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 Posted: Fri Aug 12, 2005 10:02 am
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Posted: Sun Aug 14, 2005 8:07 am
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Posted: Sat Aug 20, 2005 10:47 am
Good pretty good, heh Nida acutally reminds me of a friend of mind at my old school.... one of the things that caugt my attention about the character as I read her descprtion, you did pretty well in building up the suspsense. Grammer wise( I'm not very good at correcting grammer.) I thought it was alright. The paragraphs run very smoothly. Overall good so far. Though the Vampire Genre I feel has been done quite a bit I feel that you did pretty well!!
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Posted: Sat Aug 20, 2005 1:35 pm
Oh wows! =D I loved it. I forgot for a moment I was sitting here at my computer desk. Very very very very good. You must write more. <3
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Psychotic Maniacal Sanity
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Posted: Sat Dec 03, 2005 2:37 am
Oh yesh <3 I loved it! You must write some more... I thought you pulled off the Vampire thing very well in deed. Better than I have done lol
Keep it up!
<3 Chessie
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Posted: Tue Dec 27, 2005 9:12 pm
heart I love it plz right more
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Posted: Sun Feb 12, 2006 11:48 pm
Your story was very interesting, especially for a vampire story. Elements of it, however, seemed very unbelieveable, such as how she could fight in school and the teacher wouldn't do anything about it. Also, at the very beginning you began in present and went to past.
I really like Nida's character though. She's interesting, a strong female, and you created her character very well.
I hope you post more soon!
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Posted: Mon Dec 18, 2006 7:48 pm
actually it starts in the past and goes to the present. the mother in the room is hers. but thanks for the critique ^^
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Posted: Sun Mar 25, 2007 5:39 pm
Oh, I meant tense wise, not time wise. Sorry for the mix-up there. sweatdrop
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Posted: Wed Jun 20, 2007 5:29 pm
oh yah, yet another habbit to break. sweatdrop
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Posted: Sat Jul 07, 2007 9:31 am
I thought it very well written. Have you ever read Twilight by Stephanie
Meyer? That is a great vampire story, it completely changes how you see
vampires. I thought it was very good, considering all the vapire books I've
read. ^^ Write MORE!! 3nodding
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Posted: Mon Feb 04, 2008 5:15 pm
no but I love Demon my view by Atwater Rhodes... but I love anything with vampires in it. xd
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