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Mighty Mitochondria

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PostPosted: Sat Aug 25, 2007 7:59 pm


Alright, as I'm pretty much new here, I may as well just say something about the story she belongs to.

It's basically about a failed attempt at time travel. The story follows one girl from 2007- 'Kenna London'. She's found by 'Jesse' and his younger sister 'Beryl' and they hide her, as the people like her are attracting a lot of violence. That's really all you need. I think.


Sorrysorrysorry, profile in next post.
PostPosted: Sat Aug 25, 2007 9:10 pm


***NOTE: Kenna London is NOT the real name for this character.




Name: "Kenna Rae London"

Age: 18 at the start, 23 by the end.

Birthdate: October 27, 1989

Appearance: Reddish-copper color, slightly past shoulders hair; green eyes; Mediterranean skin. Around 5'7" and 140 lbs.

-------------------PRESENT DAY: Usually wearing naturally faded and ripped jeans, and since her older brother's "death", his brown leather jacket. Doesn't have anything against skirts and fancier clothes, just doesn't want to wear them.Always has a pack of cigarettes and a lighter/matches tucked somewhere.

-----------2113-2117: Whatever she feels like. I have some example Tekteks in that thread.


History:

The youngest of two children, 'Kenna' grew up in a middle-middle-class family in Northwest Philadelphia. She had a great relationship with her brother, 'Miles', who was two years older than her. Her relationship with her parents was alright. They only knew how to cope with things by yelling; but other than that they were average parents. She was never terribly popular or ever interested in becoming it, therefore she only had a few friends.

Pre-story, 'Miles' managed to set her up with 'Gabriel Oak', their neighbor and his friend. 'Kenna' had been crushing on him from afar for quite some time, so you can imagine how (quietly) pleased she was when they started dating. Unfortunately for her, 'Gabriel' turned out to be a real p***k. He was manipulative, mean-spirited, and posessive with a drug/partying/andalcohol addiction... but 'Kenna', being the way she is... stayed with him. She had liked him for so long and was still so glad to be with him that she ignored all those things for a long time. The only time he ever physically harmed her was the last time she saw him before she time-traveled' when she finally tried to break up with him and he was really, realllllyyy drunk. But as you can imagine, he hurt her mentally and emotionally. Not a good relationship.

Two months prior to the story, her mother's mother died, and her parents flew to Greece to take care of her grandfather, so she moved in with 'Miles', who was then 19.

The morning before she time-traveled she got a call that the friend's house 'Miles' had been sleeping over at had completely burned down. They had found the friend's remains, but not 'Mile's', not yet. But there was no way he would have made it.

That night 'Gabriel' walks with her to a WaWa to get something to eat. He's his normal insensitive selfand she finally sees that, and she tries to end it with him. He doesn't take it too well (he's quietly wasted), and she has to run away across a road.

Where she's hit by an eighteen-wheeler.

She would have died, if she had stayed in the 21st century. Lucky for her, she didn't.


Personality: Very easily annoyed, irritated, and/or angered. She's very realistic, almost to a pessimistic degree. (That sound strange, but whatever.) She's very quick-thinking when she needs to be, especially when she needs to invent a lie. 'Kenna' is smarter than average, but she isn't a genius. She has a deep sense of loyalty.

In the right circumstances, noble. But only if she has to be.

She likes to think of herself as calm, cool, and collected; a tough girl who doesn't take anyone's s**t. For the most part, she acts that way. Privately, she's insecure in the worst way. And when it came to 'Gabriel', she had just wanted him so badly and was so glad when he finally wanted to go out with her/wanted her as a girlfriend, she would do whatever he wanted. That's one of her dangerous flaws- around someone who, like 'Gabriel', wants her and she wants them, she loses integrity and her values. She's a little girl who wants to please.

But for the most part, she's a reliable, smart, bitchy, disgruntled and loyal Misplaced hell-bent on getting home.

Mighty Mitochondria

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Kita-Ysabell

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PostPosted: Sat Aug 25, 2007 11:05 pm


You understand her! You really understand her! blaugh *jumps up and down and claps hands*... I think...

"Tenacious" is one major character trend (it underlies a lot of her characteristics) and "insecure" complements it nicely. For my personal aesthetic, I would like to see something that doesn't fit so well, but... that's up to you.

So... what terrible things happen to her? *nudge nudge*
PostPosted: Sun Aug 26, 2007 9:26 am


Well, she thinks that her brother, who was like her best friend, is dead for awhile. (In reality? He was affected by Dominic Gerard just like her when he was using a lighter- so he was sucked to 2113, and left a flame burning. That's why the apartment burned down.)


Ooh- well, she has her eyes burned by the sun. burning_eyes Her vision gradually deteriorates, up until the point where the nanobots inserted in her blood to protect her from more affects of Gerard's start to ruin her eyes even more. At that point they have to neutralize her eyes 3nodding So she has no eyes/is blind by the end.


Like a bunch of the other Misplaced, she goes insane by the end too. She gets over that, but 'Jesse' has to marry her to bust her out of the asylum because at the end she has no family, and therefore the staff is in charge of her care and they don't believe she's "recovered". She and 'Jesse' get divorced, though... at least for now.

Plus there's her whole relationship with 'Gabriel'.


Alright I'm done. whee

Mighty Mitochondria

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Kita-Ysabell

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PostPosted: Sun Aug 26, 2007 2:55 pm


Niiice *draws it out, pretending to be cool*
PostPosted: Sun Aug 26, 2007 6:43 pm


Yeah? 'Kenna's' not from the story that involves a LOT of abuse. I'd stretch the page if I were to bring that story's main character into here... that character scored a 99 on a Mary-Sue test. So, she's basically my angst-letter-outter now.

Mighty Mitochondria

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