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I don't have much critique yet. It reads like a Vertigo comic.

Yes, that is very good. But that style can get boring if it goes on and on. I swear I will finish reading it over this holiday so poke me with a pm if I have not responded.

I will get around to it. Anyhow, it is very good and you don't need me to tell you that, I think you realize you are on to something.

Some polish maybe, but not alot.

Um...maybe you could approach this one guy/girl/whatever, name of Nekoyaki.

If you write to Nekoyaki don't mention my name because I doubt that user would know who I am.

I read the entire comic. I am not sure what your pal Peter meant. The comic has a hook, it's a horror comic with an angsty good guy and a bad guy. Your bad guy is kind of one dimensional (like most of them tend to be). So I would expect you to flesh him out and make him more interesting in future issues. Or even related to Daniel (clone or twin or something) but we don't find that out for a while, just something to spice him up in whatever way you want to do that.

Maggie is a stereotypical name for an older woman. You have age 50, but she has arthritis and that doesn't click with me since in general that comes on later than age 50. So I would change her name and take away the arthritis.

All in all, I would say you have done a very good job with this.

What other characters? There is only Daniel. A little girl. Slithers or whatever his/her name is and Maggie. Oh isn't there some military bad guy too? The "Big Bad" orchestrater of the whole terrible thing that happened to Daniel?

At this point they are all sort of one dimensional. Daniel is the prototypic angst ridded emo protaganist. Slithers is the nasty. So is the military guy. Girl is the mystery. Maggie's the wise "crone" (thinking witchcraft here, she would be the crone). These are archetypal roles. What you have to do is bring them down to the human level and infuse them with life. That is hard to do in one comic. One thing you might want to do is bring in something very personal of Daniel's. As of right now things are kind of abstract. We find out that Daniel likes the sky. Ok...well maybe pick something else instead. Something a bit more interesting to like. Because you are not giving me a lot in my 24 pages to get to start to dig into the guy. Don't do something because it is formulaic and it works, do something because it's like grit in the person's eye and it's something they can't ignore, whether they like it or not.