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 Posted: Sun Jul 03, 2005 8:04 pm
so, we all write poetry sometimes, then it sits there, in ur room under crappitty stuff, no one gets to read your talent/untalent!! I WANT TO READ YOUR UNTALENT!! er... ninja
so, if u have some poems, post them domokun
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Posted: Sun Jul 03, 2005 8:05 pm
my odd poem......btw, FEEL FREE TO CRITICIZE THINGS CONSTRUCTIVELY
Crazy masses
Move + shake
Dancing a dance
But no one knows
Just how it goes
So each to their neighbor
To copy those moves
Steps repeated
Recycled life
Try to do it just right
Just like everyone else
The heady dance
Of glamour + fashion
Alluring, pretty skin
Sick + twisted underneath
Corrupt, dark people
Rotting souls acting
All alike, all alike
In a dance, a race
The prize goes to best conformer
The most original gal
Got her look from a zine
Who stole it from another
Over + over
A vicious cycle
The vicious dance
Flash those pearly whites
While you claw + backstab your way
To the top of social mountain
Manicured hands on lipo-ed hips
Heeled feet planted wide
Survey the shapeless hordes
Going nowhere
Dancing to oblivion
Dancing for botox + fame
Dancing out their lives
For nothing
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Posted: Tue Jul 05, 2005 3:31 pm
Phaedrin_a_Dragoon my odd poem......btw, FEEL FREE TO CRITICIZE THINGS CONSTRUCTIVELYCrazy masses Move + shake Dancing a dance But no one knows Just how it goes So each to their neighbor To copy those moves Steps repeated Recycled life Try to do it just right Just like everyone else The heady dance Of glamour + fashion Alluring, pretty skin Sick + twisted underneath Corrupt, dark people Rotting souls acting All alike, all alike In a dance, a race The prize goes to best conformer The most original gal Got her look from a zine Who stole it from another Over + over A vicious cycle The vicious dance Flash those pearly whites While you claw + backstab your way To the top of social mountain Manicured hands on lipo-ed hips Heeled feet planted wide Survey the shapeless hordes Going nowhere Dancing to oblivion Dancing for botox + fame Dancing out their lives For nothing Word. Thats life. I'll post one, you must guess what its about.
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Posted: Tue Jul 05, 2005 5:54 pm
Barely has any meter, mind you.
You see that ugly girl,
Standing there,
Looking Bare.
You see her dance,
You see her prance,
You see her fall,
You see her crawl.
She thinks you're God,
But does she know,
she can't be saved in the
Arms of death?
You play her like an
Old Toy Fiddle,
But its her
Wooden heart you wittle.
Stab her, watch her bleed,
Love her, drink her need.
Flourish under Golden Light,
Snicker at her Atrocious sight.
This is what you do,
This is who you are,
Kill then dance with that
Ugly Pretty Girl.
Take a guess!
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Posted: Tue Jul 05, 2005 7:27 pm
ok, i think its about unrequited love/you or imaginary person being in love with someone who treats them badly
please dont hit me if i'm wrong!!! ninja
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Posted: Wed Jul 06, 2005 8:19 pm
Half got it right!!!! Good job! Yeah, its like this girl is totally in love with one very abusive guy. Except he confuses her and tells her that he loves the girl so much...Then proceeds to mess with her. And such.
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Posted: Sat Jul 09, 2005 9:19 am
ACK!
Artistic people! Run, children! gonk
Skittle, yours is pretty deep.
luna's reminds me of DDR. xd
The end is so true...
I likes it. You two keep it coming!
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Posted: Sun Jul 10, 2005 6:30 pm
Elske29 ACK!
Artistic people! Run, children! gonk
Skittle, yours is pretty deep.
luna's reminds me of DDR. xd
The end is so true...
I likes it. You two keep it coming! elske.....luna hasn't posted in this thread... xp
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Posted: Sun Jul 10, 2005 6:31 pm
IgnorantSkittle Half got it right!!!! Good job! Yeah, its like this girl is totally in love with one very abusive guy. Except he confuses her and tells her that he loves the girl so much...Then proceeds to mess with her. And such. yaaay i got it right.......only, that's sad sad *tear
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Posted: Sun Jul 10, 2005 8:43 pm
...I was happy when I was writing it. crying You know whats funny? The only pieces I write about straight couples are sad. I'll post my other poem on a straight couple. Again, guess what its about!!!!
...Its happy to me though!
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Posted: Sun Jul 10, 2005 8:47 pm
I actually hate this one. It has no rhythm what so ever. I had the inspiration to write it while listening to 'UNDO' by Cool Joke. One of the theme songs for FUll Metal Alchemist. Anyways, I think its a happy poem. I write whatever comes into my brain, meaning I usually don't try to rhyme unless I want to.
I knew it when I saw you dance,
That you were free.
You spun and sang while crying,
Like it was your last day.
How did you ever love me?
How did you ever drag me?
Into that crazy world
that was your heart.
I should've known my love,
I could never catch you.
But you had me trapped.
What else could I have done?
The rings were set, and I stood there.
But you never showed.
Or did you?
I would never know.
Don't ever be sorry,
for the love we had.
For what you left, either.
I can try to love the wind.
Its what you are,
Not where you are.
Not even here beside me.
Don't regret it, because I don't.
Live long and live hard,
Keep on dancing and crying
Like its your last day.
whee I still think its happy. AAAH! *kills Gackt*
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Posted: Wed Jul 13, 2005 3:02 pm
that's really pretty, i like how it progresses like a story, but it's not happy xp hehe.
that's how i write too, i only wrote like two poems that rhymed, mostly it's just how i'm feeling or what i'm thinking about
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Posted: Wed Jul 13, 2005 9:13 pm
YES IT IS HAPPY! crying The guy is happy he was able to love her! Even if she left in at the alter...
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Posted: Wed Jul 13, 2005 11:15 pm
Phaedrin_a_Dragoon Elske29 ACK!
Artistic people! Run, children! gonk
Skittle, yours is pretty deep.
luna's reminds me of DDR. xd
The end is so true...
I likes it. You two keep it coming! elske.....luna hasn't posted in this thread... xp I feel loved... people are accidently putting my name in ^_____^ Now I HAVE posted 3nodding Power to the peoples!
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Posted: Thu Jul 14, 2005 5:21 pm
lunaarose I feel loved... people are accidently putting my name in ^_____^ Now I HAVE posted 3nodding Power to the peoples! post a poem! xp ...... please?
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