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 Posted: Sat Sep 22, 2007 10:07 pm
This is the first thing I've ever posted anywhere! Please be kind! It's just the beginning, there's a lot more floating around in my noggin. Mistakes
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Posted: Sun Sep 23, 2007 7:04 pm
It's a really good start. I like the multiple perspective thing. The "Bad example" thing made me smile. 3nodding
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kittyfox_kumiko Vice Captain
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Posted: Tue Sep 25, 2007 6:39 am
As it did with me.
I like it! Its quite good. The only thing I'd say is be careful with the multiple perspective thing because I've seen it screwed up a lot. Though you're doing it perfectly. mrgreen
Whens the next bit up?
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Posted: Wed Sep 26, 2007 12:10 pm
I'm not sure when the next chapter will be up. I haven't had much to to work on it yet because I've been busy writing a lab report.
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Posted: Wed Sep 26, 2007 6:28 pm
Chapter 2 is up! It's only 600 some odd words, but it felt like the right place to stop.
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Posted: Wed Sep 26, 2007 7:28 pm
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kittyfox_kumiko Vice Captain
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Posted: Thu Sep 27, 2007 5:23 am
Yikes! Poor Dannyboy! Why do the bad guys always pick on him? emo
I liked it. Jack is completely right.
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Posted: Thu Sep 27, 2007 7:05 am
They pick on Danny cause he's fun to pick on... Yeah, I was worried that Jack was going to appear over the top, but so far I think I've got his character and sarcasm down really well.
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kittyfox_kumiko Vice Captain
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Posted: Thu Sep 27, 2007 2:15 pm
And mass kudos to you for that. I had such a hard time with Jack's character when I wrote for him.
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Posted: Fri Sep 28, 2007 8:18 am
Really? I think he's easiest to write for. Maybe it's because I happen to be a horribly sarcastic cynic.
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kittyfox_kumiko Vice Captain
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Posted: Fri Sep 28, 2007 8:50 am
Me, too, but it's the phrasing that gets me.
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Posted: Fri Sep 28, 2007 1:18 pm
Tarica They pick on Danny cause he's fun to pick on... Yeah, I was worried that Jack was going to appear over the top, but so far I think I've got his character and sarcasm down really well. He is, isn't he? You have got him down well, hes really good.
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Posted: Sat Sep 29, 2007 2:14 pm
Thank You!
Also, Chapter 3 is up!
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Posted: Wed Oct 03, 2007 2:10 pm
I have but one thing to say about that second half: Damn!
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kittyfox_kumiko Vice Captain
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