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  It was good
  It was bad
  It was ugly
  But I was the one with the gun
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Zeo Hiroboshi

PostPosted: Tue Sep 11, 2007 8:49 pm


Drift my tyranny, come sweeping down this way
Washing away the soils, cleansing minds astray
For every virtue lies two a vice
and for every pain, another's placed
Wish for worlds so free of burdens
That peace would come some day

Casting down the calender with all its taunting dates
Broken acts of charity with empty solemn gaze
Marked up spots, now all's erased
With comfort comes the clarity that we're alone today

Mind focused, trails ablaze
Nothing that's worth saving was saved in solid pace
Put down in broken peace to rise again, my passing phase
Cause keeping down's the blessing of rising here someday
With broken dreams and shattered lives comes one more thing to say
Pick up all the pieces and envision life your way
PostPosted: Tue Sep 11, 2007 8:51 pm


Wow I really liked it man! My favorite little part was actually the very beginning and probably "For every virtue lies two a vice and for every pain, another's placed " Very awesome!

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Vice Captain

PostPosted: Wed Sep 12, 2007 7:07 pm


I read your other poem, too! *.*
You're REAAAAALLLYY good at poetry! XD
PostPosted: Fri Oct 05, 2007 3:25 pm


I voted good in the poll... But truthfully... that word doesn't cut it... It was excellent, superb, incredible, I could give you a list. hahaha

But I really enjoyed the last stanza... My two favorite lines were:

"Put down in broken peace to rise again, my passing phase......With broken dreams and shattered lives comes one more thing to say......"

SoonLovesEnough

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