached out with her hand, gripped the back of his head and slammed it to the table top.
I knew she would retaliate.
“It was just a joke.” He pleads, seeing her rise from her seat through his watering eyes.
“I did not appreciate it. You know some people think you slept around to get to your position. I beat those people up. Be careful what you say in public areas.”
“Yeah, yeah.” He sits up, feeling his nose. It wasn’t broken. She had gone easy on him. “A momentary lapse of judgment. Won’t happen again.”
“Why is it that all your ‘lapses’ happen around me?” She turns to look at him, hands on her hips. Her hair is almost to her waist now.
“Because I trust you.” James says simply.
Her left eyebrow raises, making her look every imposing.
“Oh? And what about all the stuff I break?”
“I’ve come to expect that.”
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Posted: Fri Nov 28, 2008 7:40 pm
(Short! ^.^)
3:53 am, present day, 1 hour and 24 minutes before dawn
Hours later she was reconsidering going underground. The Inasna were fast, but they didn’t know how to ride vehicles.
That and they’d only eat you.
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Posted: Fri Nov 28, 2008 7:46 pm
4:13 pm, ten years before
Eyes roll as saliva drips down from ‘its’ mouth before ‘it’ rushes the bars of the cage, causing the room to ring with the metallic sound.
A ten year old James, already clinging to the dark haired woman’s pant leg, buries his head into her thigh, letting out a yelp in fear.
“Terrifying isn’t it?”
She doesn’t turn to look at the voice. She knows who it belongs to already. ‘A mouse of a man’ is the best way to describe him. He just screams ‘Ratty’.
‘It’ scurries to the back of the cage, trying to gauge this seemingly 25 year old woman who doesn’t flinch when the bars are attacked in front of her face.
She tilts her head slightly to the right, trying to take in the appearance of ‘it’, one of the Inasna. ‘It’ looks to be a woman in her late teens. A rag that could have been a dress at one point is covering ‘its’ form.
Her?
“Hmm…” The man says, and she can feel his eyes on her. She wants to cringe or slap him or something, but she pushes down the urge. She remains as a statue; the only show of life from her is the eyes that take in every detail and the hand stroking James’ hair in an effort to comfort him.
“You’re not much of a talker, are you?” He speaks again. “That’s good. You won’t have many people to talk to out in the wilderness.” She feels his eyes looking at her again. It is starting to lean more to leering than just looking. “You don’t look like much.”
She looks at him through the corner of her eye. “I know about half a dozen different ways to kill you with just a ruler.”
He rolls his eyes, clearly not afraid of her.
“Inasna. Or singular, like the one before us is Inasnum. It’s-”
“Latin for ‘Insane’. I know.”
The man coughs and glares, trying to tell her without words not to interrupt him.
“The Inasna are leftovers from the war. The majority of the countries involved thought they had an unspoken agreement to not use nuclear bombs.” He chuckles, as though laughing at the many countries and many more lives that were ended with a few atomical blasts. “So instead they used biological weapons. The Inasna are the result.” He reaches into the cage with a cattle prod, an evil smirk on his face. “They-”
“What. Are. You. Doing.” It isn’t a question. It is a ‘Stop or die’ statement.
His forehead furrows.
“You can’t allow them any mercy. They’re not even human anyway.”
“They were once.” She replies solemnly.
He sneers at her.
“You won’t last ten minutes out there.” His leer widens. “Maybe it’ll be you in there someday.”
She turns to look at him full on, her fierce green eyes ablaze.
“Or maybe it’ll be you.” Her words sound like a promise.
He chuckles at her, taking in her appearance again. Her 5’ 11” frame wants to throttle him, but she resists.
“Fine.” He says. “I’m a humanitarian.” He turns and walks back into the side room.
She finds herself looking at the Inasnum again. Her hand rises to brush a strand of her pixie style hair from her face.
Who were you? Did you have family? Are they looking for you? Do you remember them?
Questions race through her mind until a familiar sound comes to her ear.
The tell-tale click of a fire arm.
The man is beside her again, almost too close for comfort.
“Do you want to do it?” Scratch the almost. His breath is horrendous.
He’s supposed to be the head of the technological department of Central!
