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 Posted: Sat Jan 19, 2008 7:43 pm
What a wondrous love it is
To bind two souls in faith;
Chained completely together
With never a false word,
Weal and woe, wish and real,
Woven each together
From first kiss to last breath,
First and last whispered in love
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Posted: Sun Jan 20, 2008 8:17 am
It didn't flow very well, like the syllable count went from eight, to six, to seven, (Here's were it fell apart for me.) then to six. Six again, six, six, then to seven.
You need to keep it as a pattern, there needs to be repetition, but not only of one syllable count, usually it's two or three.
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Posted: Tue Jan 22, 2008 8:18 pm
...I'm a little confused on what exactly you're saying when you say, "it didn't flow well". Did you imply the syllable count, or the rhyme scheme?
If it helps any, it was meant to be in free verse.
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Posted: Thu Jan 24, 2008 4:18 pm
The syllable count... I don't really do free verse much... but if that's how it's supposed to be...
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