The short story is called "coming out". No it's not your everyday story about a person coming out either. Any way. I wrote two versions of it and I need help seeing which one is better from a story stand point. Here are the links:
Ver. 1:
http://www.gaiaonline.com/journal/journal.php?mode=view&post_id=13774877&u=1304066Ver. 2:
http://www.gaiaonline.com/journal/journal.php?mode=view&post_id=13775021&u=1304066 Please do not give me a that story is better. Try to see it from all angles. I thought the first one was good and the second one was good. but since i put more sceneryi in there the shock of hearing who he truely is dissapates.
I was trying to get people wondering why is he coming out as being straight. why should he have to sorta thinking and then mack people think why homosexuals should have to come out.
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