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carry on wayward daughter Vice Captain
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 Posted: Mon Oct 01, 2007 4:23 pm
I have a story in the fanfiction subforum titled "The Better Black." Due to the fact that I will continue working on the story until it is completed to my satisfaction, I cannot have replies directly on the thread.
Mariposa said that here would be the appropriate place to post a thread for comments, replies, and suggestions for my storyline.
So, feel free to comment on anything ranging from plotline to stylistics and prose. I can take criticism well, but I generally have a reason for the way that I write something.
Questions are definately welcome, and I would appreciate it if you find any major holes in the plotline, tell me.
discuss
How did you like the story? Was it any good?
I am an accomplished writer, but this is my first fanfiction. I'm nervous to see what you think.
Thanks!
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Posted: Mon Oct 01, 2007 7:22 pm
As always, guys, when offering criticism, put yourself in the author's shoes. Don't be nasty (or I'll be nasty!), be constructive.
Personally, I enjoyed this story very much. It warmed my heart to think that Sirius was merely trapped rather than dead. I thought it was written wonderfully, and I thought Sirius was portrayed perfectly. I'm looking forward to reading the next one - for which I'll take a little inspirational credit xd
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Orienla of Rel Devon Captain
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carry on wayward daughter Vice Captain
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Posted: Mon Oct 01, 2007 7:52 pm
Mariposa85 As always, guys, when offering criticism, put yourself in the author's shoes. Don't be nasty (or I'll be nasty!), be constructive. Personally, I enjoyed this story very much. It warmed my heart to think that Sirius was merely trapped rather than dead. I thought it was written wonderfully, and I thought Sirius was portrayed perfectly. I'm looking forward to reading the next one - for which I'll take a little inspirational credit xd Thank you SO SO SO SO SO much for the wonderful compliments, and you do definately deserve inspirational credit for Bellatrix.
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Posted: Tue Oct 02, 2007 8:39 am
tourniquetsmile Mariposa85 As always, guys, when offering criticism, put yourself in the author's shoes. Don't be nasty (or I'll be nasty!), be constructive. Personally, I enjoyed this story very much. It warmed my heart to think that Sirius was merely trapped rather than dead. I thought it was written wonderfully, and I thought Sirius was portrayed perfectly. I'm looking forward to reading the next one - for which I'll take a little inspirational credit xd Thank you SO SO SO SO SO much for the wonderful compliments, and you do definately deserve inspirational credit for Bellatrix. I love the Bellatrix chapter...kind of made me sad that it was so short though!
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Orienla of Rel Devon Captain
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carry on wayward daughter Vice Captain
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Posted: Tue Oct 02, 2007 4:14 pm
Mariposa85 tourniquetsmile Mariposa85 As always, guys, when offering criticism, put yourself in the author's shoes. Don't be nasty (or I'll be nasty!), be constructive. Personally, I enjoyed this story very much. It warmed my heart to think that Sirius was merely trapped rather than dead. I thought it was written wonderfully, and I thought Sirius was portrayed perfectly. I'm looking forward to reading the next one - for which I'll take a little inspirational credit xd Thank you SO SO SO SO SO much for the wonderful compliments, and you do definately deserve inspirational credit for Bellatrix. I love the Bellatrix chapter...kind of made me sad that it was so short though! Like, with Sirius, I wanted it dramatic though nothing was happening. With Bellatrix, I wanted it to make a punch. Don't worry, though. She'll be around.
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Posted: Tue Oct 02, 2007 6:13 pm
I really liked your fanfic! It was well-written and the idea was really original. I love being able to see different peoples' spins on things, and I liked your spin on Sirius's death. Good job!
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carry on wayward daughter Vice Captain
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Posted: Tue Oct 02, 2007 6:35 pm
I do love your fanfic on the twins. It's amazing. Posting my first fanfiction, I feel slightly intimidated. That's how good it is. :]]
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Posted: Tue Oct 02, 2007 8:15 pm
Much love to Mariposa who constantly helps me with my fanfiction. heart
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carry on wayward daughter Vice Captain
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Posted: Wed Oct 03, 2007 2:30 pm
tourniquetsmile I do love your fanfic on the twins. It's amazing. Posting my first fanfiction, I feel slightly intimidated. That's how good it is. :]] Aw, thanks!
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Posted: Thu Oct 04, 2007 2:24 pm
I really like the story, especially considering Sirius is one of my favorite characters!! I was very upset that he died...
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carry on wayward daughter Vice Captain
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Posted: Thu Oct 04, 2007 4:07 pm
waterstone33 I really like the story, especially considering Sirius is one of my favorite characters!! I was very upset that he died... me, as well!
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Posted: Fri Oct 05, 2007 5:39 pm
the next two parts have been posted, if you wanted to know! 3nodding
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carry on wayward daughter Vice Captain
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Orienla of Rel Devon Captain
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Posted: Fri Oct 05, 2007 5:55 pm
I read them! They're awesome, as always!
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Posted: Fri Oct 05, 2007 5:58 pm
-blushes-
Thanks!
And, to think, I've never written a fanfiction before. But this is starting to turn out better than some of my short stories.
whee
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carry on wayward daughter Vice Captain
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carry on wayward daughter Vice Captain
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Posted: Fri Oct 05, 2007 7:28 pm
And another.
I had no school today. I've been relaxed enough to write. Yay!
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