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 Posted: Wed Feb 07, 2007 8:48 pm
thsi one is a bit darker, i got the idea from thsi one friend on deviant art and blah blah blah here it is, least favorite so if you hate it like me i don't mind... whatevers....
What have I become?
What have I done?
My shirt is soaked with someone else’s blood
My pants, shoes, sword, gun
Covered in the nasty red liquid
I feel an itch on my cheek
The red stain is there too
My body’s covered with blood
I’m unharmed though
What beastly thing have I done?
I close my eyes
And wish it gone
But its still there
Upon my skin and upon my soul
It weighs a ton
Te unknowing doubt
The rocks around
Jagged and sharp
My fingers slowly bleed
I pray its not my mind
Telling me I’ve lost it
I stand and wince
My feet ripped wide open
I walk away
Not to forget and play again
But to repay
For I close my eyes again but still its there
Haunting me
The smell
The color
Its always there
Never will it leave me
Years pass and still I smell
Can even taste it lingering on me skin
Again its black as night
Again I ask
What have I become?
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Posted: Wed Feb 07, 2007 9:56 pm
I like the down n dirty stuff. make my poetry nice n violent. I got Morbid Angel: Rapture going through my head, (see my profile), and this goes great with that song.
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hardkoreUSMC Vice Captain
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Posted: Wed Feb 07, 2007 11:09 pm
I dunno what you're talking about, it was awesome, Lyra!! ^^; I can tell it's not exactly your style... Not the sorta thing you usually write about, but it was still really good! I didn't get the emotion that I felt with your other two poems... But... I still liked the descriptions and how it flowed!! ^^; I can't wait to see more posts from ya!
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Posted: Thu Feb 08, 2007 3:50 pm
thanks i was just tired of writing the sam eold poems and my friend said i should go all dark and stuff. i don't like it much but its ok
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hardkoreUSMC Vice Captain
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Posted: Mon Feb 12, 2007 6:20 am
Lyra heart thanks i was just tired of writing the sam eold poems and my friend said i should go all dark and stuff. i don't like it much but its ok try exploring topics you wouldn't normally explore.
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Posted: Mon Feb 12, 2007 7:30 pm
yeah but i've been sick and lazy so it will take a while
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Posted: Fri Feb 16, 2007 9:26 pm
It's nice. You shouldn't have doubts about the poems you write. Unless you write to impress. I feel that a poet should write from the heart for the mere sake of writing. Or because they love it. So why not dig into one's soul and emerge with feelings to show?
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