I can't deal with descriptive sex scenes in fanfiction.I have a weak stomach over anything.The first paragraph was very descriptive.It remined me of a tapeworm. D:
Other than that, the fanfic was amazing.I must say it was very smexy, and very well written.That girl apparently has talent for writing fanficton.
Some parts I got off, and it was very confusing about what was going on.Probably because I had stayed up all night, and then had just read it!XD
Yes, she did a terrific job.I'm going to read more of AubreyWitch's fanfiction.