It takes her a moment for her to realize what he meant by ‘it’.
“There is no cure? Even after over 100 years?” She asks, her eyes still looking at the Inasnum.
“It’s cheaper to put a bullet in them than to do research.”
Something clicks in her head. He’s given up looking for a cure like he promised and now was spending the research money.
On booze most likely.
She turns to him again. “I won’t take a life if I can help it.”
He sneers at her. “Then you’re going to die. You’ll need a weapon.”
“I’ll just carry a ruler then.” With that, she picks up James and walks out. She goes calmly at first, then quicker until she is jogging with the ten year old in her arms.
“Cover your ears.”
James does as she commands, but the sound of the gunshot makes him jump none-the-less.
He lowers his hands from his ears as she slows to a walk and sets him down.
“You’re really going to be a Carrier?” The small boy asks.
“Yes.” She kneels down to look him in the eye, taking his hand in her own. “Are you going to be alright with that?”
He nods, lost in thought for a moment.
“I’m going to take that man’s job. I’ll be known at the scientist that rediscovers the past to help the future!” He gives her a toothy grin.
8 months later, he did.
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Posted: Fri Nov 28, 2008 7:47 pm
3:54 am, present day, 1 hour and 23 minutes before dawn
Usually flickering light in the distance meant warmth and safety, but she knew better. These lights brought a certain sense of fear. She gripped the throttle harder to go faster and prayed to whoever would hear her that the bike wasn’t as loud as she thought it was. She didn’t want a confrontation. The reconstructed taser made out of scrap pieces felt oddly heavy in her hip holster.
Suddenly she noticed the collection of lights directly in front of her. She veered to give it as wide of a berth she could and wished that either there was enough light that she didn’t need the light on the front of the bike, or no light at all.
A moment later she heard a scream. A childish scream. A familiar scream.
She cursed in every way shape and form she knew how and some in ways that she had seen others do but had no idea what it really meant. The bike seemed to turn on its own into the circle of cars and people that surrounded what she knew to be a small girl.
Please don’t let me die!
The people turned when they heard the bike and then jumped out of the way. She leaned to her right to make herself almost horizontal to the ground as she swooped down and scoped up the small child with short black hair. The bike almost fell over with the unusual position and the sudden extra weight but she managed to right it at almost the last second.
A hand grabbed the cloth on her shoulder as she slung the girl in front of her on the bike. She turned her head in such a way as to make the scarf around her mouth slip and she bit into the offending hand. Someone cried out as the hand let go. But she didn’t pay attention to that. She saw a couple of men who she knew wouldn’t be stopped by a small bite on the hand gathering in her path. She turned the bike hard enough that she almost lost the girl and her packages. All that was in her way now was a woman, who quickly threw herself out of the way, and a drop.
Please don’t be a sheer cliff! She pleaded as the edge came closer.
It wasn’t until the bike was going down the side that she realized that the angle was just enough for traction. The sound of cars rumbling to life had her hands shaking.
Don’t look back.
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Posted: Fri Nov 28, 2008 7:48 pm
4:12 am, 1 hour and 5 minutes before dawn
After a few moments of trembling and side winding, the sounds of others died behind her and she allowed herself a sigh of relief.
She turned again to get back in the general direction of Dane’s caravan and slowed down to adjust her charge into a sitting position, check the packages and fix her scarf.
“Kira.” She let the word hang in the air for a moment.
The girl in front of her hung her head.
“Yes?” The sound was small.
She chose her words carefully. She didn’t want a repeat of this ever again.
“Do you know who those people were?”
“The Renegades?”
“Do you know who the Renegades are?”
“They’re people who don’t want to follow the rules so Central stopped sending them supplies.”
“And what happened when they stopped getting supplies?”
“They got angry?”
“Yes?”
“And they started to ambush carriers.”
“Like me. What do they do to people like you?”
“They um….”
“They either ransom you if they think you’re important enough, or keep you as a slave. Now why were you out here in the first place?”
At this, Kira seemed to perk up; she turned in her seat to smile up at the older girl.
“Because I heard you were coming, Nyx, and I wanted to welcome you!”
