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 Posted: Thu Aug 11, 2005 4:14 pm
Well, I'm going to post my first story up over here, in my second post. 3nodding Hehehe... I've started on so many stories, but never finished one, except for this one. sweatdrop But, I hope you enjoy my story. It's an Athrun + Cagalli story, a couple from Gundam Seed. Yup, I'm too addicted to them. sweatdrop
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Posted: Thu Aug 11, 2005 4:16 pm
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Posted: Fri Aug 12, 2005 8:51 am
wow verry nice.. I can't wait to see more....
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Posted: Fri Aug 12, 2005 10:52 am
Thank you! I do want to write chapters for it, but I'm still planning it out though. 3nodding So I take it that you know Gundam Seed, or Athrun + Cagalli?
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Posted: Fri Aug 12, 2005 11:33 am
I like it! I especially like the way you intertwined the song with the story. ^.^ I did notice a couple of grammatical errors that bugged me a bit that I thought I'd point out to you, though.
First of all, you seemed to change tense a lot. I don't know if it was intentional or not. I just noticed that biggrin
Second, "Athrun engaged to me..." seems to me like it should say "Athrun and I are engaged..." or "Athrun proposed to me..."
Other than that, I really did like it whee
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Posted: Fri Aug 12, 2005 11:46 am
Hehehe... sweatdrop One time, I was writing an Inuyasha + Kagome story, and I was writing in script form. eek I am never writing like that again. Thank you for the pointers, Cathrine Evlange. I'll try to remember those when I write my other stories. 3nodding wink
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