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The Reason For Your Death

PostPosted: Sun Sep 02, 2007 11:25 am


This is a new song i just wrote!






Bullets To Love



So you thought i'd just ******** die right?

Or maybe get pissed off and start a fight!

But far away from your range of sight

I WAS PLOTING YOUR DOWNFALL AND ITS GONNA HAPPEN TONIGHT!

I've been through so much pain and anger

anymore its just like a hunger

feeding on my soul

all this s**t is taking a toll

i have to sit here in my little hole

while you ******** sit there on the highest poll.

i can't take it anymore

breaking down this ******** door

Bullets to love!

Bullets to love!

put the Bullets to Love!

so you think your number one?

after tonight your a** is done!

hang your your head high having fun.

ill still be holding the ******** smoking gun!

This aint no joke b***h

AFTER TONIGHT YOUR a** IS DONE!

and i said

Bullets to love!

Bullets to love!

Putting the the Bullets to love!

Yea you thought you were something?

like you had done something big

your just a goddamn pig!

now pig go the ******** away and eat your ******** figs.

if you dont get the ******** away soon they'll have to dig your grave.

Ill burn your a** with this here cig!

So dont think you know whats what!

ill take a a cleaver and stab in the gut!

all you are is a little slut

ill beat your a** and nail your eyes shut!

LISTEN!

im saying this one more time for all you assholes out there!

Bullets to love

Bullets to love

I said Bullets to ******** with me

ill beat your a** so bad you wont even see!

like i said b***h you aint nothing great

now if you ask why all the hate!

ill look you in the eyes and say

Bullets to love!

Now you say your done?

you dont want none?

Well now its just to ******** late!

Bullets to love!

BULLETS TO LOVE!!!!
PostPosted: Mon Sep 03, 2007 5:07 am


Sounds Nu-Metalish...

Just some constructive criticism here...

Quote:
anymore its just like a hunger

This line doesn't make sense.

Quote:
i have to sit here in my little hole
while you ******** sit there on the highest poll

Its obvious that you forced a rhyme there. People can sense these kind of things easily. Sitting on a poll? The only imagery I can get from that is hilariously anally sexual biggrin

Quote:
like you had done something big
your just a goddamn pig!
now pig go the ******** away and eat your ******** figs.

Same issue with before, the rhyme isn't contextually smooth. Forcing rhymes isn't really that great for songs unless it's done with a witty twist... otherwise they sound sort of well... childish. I mean... "eat your ******** figs"? What's so bad about eating figs? It's a pretty weak point for a song that's seemingly so full of anger.

Just my opinion of course.

Contagious Cure


The Reason For Your Death

PostPosted: Mon Sep 03, 2007 9:42 am


Contagious Cure
Sounds Nu-Metalish...

Just some constructive criticism here...

Quote:
anymore its just like a hunger

This line doesn't make sense.

Quote:
i have to sit here in my little hole
while you ******** sit there on the highest poll

Its obvious that you forced a rhyme there. People can sense these kind of things easily. Sitting on a poll? The only imagery I can get from that is hilariously anally sexual biggrin

Quote:
like you had done something big
your just a goddamn pig!
now pig go the ******** away and eat your ******** figs.

Same issue with before, the rhyme isn't contextually smooth. Forcing rhymes isn't really that great for songs unless it's done with a witty twist... otherwise they sound sort of well... childish. I mean... "eat your ******** figs"? What's so bad about eating figs? It's a pretty weak point for a song that's seemingly so full of anger.

Just my opinion of course.

thank you i love constructive criticism

and also anymore its just like a hunger means its like i feed off anger anymore which is true.
PostPosted: Thu Jan 31, 2008 6:07 pm


It might just be your style but the rhyming seemed a bit much....O and I loved how you sensored b***h and a** but not ******** lol

Goldul


Goldul

PostPosted: Thu Jan 31, 2008 6:10 pm


Well nvm I didn't know there was a profanity filter my bad
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