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 Posted: Fri Feb 16, 2007 6:16 pm
I hate the way you talk to me,
And the way you cut your hair.
I hate the way you drive me nuts,
I hate it when you stare.
I hate your big damn combat boots,
And the way you read my mind.
I hate you so much it makes me sick,
It even makes me rhyme.
I hate it when you go away,
and the fact that you dont call.
What makes it worse is that I dont hate you,
Not even a little, Not even at all.
((Meh, More hateness on the BF
Criticize all you want biggrin ))
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Posted: Fri Feb 16, 2007 6:22 pm
It's very nice, and really clever how you added "Rhyme" in there. Very well done. I actually will say that this is one superb poem. I honestly love it.
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Posted: Fri Feb 16, 2007 6:26 pm
Hehe, transforming it into a song as we speak xD Just picked up some random "1+, 2+3+,4" Rythm. (Holy Crackajacks. Cant spell today... )
and yes, Choir has been my best subject for multiple years. I turn most of my poems into songs, eventually.
>.> <.< But that's a secret... shush xDD
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Posted: Fri Feb 16, 2007 6:27 pm
-Seals Lips-
You got it ^^
That is really cool though, I could never write a song, I'm terrible at it haha.
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Posted: Fri Feb 16, 2007 6:29 pm
Hehe, so am I. Posting one right now. Short little thing, but it gets the point across.
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Posted: Fri Feb 16, 2007 6:31 pm
Oh I'm sure that you aren't terrible my friend. With the experience you have with melody, I'm sure you could produce some fantastic works.
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hardkoreUSMC Vice Captain
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Posted: Sat Feb 17, 2007 3:09 pm
This would be an awesome punk rock song (punk as in Sex Pistols, Dropkick Murphies, DRI, etc) biggrin
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Posted: Sat Feb 17, 2007 3:11 pm
You know it would, I can see it now. Very good call.
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Posted: Sat Feb 17, 2007 5:16 pm
^^; I like this one a lot too! You seem to do VERY well with lyrics... Something I could never do to well. I really like your style here, and the last two lines at the end are gold to me. ^^; Keep up the great work!!!
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Posted: Sat Feb 17, 2007 5:17 pm
Definitely, I forgot to talk about the last two lines, they were very powerful to have in the end, definitely a couplet to remember.
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Posted: Sun Feb 18, 2007 11:14 am
Heheh thanks everybody. Really liking that you like it.
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Posted: Tue Mar 20, 2007 4:01 pm
Um..I hate to spoil this, but this is almost word for word the poem done for the movie 10 Things I Hate About You.
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Posted: Sun Apr 08, 2007 9:40 pm
You're right. I should've added credits. I didn't because it wasnt completely theirs... But yeah, I knew I heard it somewhere, I just couldnt place my finger on it. -- Sorry everyone.
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Posted: Tue Nov 27, 2007 3:56 pm
Yeah, thats the exact same thing that popped into my mind too when I read it. It's a good poem anyway, just try to see if it's actually your own work next time, hehe, and then we'll all be blown away.
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Posted: Fri Mar 14, 2008 9:15 pm
um....
This is too much like the poem in "10 Things I Hate About You." Way too much like it. And it's a pretty hackneyed theme too. Sry... I'm not a fan of it.
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