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 Posted: Wed May 02, 2012 8:29 pm
Thunderclan
~Stormpaw
Windclan
~Bramblepaw
Riverclan
Shadowclan
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Posted: Wed May 02, 2012 8:33 pm
Apprentice of Thunderclan  Username: fireshadow0908
Name: Stormpaw
Age: 11 Moons
Gender: Tom
Mentor: n/a
Kin: Mother II Open ~ Name can be chosen
Hawk II Father (Deceased)
Appearance: A handsome silver/black tom with ice blue colored eyes
Personality: He is a optimistic and caring cat who will do anything he can to help a friend. Stormpaw is also smart, calm, and cunning for his age and even use his speed to get his opponent in a position that would be an advantage for him. He can be mischievous at times to where he knows how to have fun yet becomes serious and aggressive in a fight against real enemies. He's very loyal to his clan and friends and since he's still young he can be a bit stubborn at times.
Bio: Stormpaw was born into Thunderclan although his mother was clan born while his father was a Kittypet. While out on a mission his mother's group was ambushed and attacked by a group of rouge cats. They were beaten because of the disadvantage of the ambush upon them and one of the cats died while others were extremely injured or on the verge of dying, yet were later found out that they survived. Stormpaw's mother tried going for help and tell what had happened but her injures soon overcame her and she fainted. She was luckily close to a Kittypet's house to which the tom had saved her by getting the attention of his owners who then took her in and nursed her back to health. His mother was cautious of the two legs and the kitty pet, yet she warmed up to them, since she saw they were helping her. It was during this time that Stormpaw's parents fell in love with each other and in turn mated. His father had developed a terrible illness, which was black cough. SIlverpaw's dad didn't last very long and in turn ended up dying. Luckily the two legs had kept his father away from his mother so she didn't catch it. Skyrose, his mother, decided to return to the clan. Upon her return she explained everything that happened and about a week later Stormkit was born. He knows about his lineage and is actually happy to know who his father was. It doesn't bug him at all knowing he's half clan instead it gives him a drive to do and prove himself to be just as good as any full blood clan member and maybe even greater. Now as an apprentice Stormpaw showed a mix of qualities from his parents. He got his looks from his father but his build is smaller than most young tom's since he got that quality from his mother.
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Posted: Thu May 03, 2012 12:12 pm
Okay... heres my issue.
Not only does his bio include Foxes, but badgers as well.
Its not likely and entire group of foxes would rush down and ambush a patrol of cats. Foxes are solitary for the most part and the Clans keep foxes off the territory. The badger also seems extremely random.
I would accept the patrol being ambushed by an enemy clan, or even some rogues, but I don't want everyone and their mother having cats, who were attacked by freaking foxes and badgers.
Everything else about his Profile is wonderful
--- accept, please include his kin. You mentione his parents in the bio, you should mention them in the kin.
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Posted: Thu May 03, 2012 2:58 pm
alright fixed it XD sorry I did that kind of late when I was tired
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Posted: Sun May 06, 2012 1:16 pm
[align=center][img]http://i974.photobucket.com/albums/ae226/fireheart0908/sub/1696461.jpg[/img][/align]
[size=24][align=center][color=#08457E]❊Stormpaw❊[/color][/align][/size]
[size=18][color=darkred][align=center][b]❊☪[/b]Apprentice of Thunderclan[b]❊☪[/b][/align][/color][/size]
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[color=purple][size=9][b]☪❊[/b]“Never give up or lose faith because it's truly over if you do”[b]❊☪[/b][/size][/color] [/align]
[color=goldenrod][align=center][size=18]✦✧✦✧✦✧✦✧✦✧✦✧✦✧✦✧✦✧✦✧✦✧✦✧✦✧✦✧✦✧✦✧✦✧✦✧[/size][/align][/color]
[align=center][color=#08457E]Stormpaw [/color]
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[color=goldenrod][size=18][align=center]✦✧✦✧✦✧✦✧✦✧✦✧✦✧✦✧✦✧✦✧✦✧✦✧✦✧✦✧✦✧✦✧✦✧✦✧[/align][/size][/color]
[color=purple][align=center][size=9][b]☪❊[/b]“You will only find true power when the desire to protect someone precious to you presents itself”[b]❊☪[/b][/size][/align][/color]
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Posted: Sun May 06, 2012 6:11 pm
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