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Giftschlange

PostPosted: Fri Nov 30, 2007 5:16 pm


I wrote this poem one day because I was bored. People have told me it was good, but I would like to see what people in this guild think.

You Don’t Know Me
You don’t know me,
You don’t know anything about me.
You don’t know who I am.
I tend to keep my emotions bottled up inside me.
You don’t know me at all,
Sometimes you say something and I will agree with you,
But in my mind I contradict you.
You don’t know the first thing about me.
You don’t know me.


If you think there is anything that could be changed in this poem to make it better? Then please tell me in a post. mrgreen
PostPosted: Sat Dec 15, 2007 11:15 pm


It's good; make it longer! I think you could maybe use a few more lines to balance out the "you don't know" parts.

Niwashi


MillieMontag451

PostPosted: Mon Feb 04, 2008 6:28 pm


That's really cool, universal too. I might get into more details though, if I were you.
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Creative Endeavors: A place for geeks to display their creative side

 
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