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PostPosted: Wed Mar 12, 2008 8:48 pm


a/n: A completely different style from my last thing, which I may actually be updating one day, unlikely as it seems. Also, it's a vampire story. I'm sorry! I couldn't help it!

Rating:

PG
Violence (moderate)
Suggestive content (mild to none)
Swearing (mild to moderate)

CHAPTER ONE

I opened my eyes.

This failed to make any great difference in my view, except for the fact that the darkness became marginally thicker, and my head started to throb. The floor lurched, and I tumbled sideways, landing heavily on my side. Cold metal pressed into my wrists when I tried to push myself up - handcuffs?

My brain finally unearthed the relevant memory:

It was October 30, 2006, and I was, as per schedule, walking Hercules the incredibly wimpy dog. Night was already setting in,and clouds hung low and threatening above my head. It was a perfectly normal evening, an entirely ordinary walk, and the dog in question was extraordinary only in his name, which was not so much a blessing as a curse.

And the back of my neck was prickling.

My father went on a lot about the dark roots of humanity and the underlying instincts of man, and mostly the rest of us nodded along and spent a few happy moments completely ignoring him, but right then I could believe every word. Senses older than me were spreading feelers, scenting the air. Hercules started to growl.

The distant rumble of a car's engine reached my ears, and normally I would have assumed that the vibrations were what had been making me uneasy. That night, though, I started to run.

Unfortunately, I was fifteen years old with all the muscle tone of a rubber band, and the car was approaching at speed. I tried to convince myself that it wasn't following me. Just because it was going the same way and was the only other moving thing on the road didn't mean anything, obviously. Then the car caught up with me, and I glimpsed a sleek black hood as it rolled to a stop under the orange glow of the streetlamp. The door opened, and what looked for all the world like a solid shadow stepped out and raised one hand.

Then there was only pain, and pressure, and darkness.

"Crap, crap, crap," I mumbled, tugging ineffectually at my bonds.

But it didn't make any sense! My parents, in an act of universal kinsmanship with mothers and fathers around the world, had pushed paranoia to heights far beyond the boundary of logic, and they didn't so much as hand me a cell phone when walking down Elm Street. Crimes didn't happen to the aging citizens of Elm Street. Hell, crimes
weren't worth the effort on Elm Street, where people kept their money in respectable banks and put complex padlocks on the doors out of habit. It was possibly the quietest place within a ten mile radius of the area.

Or not, I thought wryly, as the floor gave another lurch.

Someone chuckled. I looked around wildly and completely pointlessly, searching, nevertheless, for the source.

"Over here," said a low voice somewhere to my left. "Do you like the handcuffs?"

Drunk on adrenaline and fear, I snapped "I can't see them, genius!"

There was a pause. I replayed the sentence in my head, winced, and added, eloquently, "Uh."

There was another silence, in which I realized that my forehead was slick with sweat, in the best traditions of terrified kidnap-ees everywhere.

Then the voice murmured, "Of course. How remiss of me."

Sudden, dazzling white light blinded me, and I let out an involuntary yelp of surprise. The kidnapper did his trademark low chuckle again. I was beginning to harbor a deep dislike for that chuckle.

As my eyes adjusted, I took in my surroundings. I was lying in the cramped trunk of a small, stylish car done up in black leather and chrome, the kind of vehicle that would have made my mother, the incurably obsessed automobile lover, drool. It looked like a well cared for rich boy's ride, except for two key details. First, though the white light was far stronger than most car lights and illuminated the space perfectly, I could find no obvious light source, and second, the windows were solid black. Not the diffused, second-rate black of midnight or the dark grey of tinted glass. This black looked like someone had simply cut a hole out of the universe and hadn't bothered to fill it up again. It wasn't velvety, smooth, rich, or any of the words that people use when trying to describe shades of darkness. In fact, it simply wasn't. Trying to look out those windows was an exercise in futility, and also made my eyes water.

I groped vaguely for something to say, and finally had to settle for "Where are we?"

"That's not what you say next," said the mystery man - and yes, now I listened the voice was definitely male - firmly.

