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 Posted: Mon Jan 29, 2007 10:18 pm
Afraid To Walk Alone
I’m afraid to walk alone
The paths of life with the unknown
You were always there
To quash my fears
You would whisper in my ear
Look without your eyes
But use your heart it’s not an art
So I would look
And see instead of darkness beyond you and me
Sunlight and golden fields
Trees and grass
But now you’re left me quite alone
When you were tested
To see which it would be
Her or me I asked
You looked between us
And stared at me
While I glared back at you
You choose her
And not me
With you I was wild and free
But now without your gentle wing
I’m caged and scared
To face my fears
My throat is choked with tears
So now I sit and hug my legs
In the dark I will stay
For with out my heart
You so kindly stole
I can’t take a step for my soul
Is empty and crying tears
No more fields of gold
No more trees or grass
Only black
No sunlight can penetrate this darkness
And none shall await me here or there
For no one anywhere
Cared for my like you did
So I sit in my darkness
Crying
Because the path of life
Have cliffs and peaks
I could stumbled and fall right off
I’m so afraid to be alone
No soft tone in my ear
There’s no one near
When my shoulders begin to shake
Or when the path begins to quake
It was all a fake
To take my heart and my soul
And steal it away with you
I’ve never yet met your match
So still I sit on this rocky ground
Because the path of life is hard for me
To hard to do alone
So I sit and wait for it o pass me by
Until I have gone and died
just a simple poem i wrote, nothing super special
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Posted: Tue Jan 30, 2007 5:42 am
Very Nice, pretty lengthy too which means it probably took a little bit of time at least.
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hardkoreUSMC Vice Captain
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Posted: Tue Jan 30, 2007 4:29 pm
yeah it did, but its only like a page and half if you have edits i missed just tell me, as long as it is contructive or just be nice, still low self esteem.
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Posted: Tue Jan 30, 2007 7:08 pm
My goodness, Lyra. What do you mean "nothing special"??? That had so much emotion behind it and it flowed beautifully and was wonderfully written! Your style is very unique and I literally became engrossed with what I was reading.
And even better, I can relate to that feeling. Being alone, missing the one who used to comfort me...
I do have a question though. "To quash my fears"... Umm... What does "quash" mean?? sweatdrop I could easily look it up, but I'm feeling a bit lazy at the moment... XD
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Posted: Tue Jan 30, 2007 9:46 pm
well i meant to get rid of, or umm hmmm its sort of get rid of to me. but i'm not sure its the best word i could think of.
thanks for the support its very nice, i have low selt esteem problems about my work
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Posted: Sat Feb 03, 2007 9:48 pm
I was hypnotized by this. My friend has had some low self esteam issues right now. She had the most horrible trick played on her. It tore her apart. This is what i always say to her and it always cheers her up:
"When all you have left in your world is your self the best you can do is wish three times upon a shooting star and hope that all your deepest dreams will come true."
--Crimson Claws(Me)
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Posted: Mon Feb 05, 2007 6:09 pm
oh i'm sorry for youe friend, truly sorry and thanks for being super nice everyone. good quote also. heart heart gonk crying
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Posted: Wed Feb 07, 2007 3:14 am
Lyra heart oh i'm sorry for youe friend, truly sorry and thanks for being super nice everyone. good quote also. heart heart gonk crying
it is ok. she ended up getting over it. Thankies
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Posted: Wed Feb 07, 2007 6:31 pm
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Posted: Fri Feb 16, 2007 9:12 pm
Very nice my friend. You are quite the poet I dare say. You've done quite well in making my day. You've done so well in making it rhyme, I can now see, it took you quite a bit of time. For you see to make something like this, its hard for things to go amiss. But a great poem that you created, even though this comment is quite belated.
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