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 Posted: Mon Oct 26, 2009 10:30 pm
Name:Kylar
Age:17 turns
Gender:Male
Sexual Orientation: Bisexual
Craft: N/A
Rank: Candidate
History:Born in the barn, practically raised with the Runners, Kylar grew up a wild child and caused more then his fair share of havoc, much of which included chasing every skirt that daintily skipped by. Raised by a caring mother and an aloof father, and sharing a room with 2 brothers as equally obnoxious as himself, Kylar learned the values and skills of a holder, but never quite sought the responsibilities of being an important one.
Even though women greatly amused and fascinated him, one male captured Kylar's heart. A boy his age, one equally as mischievous as himself, Kylar fell for Bren of the ice blue eyes hard and fast, an event that left him quite confused as to what he truly wanted in life.
In the end, Kylar's lack of responsibility and carefree attitude nearly cost him his life when a prank with a pair of Runners an their handler went wrong. It did however cost him the life of the boy dearest to his heart when the bucking Runner clipped Bren in the skull with a hoof. Kylar barely managed to escape being trampled, and managed to walk away with only a few bruised ribs and a wounded soul, and his mischievous streak seemed to disappear for a while.
It was a few weeks later that the trumpeting cries of dragons filled the air as they went on Search for Candidates, and Kylar left his Hold behind.
As luck would have it, he failed to Impress and Kylar felt lost. However, Weyr life suited him much better then Hold life, and it meant distance between memories he never wanted to revisit, and responsibilities that didn't suit him.
He just was not cut out of Holder cloth.
Not only that, but the dragons fascinated him, and any chance to watch the magnificent creatures was a chance he would take. Staying, he earned his keep by doing odds and ends jobs around the Weyr, learning bits and pieces of various tasks and skills.
Appearance:At 5'8", Kylar does not tower over many. In fact, a lot of the female dragonriders tower over him. Having grown up in an active Hold, his body bears the muscles and scars of one that is almost never idle, but he still retains that wiry look of a boy not yet fully grown into a man. Sandy blonde hair constantly falls into his eyes; a touch too long to be proper, but still short enough to keep the crude remarks from his father's lips.
Personality:Kylar is loud, outgoing, and maybe lacking a bit in maturity. He's not afraid to speak his mind, which gets him in more trouble than any prank he has ever pulled on the kitchen staff.
A smile constantly lights up his face and turquoise eyes, and even though he still chases the pretty ladies of the Weyr, shadows and memories darken his eyes if any man gets too close. He misses Bren dearly, and seems stuck on the memory of the boy, distancing himself from other men as he feels responsible for Bren's death.
Afraid to get close to any other man, he loses himself in women, although sometimes he catches himself watching the other male Candidates or Weyrlings when he passes them by. Aware that such interactions between men are frowned upon at Telgar, he keeps quiet of his past.
This lack of communication or contact with men has earned him a title that would translate into being "p***y whipped", but Kylar laughs every time someone calls him a man-whore.
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Posted: Tue Oct 27, 2009 2:24 pm
Very cute personality! <3 Definitely a smiling face to help with some of the more sombre candidates.
Unfortunately, I'm going to have to ask you to change pretty much the majority of his history. Growing up in a Hold, which is a very tight-knit community, if there was any evidence of physical abuse by his father (especially so much so that he nearly lost his life) he would have been taken away immediately and fostered out. That kind of behaviour would not be tolerated at the Hold. His father would have been imprisoned at the very least for abuse of that nature, and at worse kicked out of the Hold. The same thing about the murder. Though murder does happen, it is unlikely that the Hold would keep a man around who had a history of beating his son almost to death and allow him to commit a crime like that.
His Search is fine, however we are currently not allowing any maulings by the Telgar greens in candidate's profiles. For the sake of continuity (and to make our lives easier XD) any maulings were of NPC characters.
If you could remove those things and fix that up I can definitely accept him. <3
As a side note, the restrictions that you'll probably see before you read this were not made because of your character. They've been a long time in the making, the staff just had to get around to putting it together. XD
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Posted: Tue Oct 27, 2009 4:16 pm
Fix'd ^_^ i hope sweatdrop
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Posted: Tue Oct 27, 2009 4:27 pm
One more small thing, and you're good. XD
"In the end, Kylar's lack of responsibility and carefree attitude nearly cost him his life when a prank went wrong. It did however cost him the life of the boy dearest to his heart, and on the morning of the accident, the trumpeting cries of dragons filled the air as they went on Search for Candidates. He was taken to the Weyr without even a chance to mourn."
As we've told people before who wish to kill off characters in their candidate's past, you need to be extremely specific about their death. Not specific like "and then the beam fell down on his head and his brains went everywhere" but the cause of death, relevant details, repercussions, etc, to show us that you've really thought about it in relation to the setting.
It is also unlikely he would be whisked away after a prank that nearly cost him his life, since presumably he was injured (I can't tell since I don't know exactly what happened) and if he was injured he wouldn't have been Searched. Similarly, if he was mourning he wouldn't have had to accept the Search or even lined up with the rest of the candidates so the dragons could have a look at him. He could have mourned privately for the death of his boyfriend and been Searched at a later date. Make sense?
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Posted: Tue Oct 27, 2009 4:31 pm
Ah yes, sorry v.v *fixes bettererer*
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Posted: Tue Oct 27, 2009 4:44 pm
I added details to the event, and put some time between the prank and the Search to give him adequate time to heal and grieve.
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