Nyx looked down quickly into eyes almost the exact shade of green as her own. A lot of people thought they were sisters. Kira wished that Nyx was her sister. Nyx wished that Kira would forget about her.
It wasn’t that Nyx didn’t like Kira. She just didn’t want Kira to end up like her: in a constant battle with survival where the stakes aren’t just your life. It’s the lives of those who are waiting for your delivery.
She's copying my speech pattern, she noted to herself.
She turned her attention back to the road.
“That was foolish.” It was. It also made her angry that Kira, normally exceptionally bright Kira, had done something so stupid for her sake. Kira hung her head.
“I know.”
“No, I don’t think you do.” In Nyx’s anger, her hold on the clutch tightened, causing the bike to speed up. “Are we close to Dane’s Caravan?”
“Yeah, why?”
“Because they know you walked,” Nyx didn’t have to say who ‘they’ were. “They’d know that there are other people nearby.”
(More suspense!! twisted )
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Posted: Fri Nov 28, 2008 7:48 pm
5:11 am, 6 minutes before dawn
In another hour Nyx saw the first signs of the Caravan, the rising, moving dome that protected its people from threats from the sky and from the land. She also saw the first signs of morning.
She leaned forward to be better angled for a faster speed. She needed to beat the dawn. Kira didn’t have any protective gear for the sun’s harmful rays.
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Posted: Fri Nov 28, 2008 7:49 pm
5: 17 am, Dawn
Just as the sky was turning pink, she crossed the threshold into the dome. There was a cry as the bike was turned off and Kira was grabbed off the cycle by a blond, tall man who was none other than Dane himself. The gate she had just ridden through shut with a slam to keep out the light from the new dawn.
“Good to see you Nyx. Thanks for getting back the escape artist.”
“Same to you too Dane. The escape artist isn’t as good as we originally thought.”
“Oh?” Dane’s sharp brown eyes gave Kira a look, at which the child turned away, red flushing her cheeks. “What happened?”
“Renegades. You’ll need to turn up the notch on the dome’s speed.” Dane nodded and put Kira down.
“You’ll stay for the day?” Dane asked as he turned to leave. “You know where your room is.”
Nyx smiled. Dane had a way of making people relax even when there was trouble. Not that Dane couldn’t handle trouble.
A crowd gathered around her as she picked up the brown paper wrapped items and began calling names. There was a new book, a toaster, a new doll for another little girl, and the like. Kira stayed with Nyx the entire time, her eyes lightening up every time a new package was picked up. Finally all the personal items were gone and all that was left was food and such. The crowd departed except for Kira.
“Are you sure that there isn’t anything for me, Nyx?” She asked quietly. “It’s my birthday tomorrow.”
“Sorry, I don’t have anything.”
Kira nodded and walked away.
Silly girl, of course I have something for you, She wanted to say as she watched the retreating form. She had already come up with her plan on the way over. The present was hidden in the bottom of the bag. Nyx hadn’t signed it, so it would be a surprise for Kira to wake up the next night with it.
But for now, she was going to take a bath.
(End Chapter One)
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Posted: Fri Nov 28, 2008 7:49 pm
"Happiness is like peeing in your pants..."
 A picture a friend of mine drew of Nyx. I used photobucket to make it look like an old picture because it's more like her in the 10 years ago flash back than the present because her hair is short. I would like more art of my characters... ^.^ I'd love you (might even pay you) if you gave me more character art! If you're thinking about it, pm me and I'll pm you the details of the character.
xd "...Everyone else can see it, but only you can feel the warmth."
