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 Posted: Sat Oct 14, 2006 10:46 pm
1. yes the title is temporary because i don't know what title is good
2. the story shall start on thee second post
3. i have started this eariler today with my friend exchanging love short stories and I extended mine
4. yes, i did start a story already but I sort of messed up on it for the second chapter and I'm going to start that over
5. I love comments
7. i may hate you
8. i like when ppl actually find errors in my writing
9. I LIKE CHEESE!!! If you want me you eat you then plz let me eat you!!!
10. my stories vary
11. THIS STORY IS IN FIRST PERSON AND IT IS FICTION!!!
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Posted: Sat Oct 14, 2006 10:50 pm
Ch. 1 part 1:
I've been skipping school for a couple of days. My parents had gone overseas and I was home alone. I called insick all the times and they would say that I have to get well. I sat in my room crying. I had already told my true feelings to a guy that I liked but he turned me down. I was in shock, I thought that he would love me too. He was so nice and kind to me. I didn't know that it he was going to say that. While I sat there in my room, I started to tell myself that having a crush will only crush me.
I shut off my love emotion. I didn't shut off the other ones. Some guys ask me out, but I turned them down. I was still hurt from that experience. Then one day, a transfer student came and had his eyes on me. He ask me to go out, but I turned him down. He never gave up, he kept on trying. Until the other day, he found me on the roof and snuck up behind me and hugged me in his arms. I was surprised, and then he whispered,"Don't ignore me. No matter what happens, I'll be there for you. I'm your knight and shining armor."
After the hug, I finally opened my heart. My loving feelings were swarming all over my body. He let go of me and i turned around. My eyes were sparkling and so were his. I stared at him for a while and started to blush.I looked away, but he took his hand and used it to lift my head near his. I looked at him. I felt nervous and then he kissed me. My body felt warm and bubbly inside. Hot-sweetness went throughout my body. His head went back a bit and he stared at me. I was blushing rapidly.
"You don't remember me quite well, do you,"he said, letting go of my face.
"Have I met you before,"I asked looking at him.
"So you really don't remember me," he said feeling down.
"I'm sorry but I don't remember,"I said looking down,"but if you tell me somethings from the past. I might remember."
"We used to live in the same house because my parents were renting a couple of rooms. We were still small back then and we used to go to the same schools until I moved out at the age of 11, you were 10 at that time, and moved to a different place," he said looking at her.
"I still don't remember. I'm sorry," I finally said.
He looked disappointed and then just blurted out,"We both promised each other that we would get married when we finally meet each other again!" His eyes were wide open and blushing rapidly. Before I was able to say anything, he ran down the roof stairs blushing of embarassment in saying a promise to me.
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Posted: Sat Oct 14, 2006 10:57 pm
Ch. 1 part 2:
I stood there thinking about what had happened. I didn't like the feeling that I was having. I wanted to remember the past but I couldn't recall it. I began to cry a bit and then stopped. I went down the roof stairs and saw him looking down at the fllor. He saw me but looked away and started walking away, The school day ended and I walked back to my house. When i entered, my parents came home.
When I saw them, I wanted to ask what had happened. Yet, his parents were there talking with my parents and he was there too, I thought that it was his parents but I wasn't sure. So when I saw my mom I asked her,"Mom, why are there strangers in our house."
"Erica, you don't remember us," the lady said calmly looking at me.
"No," I said, "I don't remember you or anyone else besides my mom and dad." The room went silent.
Then my dad said,"Honey, I think we should tell them all."
"Tell them what, Dearie," my mother said looking at father. "Tell them what had happened to our daugther when she was 13," my father said calmly looking at my father.
"I see, we should tell them. It would get worser if we don't and our daugther would think of them as strangers," my mother said calmly with a sigh afterward.
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Posted: Sat Oct 14, 2006 11:01 pm
For future writing propuses
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Posted: Sat Oct 14, 2006 11:01 pm
For future typing purposes
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Posted: Sat Oct 14, 2006 11:02 pm
For future reading purposes
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Posted: Sat Oct 14, 2006 11:03 pm
For future seeing purposes.
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Posted: Sat Oct 14, 2006 11:05 pm
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Posted: Sat Oct 14, 2006 11:06 pm
for future ppl to see thee author that's me. (which I'm not going to do)
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Posted: Thu Oct 19, 2006 5:58 am
*eye twitches* There are a few grammer mistakes, although most of it is in dialouge, and a few sentences were very choppy. There is a serious lack of discription of the area around your character. My main problem with this is that the it is cliched. People say you can't write a love story without being cliched, but it is possible.
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Posted: Sat Oct 21, 2006 3:48 pm
Domerin Thompson *eye twitches* There are a few grammer mistakes, although most of it is in dialouge, and a few sentences were very choppy. There is a serious lack of discription of the area around your character. My main problem with this is that the it is cliched. People say you can't write a love story without being cliched, but it is possible. I'm still working on it.
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Posted: Thu Jan 18, 2007 2:34 pm
Well, there are some grammar mistakes, but what I am saying? I have no grammar skills. xp But I do have dialogue skills and yours aren't really showing in this story. But other than that it was WONDERFUL and I will enjoy reading it and continue PLEASE~
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Posted: Sat Jan 27, 2007 7:39 pm
NOOOO!!! I WANT TO KNOW WHAT HAPPENS! Please right more I'm dying to know what happens next!...Love this story.
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