"Huh?"

"You're supposed to say 'Who are you? Why did you hit me? Help! HELP!!' etc.," said the man, with the air of someone imparting a life lesson.

"Who the hell are you?" I growled, with heavy sarcasm.

"My name is Gabriel von Dhampir," said the self-proclaimed Dhampir.

"And your name, my love, is Lily."

I opened my mouth and paused, silenced momentarily as I debated between two tempting options: demanding how he knew my name and demanding who he thought he was, calling me 'his love'. It was a painful decision, but I eventually decided to sacrifice righteously angry inquiries in the name of different righteously angry inquiries.

"How did you know my name?"

Over the top of the backboard I thought I glimpsed a pale face turning towards me.

"We have our ways. You would be surprised how much we know - if I were to tell you, that is," he added smugly.

I could practically hear the evil smile.

*

It was a dark and stormy night.

At the northernmost point of the Oregon Coast, a dark castle reared above the sheer cliffs. The only other sign of civilization was the golden smudge on the horizon, which marked the edge of the city. Standing in front of the imposing double doors, listening to the thunder still ringing in my ears, it was easy to imagine the sort of terrors that normally inhabited only the lesser class of horror movie.

"Bloody Oregon," I grumbled loudly, to drown out the fuss my imagination was making. "If you're going to stalk and abduct me, couldn't you at least have dragged me somewhere warm?" We'd been driving for only five hours, according to my digital watch, and that was impossible. He'd started in Menlo Park, and even without
traffic it should have taken nearly ten hours to cover the hundreds of miles between California and the northern edge of Oregon. Then again, it wasn't as if there weren't impossible things coming out of his ears. I'd spent most of the trip at varying levels of dizziness, irritation, and fear. The combination resulted in excessive sarcasm on
my part and excessive amusement on his - and I was scared. Because one of the few things Gabriel von Dhampir had told me was that he wanted me to stay with him forever, and there, staring up at the desolate towers he called home, I wasn't at all sure how to escape him. It wasn't as if von Dhampir had been very sparing with information. He had spent most of the time snickering at me. Plus, on the evening of the second day, he had suddenly turned pensive, and started to murmur outdated endearments to me, the kind of thing you read in 18th century romance novels, which was possibly worse than the snickering.

Actually, the whole story might have made me laugh if I hadn't been too busy trying to remember all the tips they gave me in the annual self-defence courses provided by my old school. It was a pity, I mused, that the classes had been held a week before the public release of the last book in my favorite series, ensuring that my mind was far,
far away. I didn't really think 'tips' would have helped anyway, but they would have been something to fill the dreadful hours of waiting with.

"Well," said the kidnapper, behind me, "are you going in?"

Did I mention he had something that felt suspiciously like a claw pressed to the back of my neck?

"Why not," I said resignedly, and knocked twice on the heavy oak.

High above us, someone turned on a lamp. The door creaked open, and a thin line of light pierced the darkness before us.

"The young master is home," rasped the apparition that had appeared in the doorway, apparently to the air beside him. He was a patchwork doll of a man, deformed, one-eyed, and limping. He used the word 'master.' These little clues can suggest a lot to the average if nervous teenage mind.

"Let me guess," I sighed. "Igor, right?"

"Yes, miss," said Igor, and beckoned for us to come in. His master increased the pressure slightly, and I stepped forward. The doors slammed shut behind us with a leaden thud, while the corridor stretching out ahead of me was bare and cold and empty. Even the grey flagstones seemed to emanate a chill. Torches placed in
convenient brackets along the wall cast long shadows in the wrong
places. It was, in short, a scene familiar to anyone who'd ever seen a film of Dracula. I glared at it, on general principles.

Then one of the shadows stepped forward and, as the yellow glow of one flame passed over it, suddenly took the shape of a woman.

She was clearly related to Gabriel, with the same perfect, carved white features and the same hair, so black it looked wet where the
smooth curve of her skull reflected the gleam of the flames. She was wearing an evening gown of dark burgundy, and when she spoke her voice
dripped elegance.

"Ah, the prodigal son returned to us at last. And I see you bring a visitor.'