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Posted: Fri Nov 28, 2008 7:54 pm
Character profile skeleton for those who want a character: Name- Age- Affiliation (Central, Renegades, maybe even Inasna)- Powers (There are some mutants. James, for example, is a mutant: He's what they call a techno-path.)- Job (Carrier, scientist, leader of a caravan or post, etc.)- Rank (See bottom for ranks when not military)- Hair- Eyes- Height- Weight- Build- Skin tone- Tattoos- All those a part of Central have a crescent moon. Because Renegades have black and blue for Tattoos, Central uses other colors. What rank and faction of Central you are determines the color and how dark it is. Newbies have the lightest tint while Leaders have the darkest. Also, it is possible to customize the tattoo with something else. For example, James, as the Head of the Technological Department and therefore Head Scientist would get a Dark Red Crescent. He had a light bulb placed behind the crescent (not shown). Ranks for Carriers and Scientists shown on the bottom of this post Newbie SoldierHead SoldierElected Official (Only happens in Caravans)Also, about once a year all the Carriers are at Central together. One such day, the group was admiring Marina's Wolf tattoo with more than a little too much alcohol around them. Lets just say that they all woke up with a new feature. Favorite weapon (if any, I doubt scientists have any)- Favorite vehicle (only for Carriers)- Favorite clothing- Personality- Likes- Dislikes- Family- History (I might tweak it if I think it doesn't go with the story, but I'll tell you how I want to change it and ask if that's okay first)- Their favorite saying or something you would like them to say- ------------------------------------- What Carriers do: A Carrier is a combination of Commando, Spy, and Postal worker. The common people just know about the Postal part. Carrier Rank System since Nyx became the leader (Wolf Pack): Initiate- Pre-Carrier, they don't even have a mark. Initiates usually approach a Carrier and request to join. The Carrier then goes back to Central, does a background check on the Requestee and (if the person checks out) returns (or another Carrier) to the Initiate to have them do a series of tests (To see if they are mentally competent. A lot of people who ask aren't). If everything checks out, the Initiate is taken to Central for training. Training comprises of hand to hand combat, field analysis, engineering (if anything breaks when they're on a road), and what to do under torture (in case they get caught by Renegades). Training usually takes anything from 6 to 9 months depending on the Carrier schedule and the speed at which the Initiate learns.  N00b Carrier/ Newbie Carrier/ Puppy- An Initiate gets their Carrier Mark and is paired with a veteran Carrier and taken on the road for field training. Each time the puppy returns to Central, he/she leaves with a new Carrier so he/she learns different ways of doing things and so the n00bs know the higher ups. Puppy training usually takes about a year depending on whether or not Veterans think they're capable.  Carrier/ Wolf- The puppy is put in charge of a delivery with a Carrier as back up. The n00b has to make a delivery to Dane's Caravan and leave without Kira hitching a ride. If she does, the newbie has until Dawn to return Kira to the Caravan or remain a puppy for another year. The new Carrier is now on their own most of the time.
 Veteran Carrier/ Veteran Wolf/ Big Wolf/ Bad Wolf/ Hell Hound- Carrier for 3 years or more
:Alice's Mark, Second-in-command :Nyx's Mark, Head Wolf ------------- Scientist Ranking since James became Head Scientist: Initiate- See Initiates for Carriers up to them getting to Central. Pre-Scientists basically observe scientists. Think Intern. Lasts for 1 to 2 years.  Scientist- does their own experiments. Can boss around Interns. Help out Department Head.  Department Head (technological, genetic, chemical (is there anymore?))- Best in their field.  : Jame's Mark, Head Scientist
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Posted: Fri Nov 28, 2008 9:19 pm
I want a girl with a mind like a diamond I want a girl who knows what's best
I am going to review your story soon!
I read it, and it is very good!
When my laptop is not dying I will post again, with a more thorough analysis!
Be prepared to see my inner editor!
HE IS A DOUCHEBAG
So expect some criticisms!
But I like it very much! Can't wait to see more!
I want a girl with shoes that cut And eyes that burn like cigarettes
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Posted: Fri Nov 28, 2008 9:23 pm
"Happiness is like peeing in your pants..."
Yay!! -dances around- "It's okay... I'll probably argue my way out of having to make too many corrections..." sweatdrop
xd "...Everyone else can see it, but only you can feel the warmth."
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Posted: Sat Nov 29, 2008 7:03 pm
Another story, eh? I've only read the first post but the story seems cool. ^.^ I'll read the rest later.
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Posted: Sat Nov 29, 2008 7:31 pm
Minias Another story, eh? I've only read the first post but the story seems cool. ^.^ I'll read the rest later. "Happiness is like peeing in your pants..."

You better! I know where you live!!! I think... stare sweatdrop
xd "...Everyone else can see it, but only you can feel the warmth."
"What is a Taco Ranger? Click here and find out."
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