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(Red_Paint)

PostPosted: Sun Feb 18, 2007 9:26 am


Unspoken


arrow This poem I wrote for my
friend who was going through a very
suckish time. She was abused and
she always looked at the stars in the night
to remind herself that there are beautiful
things in the world.


Pick up her pen
She starts to write
Her feelings soar
Her life takes flight
The only way
Her words fade in the night
As the world slows down
She struggles with fright

Mother's screaming
Sister's dead
Brother's bleeding
Father's fled

Her life almost gone
Her heart's not right
Climbing up the stairs
Standing at the height
Sitting on the edge
Trying to fight
She tries so hard to hold on
With all of her might

Head pounding
Stomach spinning
Hair blowing
Never winning

Her arms are bruised
My will broken
These are her words
left unspoken.


Written by (Red_Paint)
PostPosted: Sun Feb 18, 2007 5:16 pm


It is well put together. The words don't seem forced. I enjoyed it very much. Keep writing. smile

undesirable_sacrifice
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Lady Seinu
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PostPosted: Sun Feb 18, 2007 6:59 pm


I love this one too! "Her life takes flight, The only way, Her worlds fade in the night" I really liked those three lines for some reason. ^^; I also love the fact how you write for your friends. It shows how devoted and loyal you are to them and I really admire that. Your poetry comes from love of your close friends, and that is indeed very admirable. Meh. I just repeated myself with different words. XD Anyway, loved it! Can't wait to see more posts from ya!
PostPosted: Mon Feb 19, 2007 6:22 am


Quote:
Mother's screaming
Sister's dead
Brother's bleeding
Father's fled


catchy chorus! biggrin twisted

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PostPosted: Thu Mar 01, 2007 2:28 pm


Wow, this is so deep! It's hard to find people writing stuff like this anymore. It was really good, and well-written.
PostPosted: Mon Mar 19, 2007 6:42 pm


That was simply amazing. It has such emotion and art in it that I think it is brilliant. It really hits me at places.

Lostinthenightrain


BabyFace1415

PostPosted: Mon Apr 16, 2007 12:50 pm


This is a real nice poem. I love the flow. Keep on writing!
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