They exchanged bright smiles.

Without showing teeth, I noted.

Obviously, I knew vampires didn't exist. But the fact was that I knew vampires didn't exist in the same way that I knew there were no ancient, craggy castles in Oregon, and that men who had undergone as much surgery as Igor clearly had could only be found in one place, and that was six feet underfoot. All those things were common sense, but under the circumstances common sense was a bit of a problem for me, since I was pretty sure this wasn't any sort of hallucination. I pointedly avoided thinking about this as my footsteps echoed loudly in the prominent silence. Apparently the entire family, staff included, walked like cats.

"My name is Lucinda, and I am Gabriel's mother, as," she smiled again, briefly, "you may have guessed. And what is your name, my dear?"

"Don't you already know it?" I said bluntly.

Gabriel, acting on the reasonable assumption that even if I did run I wouldn't get far, moved gracefully in between us.

"Impolite," he murmured, as if chiding a child.

"She is tired, of course," replied his mother easily. "It has all been a great strain, I can see. Igor will show you to your room."

"Yes, mistress," said Igor. "This way, miss," he added, pointing to a narrow passage turning left I would have sworn hadn't been there a moment ago. I glanced warily at the two most-certainly-not-vampires, but they seemed happy to trust Igor implicitly - the cause of many entertaining plotlines, whispered a little voice in the back of my
head, but probably not useful in the real world. The upshot of that particular exchange was that I followed Igor deeper into the bowels of the castle. We reached a stairwell, and I guessed we were standing at the base of one of the four corner towers. Narrow, high windows were set in the stone, offering glimpses of the night sky outside, and I counted them as we continued up the apparently endless steps. 37, 38, 39...

"Here we are, miss," said Igor, just by my ear. I suppressed a squeak and followed his gesture, and discovered that the door to 'my' bedroom was dark and spiky, covered in what seemed to be a rather unwieldy amount of heavy bolting. I was beginning to wonder if the entire castle had been ordered from a catalog, but was distracted suddenly when the servingman opened it.

The room before me was cavernous, arching high above my head into the gloom. There were torches here, too, but the sheer size of the room diluted their light and made it almost entirely ineffectual - their lonely orange pools illuminated just enough of the decor to make me shiver. On cue, one of the high, narrow windows flashed white, followed in short order by the low rumble of thunder.

"Does miss have everything she needs?" asked Igor, who was still, for some reason, behind me.

I thought for a moment of asking him for help, salvation, key, file, or at the very least trusted confidentiality in this strange, illogical world I had inadvertently stumbled into, but as the afterimage of the lightning faded, I realized that his good eyeball was spinning and emitting little blue sparks. I said instead,

"Miss would appreciate some more light."

"Of course, miss." He lurched away.

I stood at the threshold of the room for some minutes after he had dematerialized, eyes focused blankly on the far wall.

If I assumed, just for the sake of argument, that this was a vampire castle or something quite like it...then there were certain
conventions to be followed.

At that moment, lighting flashed again in a suitably ominous fashion. I turned around slowly and told myself I was entirely unsurprised and not at all horribly relieved to find no one there.

"Miss?"

I yelped and jerked back to face the inside of the room. Igor, who had apparently teleported magically to the center of the bedchamber, was meticulously unfolding a small stepladder, and held in his free hand what looked an awful lot like a cigarette lighter.

"Miss?" he repeated. I exhaled, quieted the mocking little voice that was muttering about narrative causality, and replied,

"Er... nothing. You surprised me. Er. Lights would be lovely? Please?"

"That is what I am attempting to achieve with this lighter, miss, " said Igor patiently, brandishing the aforesaid device. With no further ado he mounted the stepladder and started to fiddle around with something in the darkness, of which I could only make out a faint, dangerously spiky outline, like a hanging bat -

A candle flared, and I realized I was looking at a chandelier. It was a massive construction, all dangerously heavy black iron with frightening stalactites and big drippy white candles. The sight of Igor, fumbling around on an ordinary wooden ladder, trying to spark the ancient wicks with a flashy, modern looking lighter was curiously incongruous with the rest of the image. Eventually, when all the candles were aflame, lighting up rather more of the room than I had expected, he stepped down and made himself and his tools very scarce indeed.

