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 Posted: Tue Jan 30, 2007 7:15 pm
A lot of times when I decide to write poetry, I'll get a simple line, or an image, or a thought... And I'll build off of it. For this, the simple line "Rescue Me" kept repeating itself over and over and over again in my head... And it was extremely late at night. Usually, late at night, when I'm so tired, my mind will get a bit loopy and I guess it's easier for my hidden thoughts to reveal themselves when I'm so tired. That's when I do my best poetry writing... Anyway, so here's this poem... Rescue Me... ^^;
Rescue Me
Rescue me from nightmares
I'm on the brink of falling
Sweaty palms and unforeseen qualms
I hear the voices calling
Rescue me from my despairs
My head continues swimming
With darkened thoughts and horrified hearts
The light's forever dimming
Rescue me from evil
It's swarming all around
Leering eyes and telling lies
As I'm lost and never found
Rescue me from tragedy
That forever plagues my mind
Unfulfilled goals and lost wandering souls
Not welcomed by my kind
Rescue me from endless nights
The monsters under my bed
Self-righteous snorts and quick retorts
Only found within my head
Rescue me from being caught
The footsteps rushing at me
An unwanted guest and fears manifest
What's caught and never free
Rescue me from this horrid fear
On me it's been bestowed
An icy grip and chiseled chip
Of a heart that's been erode
Rescue me from eternal sleep
As it's slowly killing me
The truth in lies and a true disguise
That only you can see
Well, there's one poem from your captain here. ^^; Lemme know what you all think!! biggrin
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Posted: Tue Jan 30, 2007 9:20 pm
I like the originality and the strucuture, its also very imaginative biggrin
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hardkoreUSMC Vice Captain
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Posted: Sat Feb 03, 2007 3:41 pm
Thank you! Man, took me forever to respond... But that has to be one of my favorite poems so far! I think it held a lot of hidden emotion and fears I didn't even realize I was carrying... Anyway, thanks for the compliments! biggrin
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Posted: Sat Feb 03, 2007 6:45 pm
Speachless. I love it. So full of emotion.
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hardkoreUSMC Vice Captain
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Posted: Wed Feb 07, 2007 10:04 pm
I like how this one is the exact OPPOSITE of my lyrics/poems, mine are about mass slaughter and damnation. LOLZ
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Posted: Fri Feb 16, 2007 9:21 pm
I'd say that I loved it. But that would be an understatement. This is a fantastic poem. Such marvelous imagery and such fascinating rhythm. This is truly a poem to remember, and belongs in our minds. Well done my friend, a work of art.
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