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 Posted: Fri Aug 05, 2005 7:19 am
She Left to Soon
She is no longer here
we will no longer see her smile
to hear her laughter
to talk no more
believing that no one cared,
that no one loved her
she never saw the hands reaching out to her
the hearts she touched
or those who cared
Blinded by pain and grief
when those who loved her were there all along
talking of games and of things that she loved
but she didn't see it
how much they do care
she was love she was light to those who cared
Now she's gone and there's emptiness and pain
that someone so wonderful took herself from us
took herself away
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Posted: Sat Aug 06, 2005 10:30 pm
It's a really touching poem with lots of emotion in it, but very little rhythm to it. If you added more puctuation that would really help the rhythm and the poem would have even more of an impact then it already does! Good job on this one!
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