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 Posted: Mon Aug 13, 2007 10:36 am
Please reply. I need some honest criticism
I looked at the fingerprints in the water
The memories of long ago
The memories no one remembers
And shall never know
And under the water flies a bird
Its wings stretched out wide
I grin as it skims the top of the water
On and on it flies
And under the water a little girl waves
Her finger tips reaching high
It seems if she was out of the water
She could reach the skies
So I reach for the water myself
And my fingers slide through
The air underneath dries my fingers
In the world of the water blue
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Posted: Tue Aug 14, 2007 2:06 am
wow, you have a real talent.
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Posted: Tue Aug 14, 2007 12:10 pm
so....many....compliments *jumps up and down with happiness*
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Posted: Thu Nov 01, 2007 5:17 am
I'm going to have to say I can't criticize it... It is too good to be criticized!!! 3nodding
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Posted: Sat Nov 03, 2007 11:18 am
I don't get poetry... But it flows nicely, so I guess it's good.!! X3 <3
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Posted: Sat Nov 03, 2007 5:48 pm
Wow that flows, more than alot of peotry ive read. You Have some serious talent. I cant critizise(sp?)it.^^
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