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Report | 12/10/2008 3:59 pm

Randy_ArchAngel

HEY!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Report | 07/31/2008 9:41 pm

Randy_ArchAngel

Sup.

Report | 07/21/2008 3:53 am

Randy_ArchAngel

::pounces on his head::

Report | 06/19/2008 11:44 pm

Isiacc

It's sort of choppy, nothing really flows together. You're not really showing us the story, it's a lot of telling.



The initial ideas are there, you just need to take some chances with how you tell the story in terms of description. The way you've done makes the story sound very generic/teen fictionish.



Can you be more specific in anyways?

I don't see what's really choppy... can you give me an example? And to show you the story, like.... in what terms? Hmmm... this is interesting, and I need to hear what u got to say, b more critical about my work. I'm trying to take this very serious, and if it's a serious change, then that needs to be made. When you say I need to change how I tell the story, does that mean like... I'm over describing things? The words I'm using are awkward? I'm not describing them well? I don't want this to be a boring story, so if u can pick apart things for me, that'd b great. I wrote this story almost 4 years ago, and now I'm rewriting the entire thing, and I've not even covered 10%. I guess I should read some books, I haven't really read to much in my life which sucks cause it goes hand in hand with writing, I have read a total of like 5 books. It's horrible. lol

Report | 05/01/2008 11:40 pm

Hemlock Key

Lovely profile, and video.

Report | 04/30/2008 10:36 am

Alice_Time

Ah...of course. I'm sure it had nothing to do with you having too much time on your hands.

Report | 04/29/2008 10:15 pm

Alice_Time

I see you've updated yourself at last.

Report | 01/03/2008 10:08 pm

Randy_ArchAngel

::pounce::

Report | 12/01/2007 11:39 pm

Zovi

freak

Report | 11/05/2007 9:20 am

Randy_ArchAngel

Nice outfit. ::smirk::

Report | 08/26/2007 6:33 pm

Randy_ArchAngel

Mya!

Report | 07/14/2007 11:23 pm

Scarlett Succubus

*pokey poke*

Report | 06/19/2007 5:59 am

Randy_ArchAngel

Toaster? A moose.

Report | 06/19/2007 5:43 am

Terrin_DragonPrince

i know what's in the toaster...... a watch, so that it can burn into ur skin and u'll never lose it. ^.^

Report | 06/16/2007 3:18 am

Randy_ArchAngel

Fool! I know all!

Report | 06/13/2007 2:13 am

Termes_pulsatorius

I loved-ed joor amv!

Report | 06/05/2007 4:08 am

Randy_ArchAngel

I know who you are, and I know what you've done!
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Report | 12/16/2006 10:54 am

alicarnela

nice avi..lov the profile ...check out mine

Report | 10/02/2006 8:34 am

Alice_Time

*Huggles Hero* You put my AMV up! Yay! I worked so hard on that too.

Report | 08/20/2006 9:35 pm

Hero_Worship

Who? Her or me? Hmm...

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