The room was slightly less impressive without the cover of darkness. It was still big and... ha.... posh, but the angular shapes of the elaborately carved furniture were less threatening by candlelight, and swallowing, I entered the bedroom proper. An extremely winedark sea of carpeting muffled my footsteps, but I was uncomfortably aware of my scruffy sneakers, and when it came down to it, my muddy jeans and greying T-shirt as well. It was ridiculous to be embarrassed in the house of - of a kidnapper, but I was, and the tall wardrobe just across from me looked suddenly inviting. I went over to it and opened the doors, reflecting that I would have quite liked to go to Narnia at the moment.

What met my eyes was a mass of black silk and lace, the kind of thing worn by a rather older generation of Gothics than the eyeliner-bedecked girls sprinkled throughout my classes. I frowned at the selection and shut the wardrobe again. Was there nothing here for a reasonable person to wear?

"No, of course not," I said out loud, and looked around again. A narrow door just next to the useless wardrobe caught my eye, and I tried the knob experimentally. It slid open soundlessly, revealing...

...a small, pleasant bathroom such as you might find in any half-decent hotel. On the (entirely inaccurate, as I would later discover, to my chagrin) basis that things couldn't get much worse, I went in and closed the door on the outside world with a certain amount of gratitude. The shower looked considerably more attractive than the rest of that
damned castle, and I gave it only a cursory examination before stripping down and stepping into the gleaming glass cubicle and turning on the water with a kind of tired glee. Hot spray hit me full in the face, and I let my head fall back, closed my eyes, and forced my muscles to relax as much as possible, considering. My inner paranoid twitched slightly, but I reminded it cheerfully that I'd already been hit over the head and spirited away to Oregon, and that bathroom assaults were not in fact a key component in any adaptation of Dracula I'd ever seen or read.

Although this was of course beside the point, because vampires didn't exist anyway.

Still, I finished the shower quite quickly after that, and spent a lot of time awkwardly clutching the towel to me. Possibly as a result of this important preoccupation, it took me several minutes to realize that my old clothes were gone, and had been replaced by a sort of cotton shift.

'Oh,' I mumbled, after searching the bathroom a few more times and putting on the shift, which wasn't so bad. I hadn't heard anyone enter the bathroom, but that, I reflected, really meant very little with the individuals concerned. It was hard to say whether the idea of Igor coming in while I was showering was more or less terrifying than the idea of von Dhampir doing the same. I opened the door a fraction of an inch, and applied my eye to the crack, but there was no one in the bedroom, and after a few more seconds of hesitation I padded out and looked hopelessly back at the wardrobe.

It opened of its own accord, which was typical. The dresses hanging inside failed to be any more aesthetically pleasing than the last time. However, they were at least more protection against the drafty air than the thin fabric of the flimsy nightgown of a garment I was wearing, so I lifted out the nearest ensemble and dressed quickly and
roughly before glancing critically at the vanity mirror.

I stopped.

The black silk fell into place as I watched. Lace frills uncrumpled and fluffed outwards. Ribbed folds on the bustle of the skirt swelled despite the distinct lack of any wire hoop frame to hold them up.

I was pretty sure I heard a little tinkly noise, too.

I spun around slowly, keeping my eyes on the mirror. It wasn't that the dress was no longer absurd looking. It was. It was just that now it was absurd, but with bags and bags of style. Then my gaze traveled upwards, and I saw the face in the glass.

When I was eleven, and devouring fantasy at a breakneck pace, I came across a book that was based off a fairy tale, though one I'd never read the original version of. It was well-written and, in some places, very scary indeed, but one of the passages that stayed in my mind long after other details had faded into oblivion was the description of the princess. Narrated by one of her ladies in waiting, it went something like this:

Oh, the princess was pretty enough, in and of herself, but you could look at her two ways. You could just see what was there, and that wasn't any kind of eyesore, she was a handsome young woman, a little awkward in her long-limbed body, perhaps, a bit gawky, an attractive face, but flawed. But for us, we could also see her mother in her, when she was feeling angry, or imperious, or proud, the profile of a woman who had once been named the most beautiful woman in seven kingdoms, the lines of her face and the sparkle in her eye still there in her daughter, slipping in and out of focus from moment to moment.

