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It's never enough

You broke my heart,

Into a million pieces.

I’m bruised and broken,

From all the lies.

You said, “I love you.”

So many times

How could I know?

It was all a lie.

I told the truth,

I always loved you.

I never lied.

I never wanted,

To say goodbye.

Why did you lie?

To me and everyone else.

Instead of the truth,

It’s what I deserved

I never asked for anything,

I only wanted your love.

I gave you everything,

But it’s never enough,

I hate you,

Colten.

((Meh, so you dont ask where it came from. Boyfriend broke up with me earlier today, popped this out, and cried for about three hours ;-; I'm so pathetic. ))

Meh, Criticize if ye want. Have no problem with harshness or anything else, really.

Heh, Thanks ^^

Oh no, not at all. Hehe, actually, I think I've seen my 3 year old cousin be meaner XD But I'm not sure if that's a bad thing.

So no, you werent mean at all. It was a spur of the moment thing, and all that was running through my mind was "How could he do this to me? He said he loved me, he lied to me, ect."

Hah.. I actually kind of respect it, for the win! xD
To tell the truth... mean people make me scared, slightly, to post stories and poems.

Nooo! You are not pathetic! It upsets me everytime someone says that!!! My best friend says it all the time too! Because you wanna know who's pathetic? That ex-boyfriend of yours who dumped you for no apparent reason! (And if there was a reason, the least he could've done was give it to you). You, my friend, are not the one who's pathetic!!!! So keep your head up high!!! You're a special unique person, as is everyone. You just gotta believe in yourself and keep trying. 3nodding
You wanna know what makes this poem so great? The fact that it was written on pure emotion. Something bad happened and instead of taking it out on someone or hurting yourself, you turned your pain into something absolutely beautiful. Poetry. Trust me, try writing something when you're not full of some sort of emotion and try putting it down on paper. Then compare the two poems. You'll find the one you wrote when you were caught up in a moment to be much better. Anyway, I loved it! Keep writing! And look to the silver lining! (Whatever that means!!! xd )

Please make no mistake. No one is pathetic. They each have their own way of expressing themselves. We all express ourselves in some form or another, and for us it is writing. So please don't call yourself pathetic. This poem is from pure emotions and something that struck them. It may not have been in the nicest of manner nor the smoothest. but, all in all the poem is quiet nice. Though slightly repeatitive. I enjoyed reading it.

I just hope and feel that everyone can feel comfortable about posting their work and ideas without fearing harsh judgment or cruel comments. As much as I have seen being in this guild for a short time. Everyone seems to be understanding and helpful when someone is in need. I respect that. And I hope to see more work and wonderful talents from everyone. Keep up the good work!