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PostPosted: Thu Nov 22, 2007 7:57 pm


If i have grammar erros tell me okay? I don't have things to fix my work and I am bad with grammar.

The tears, the lonliness. The dark corner in the recess of the human mind let the void be filled and maybe one day the spirit wil break free the torture. Watching all the faces pass by and seing as their expressions fill with emotions. See their eyes, never acknowledging you. Have you ever seen a pair of lonlier eyes than your own? Have you ever felt the sting of winters air on the back of your soft neck? Can you feel the haunting past coming back, can you feel its beating as it hits you with no mercy? What about the sky? Can you see it, can you feel its claws as they reach out to attack you? The ripping of those cotton lines in the air amuzing every little sense of evil in your mind. I feel a soft wind flow in and I look to see a single pair of eyes on me, the gaze is something I have always longed for yet never received, but what is it that I feel from these eyes? It isnt what I wanted, it isnt the caring that I saw in the others eyes. It is pity. No I don't want pity, back away, look away, leave me alone i dont want you to feel sorry for me, I want you to go. I dont need your sorry feelings just leave me alone. Please. These tears, i dont want anyone to see them as they fall please just go. I don't need anything just go, and take your pity as you go. As i sit here i wonder if life is real or just a dream, am I just sitting in another time another place and just thinking about this? If so why do I keep on thinking? Wouldnt I just wake up to my perfect little world, the perfect day the friends I never had and just be happy for a change? Wouldn't I fall from this dream, or is this my reality, can I not escape? I want to be alive, not in this dead shell, I want to know love like anyone else, i want to know I am alive that I am loved. help, some one help me please. Come back, anyone. I am nothing, I am nothing. Why do I realize that now? When the eyes have all turned, the one pair of ees the one I saw not what it was but what I feared. I didn't look I just thought it would be different. I never knew, I could never know. I am sorry, I am so sorry. All I wanted was love.
PostPosted: Fri Nov 23, 2007 8:44 am


I liked it...it was a bit confusing at times because of the way it is written like a paragraph..but overall it was very thought provoking. And the only real grammatical errors I found were that lonlier and and lonliness---it is lonelier and loneliness.

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