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Butterflies. I remeber raising a butterfly in 4th grade and naming it homer simpson. Then I remembered it being released back into the wild and I remember my child hood friend whom I was very close to at the time say good by to her pet. When I moved up here I lost all contact with my child hood friend not even so much as a good bye. She really was close to me I don''t know why or how it came to be. But like the butterfly my child hood friend may or may not fly back into my life.....

heh wrote this in kind of a mood and completly different from what I would usually post. Funny how the slightest stings motivate even the most sub par prose''s...

I think it's meant to be a thought provoking piece, but the way you have it set up takes away from the impact I think you were trying to make. It is a good start, but I think you made it more like a journal entry. Try spacing out the lines more so the ideas don't run together and make making the lines longer so that the events aren't rushed. I do like how you started with the one word- it catches the reader's attention immediately and makes them wonder why you did that. I also like the ending, though I'm not really sure why. Overall, could use some tweaking, but other than that it was good.