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 Posted: Tue Feb 13, 2007 5:55 pm
A sea of black,
surronds the ship,
no docks nearby,
no sailors,
the currents of then and now,
tossing the boat.
With each kind gesture,
I'm dragged down into then,
when now is where I am,
with no anchors,
I'm drowning in it.
If then and now,
now and then,
the two separate,
an anchor will be found,
the waters stilled,
the boat steadied.
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Posted: Tue Feb 13, 2007 7:35 pm
I like it, It is simple and clean. Gets to the point without leaving mysterious drop off. *props* smile
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undesirable_sacrifice Crew
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Posted: Fri Feb 16, 2007 5:41 pm
I love it! Even though I voted no. sweatdrop I personally wanted to take the cookie and run instead of just simply taking it. sweatdrop But It's short, simple, and I like it! Keep up the good work!
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Posted: Fri Feb 16, 2007 5:44 pm
I enjoyed it, although it's simple and short, I could really get the imagery, very fine poem my friend. Look forward to reading more from you.
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hardkoreUSMC Vice Captain
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Posted: Thu May 17, 2007 6:05 am
One Poet I enjoyed it, although it's simple and short, I could really get the imagery, very fine poem my friend. Look forward to reading more from you.
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