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iquitthishatefulsite Crew
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 Posted: Wed Oct 24, 2007 10:09 pm
well I do alot of poetry in my everyday lie, so I thought it would be cool if you could all share poems, and have people help us on improving them!
If I hear one that is just breath taking I might donnate to ya a bit wink
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Posted: Wed Oct 24, 2007 10:12 pm
here is the begining of a poem I am working on
Climbing,climbing,
the unsean top, taunting,
tanunting,
A little more,
a little more.
Never ending,
you come so far,
have so much,
and yet you always fall,
trip,
and start to louse control,
falling, falling,
the unseen bottom, waiting.
I don't know what to do next!
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iquitthishatefulsite Crew
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iquitthishatefulsite Crew
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Posted: Wed Oct 24, 2007 10:18 pm
here be another one,
Hands open,
so far from you,
still warn from when your,
hand was in mine.
Pale damaged hands,
How do you feel?
Moved on,
well I haven't,
I don't forget,
I don't.
Yesterday,
yor hands where in mine
our shooting star has faded,
and in your memory I will fade,
just like the next girl,
but I will never forget,
your hands,
that face may fade,
but forever more,
it will be yesterday your hands,
where in mine
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Posted: Wed Oct 24, 2007 10:20 pm
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iquitthishatefulsite Crew
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Posted: Thu Oct 25, 2007 10:48 pm
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Posted: Fri Oct 26, 2007 11:51 am
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iquitthishatefulsite Crew
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Posted: Fri Oct 26, 2007 7:08 pm
lilymia here is the begining of a poem I am working on Climbing, climbing,
To the unseen top,
There is taunting,... taunting,
A little more,
A little more.
Never ending,
You've come so far,
You have so much,
And, yet, you always fall,
You trip,
And start to loose control,
Falling,... falling,...
To the unseen bottom... waiting.I don't know what to do next! I edited it for you, but other than that, I thought it was really good. I see that you want to add more to it. Hmm... how about... You begin to think:
Why bother trying?
It never seems to cease,
I am forever falling,... failing
Until my own end.
But do not loose faith.
You have worth...
You have greatness...
You... have a purpose...Just making a suggestion. Tell me if you like it or not. (Don't worry, you don't have to.)
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Posted: Sat Oct 27, 2007 2:39 pm
Ilike it! ( sorry It was late when I wrote it)
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iquitthishatefulsite Crew
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Posted: Sat Oct 27, 2007 2:41 pm
lilymia Ilike it! ( sorry It was late when I wrote it) Thanks! Lol, it's okay.
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Posted: Sat Oct 27, 2007 2:43 pm
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iquitthishatefulsite Crew
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Posted: Sat Oct 27, 2007 2:45 pm
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Posted: Sat Oct 27, 2007 3:05 pm
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iquitthishatefulsite Crew
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Posted: Sun Nov 04, 2007 12:15 pm
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