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Kita-Ysabell

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PostPosted: Thu Oct 04, 2007 4:29 pm


Here are all my characters from "Little Birds." They are tekteked because I do not feel like drawing them at the moment. After all, they don't really look that interesting.


User Image - Blocked by "Display Image" Settings. Click to show.User ImageFirst up.

Name: Wile

Occupation: Lamest mage ever. Not only is he virtually unable to use his magic, it wouldn't do any good even if he could. He's just that lame.

Personality: Total wimp. Shy, timid, hesitant to do anything, and constantly apologizing, often for things totally out of his control (well, everything is, but still). Unlike a lot of seemingly timid characters, there is not flint burried under there somewhere, and assuming otherwise would be a huge mistake. If he's gonna have any spine at all, he's gonna have to build it verabrae by freaking vertabrae. Not really a deep thinker, as he's more or less in a constant state of panic.

Motivations: Frightened. He is rather too well aware of the fact that everything dies, as he is a necromancer and, true to the name of his magic, works primarily with death. He would be fatalistic if he weren't so shortsighted, but... he is. Probably the wear and tear of permanent Fight of Flight reactions. Also, I hate to put this here, but... gullible. He stays with Icar because Icar says so, then spies on Icar because Talin says so. He never needs a reason, never questions anything.

Development During Story: Yes, Wile gets a backbone, along with formulating his own ideas about how the world works and more or less developing morals. Still can't use his magic enough to challenge a god, and his magic isn't the challenging gods type, anyway.


User Image - Blocked by "Display Image" Settings. Click to show.User ImageName: Rora

Occupation: Mildly useless protagonist

Personality: Reasonably blank. Always a little spaced-out. Naturally suspicious, even if she doesn't have a clue what's going on. Besides, that, not particularly curious about anything. Naive (obviously). Somewhat sympathetic, even if she doesn't trust people. Doesn't relate well to death. Never does, even at the end of the story.

Motivation: Suspicion, being thrown into the middle of things. Later on, as her compassion develops, that as well. Boredom, to some degree, and a lack of self-preservation instinct, although later on she has an aversion to pain. Really, she just does what she does because she doesn't see an alternative- she was thrown into the middle of this conflict and people keep involving her in it.

Development During Story: She gets a personality. Stays suspicous, but more compassionate. At one point develops a rather childish version of right and wrong, but that gets shot all to hell. Always a bit of a simpleton, appearing rather brainwashed. Never relates well to death, as mentioned above, as she... doesn't really understand it. Even seeing people die doesn't make her understand. Never really gets responsibility, either. Doesn't consider it too important.


User Image - Blocked by "Display Image" Settings. Click to show. User ImageName: Ebry

Occupation: Same as Rora.

Personality: Again with the blankness. Unlike Rora, he is exceedingly curious, and feels great satisfaction at completing things. Or... as much as he can, seeing the whole brainwashed bit. Really, really terrible judgement. The kind of person who always goes into the basement when the lights go out, even if they've watched a thousand horror movies. On the flip side, not exactly what you'd call nice. Would probably disect people live if he wasn't kept busy. Maybe that's just a lack of empathy. Who knows.

Motivation: Curious, mostly, and again with the bad judgement. Although he eventually develops an aversion to both pain and death, unlike Rora, these aren't really strong- more like a mild annoyance than a taboo. Also likes to get things done.

Development During Story: In some ways, a lot less than Rora. He too has to learn about pain and death, but he does so for both, even though he still doesn't really care. Gets to be ever the slightest bit cautious, but... well... yeah. Still acts pretty much like he did in the begining- a bit clueless. Learns to form oppinions, to some degree, but it isn't a big one.
PostPosted: Mon Oct 08, 2007 7:08 pm


^ I wanna read that! *whine* gonk

I like the useless mage the best I think. The others seemed kinda washed out, but from your description, I'm guessing that was your point. Gives you more to add on if they suck in the beginning. mrgreen

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Kita-Ysabell

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PostPosted: Sat Oct 27, 2007 10:54 pm


I will post excerpts, as soon as there are excerpts to post. Maybe not the whole thing though, come to think of it.

And there's more! Kita and Feragel, re-vamped for their new setting.

User Image - Blocked by "Display Image" Settings. Click to show. User ImageName: Feragel

Occupation: Vampiric freelance espianage specialist and thief for rich people

Personality: His soul is half-animal, and it shows. A predator, in both the very literal and the interpersonal sense. As such, he doesn't kill people if there's no purpose in it, and he doesn't kill people if he considers them peers. He doesn't really think this through, it's just how he's programmed. Generally well-mannered, but unable to maintain a facade for an extended period of time. Kills without remorse, favors pretty woment as prey. Still has a film noir aire about him.

Motivations: Partially for the potential it presents. A lot of the things he's hired to do are really trivial or petty. He kind of likes the idea of doing something that would have a lasting effect. Partially to help Kita, as he thinks of her as a comrade of sorts. He also sees Talin as a bit of an intruder or challenge to his status.

Development During Story: Gets a bit pissed off at humans in general. He never really thought all that much of them, but he starts to rather dislike them as he realizes what's going on. Not a whole lot of change besides that. He's only got a few more years to live, and his character's already pretty compatible with the setting when we meet him, so he hasn't got a whole lot of motivation to change.


User Image - Blocked by "Display Image" Settings. Click to show. User ImageName: Kita

Occupation: Bum, former KGB type

Personality: Smart but hates complexity and subterfuge, independent, has a typically male distrust of communication. She'll seek out the most straightforeward answer to a problem and follow that to see where it goes rather than trying to guess which answer is really right before acting. Takes pride in her skills as a fighter, even though she dislikes where those skills came from. Gets annoyed at people who read too much into things or try to asign meaning to stuff.

Motivation: Revenge and remorse. During the first part of her life (she was created much the same way Rora and Ebry were) Talin used her to kill anyone who doubted him, especially necromancers, so she earned the nickname "Mage Killer." As time went on, he began to loose control over her, and she took out the frustration at having her will bound on her victims. When she finally broke free, he tried to have her killed, but she was more experienced than anyone he sent after her.

Development During Story: Well, she's got to get over her issues, hasn't she? At least to some degree. She has to step off the "I'm the best fighter in the world!" pedastal and re-evaluate her skills a bit. If I was nice, I would give her something useful for peacetime, but... well... I'm not.
PostPosted: Sun Oct 28, 2007 11:25 am


Feragel and Darcy would probably get along wonderfully. mrgreen I should really throw that man into the Abused Character Support Group someday, but I'm having fun with Jones and everyone. Perhaps he will replace Randy.

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PostPosted: Sun Oct 28, 2007 11:30 am


Actually, now that I think of it, Feragel isn't really all that social. He's got a bit of that 'lone wolf' thing going on, but with the rough edges all smoothed out. The only person he consistantly interacts with is Kita, and they do not get along. Other than that, he tries to seduce women as prey, and... he can be civil to his employers. He leaves other vampires alone most of the time.
PostPosted: Sat Nov 03, 2007 8:42 pm


I have a few like that. Ingram was a big mistake to put in the CAA. I've just tortured him so much there's no longer anything left there to be sociable with. He just didn't click.

ii Cappi ii


Kita-Ysabell

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PostPosted: Sat Nov 03, 2007 10:46 pm


Oh, he can interact with people, he just doesn't like them. And did I mention the trying to kill them bit? Yeah.
PostPosted: Sun Nov 04, 2007 2:06 pm


Ah. Ingram just wants to kill himself, but *heheh* he can't cause he's subject to the will of his Queen, who doesn't want him to die. twisted Poor faerie . . .

ii Cappi ii

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