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Narcissus' Tale
here comes a new poem.. just got under my fingers... heh joking only. this is th ebest proof to show what boredom can make of people. i hop eu like it. i love the last line. i'll be waiting for your comments


Narcissus' Tale

Two-sided mirror, heart shaped dagger, the edge is close,
All that remained - a fading smile, a once big grin of happiness
All lost among their misty memories... But now it's over.

This mirrow show the one i most love - the only one i truly love
It's not myself, oh, no...but maybe Narcissus could be. His own
Reflected face in water's surface is what he really wants to see
Too much is how he loved the lake reflect his face and the
Not realize how close he was to water's top and now - the limit.
But what he wanted was to stay forever a young beauty in his world.

A perfect couple. A duplicated boy. A human and his image in the water.

The blue-eyed transient boy just looked at Narcissus and smiled back
The water's blue was shaded and made dwindle away by doubled little boy
Who only watched himself during daylight, and prayed for night never to come.
Till one day when lake's waters kidnapped him and his twin reflection.
From that day on, the lake started to cry and cry and never stopped....
And let in place a flover grow - and named it after the Greek boy.

The forest fairy came days later and asked the weeping lake:
'Too much you cry the little boy. Is that how much you loved his beauty?'
'I never realized his beauty. I only loved to watch me in hsi eyes.'






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ElStupido
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commentCommented on: Mon May 08, 2006 @ 12:24pm
weeduu, comments finally work! whee
Narcissus' tale for ya kids, and in poetry! (the fish still needs a dictionary for it XD) but hell, it's a good piece of writing, if i do say so myself. i really like the last 2 stanzas, that's sure of metaphorical value! mrgreen but yeah, all of it's good!
ps. let them know that it is not rhyme that makes a poem, it's what feelings it conveys! 3nodding


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