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 Posted: Sun Aug 21, 2005 5:17 pm
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Posted: Sun Aug 21, 2005 6:35 pm
Rednal ~ Really great work! I must admit though that at times it was a little hard for me to follow -- not for any bad reason, but simply because I'm not much of a fan of first person, IN SAYING THAT, I think you wrote it really well, so kudos and great work smile
There were a small number of missing & misplaced words, but I feel bad for pointing them out to Oterys the other day, so I'm not gonna go ahead and do that wink But I just thought I'd let you know there were some in there. But hey, other than them (and there were very few that I could see), it was really well written.
I especially loved the scene when James summoned the beings, more so their request that he talk normal and not in a stuffy manner. That made me chuckle; I'm a huge fan of the stuffy talk, being a Twelfth Night fan and all.
So once again, great work, keep it up, and I cannot wait to read more!
~ Demelza
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Posted: Tue Aug 23, 2005 10:14 am
First person hurts my head, but it was such a good story that I had to finish it anyway! But what's this business with the 0's across the page? The content was great though, I can't wait to read more!
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Posted: Wed Aug 24, 2005 4:38 pm
The zeros are markers for the beginning and end of each chapter. ^^ The purpose they serve benefits only me, really, for the document on my computer. When I need to find a chapter fast, it makes it easier. ^^ I'll post the First Chapter in a bit.
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Posted: Fri Aug 26, 2005 4:08 pm
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Posted: Fri Oct 14, 2005 5:37 pm
I love it! iTs very good!
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Posted: Sun Jan 01, 2006 6:54 pm
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