The face in the mirror was like that.

I could see the imperfections, the zits, the little bumps, the irregularities and imperfections. They were all still there. If you looked at it, really looked at it, it was just a fairly average teenager's face, but you had to concentrate, you had to try to fix them in your mind to see them, otherwise the mirror stole them away and left behind only a perfect statue staring back at me, a visage as enchanting and enchanted as one you might imagine belonging to Psyche, to Galatea, to Cleopatra. Not mine, in other words.

And there was a... feeling around me. Not quite hunger - maybe something akin to potential. I knew what came next.

"Igor?"

"Yes, mistress," said the composite man, behind me (as usual).

"Does the young master have a message for me," I said, perfectly calmly and without jumping out of my skin at all.

"Yes, miss."

"Well?"

"He wants to know if you eat turkey, miss."

*

Clink. Clink.

We were sitting in what was technically a dining room, but was in a very real sense too big. The empty space pressing in on me was at the same time spilling outwards beyond the boundaries of mere physics and, for that matter, the solid stone walls. The table, by comparison, was only mildly ginormous. This was from my point of view something of a bonus, since Gabriel von Dhampir was sitting at the other end.

The cutlery made little scraping noises as I ate. I hadn't bothered to ask whether he had put anything in it. As he'd already pointed out, it wasn't as if he was going to knowingly tell me anything useful. Besides, I was hungry. Such was logic.

He, on the other hand, wasn't eating anything. Surprise, surprise.

"How are you finding your meal, Delilah?"

That was another thing. He kept calling me Delilah, even though he knew my proper name. I didn't feel the pressing need to correct him, under the circumstances. "Fine."

"Just as well, as I don't know that we have any other food in the house."

I paused and brought my knife and fork down carefully. "Except for me, you mean?"

"Pardon?" he replied, flashing me a brilliant smile.

I watched his mouth, and thus saw the light as it glinted off his fangs. "Vampire," I said - or perhaps accused - flatly. "Undead bloodsucker? Yes?"

"Oh, I see," he said, apparently disregarding both tone and wording. "My mother and father and I, yes." Something seemed to occur to him. "Although my father is no longer technically undead, having passed on to his, ah, final rest some years ago."

"...Really?" I rasped.

I did believe it, to my mild discomfort, but at least I didn't... well, think it, I suppose. Rationally, anyway. Or at least didn't want to believe it. Rationality had very little to do with the matter. Well, who could blame me? When in Zer Castle, do as, er, the Zer Castleans do. Not one for the books, I reflected, and probably would have continued trying to find a better wording for my little catch-phrase had Dhampir, who had been regarding me silently, moved. As it was, I was distracted because he did move. Impossibly.

Again.

It was less an action than a tweaking of the fabric of the universe, and then he was standing at my shoulder, one thin white hand on the back of my neck, before I could finish taking a breath. I, naturally, yelped and jumped back, accidentally knocking my claw-footed dining chair over in the process. There was a loud bang as it hit the stone floor. I clapped my hands to my ears, recoiling at the noise, and therefore was mercifully spared for all of two seconds the unpleasant sight of a smug vampire grinning at me. "Really," he said, cheerfully. It took me a moment to realize what he was talking about.

Pause. Then,

"Shut up!" I said, almost screamed. "Shut up, shut up, shut up. Don't say a word," too, because he'd opened his mouth. "I don't believe it. You. This. Any of it. Okay? I don't know why I'm here, or, or what you think you're doing, but I sure as hell know when someone's pulling my leg." And then, because I wasn't quite that insane - yet - I fled the empty hall with its big dusty table and didn't stop until I was several left turns and stone passages away.
PostPosted: Tue Mar 18, 2008 2:45 pm


Very good I especially like the quote of boom she read when she was younger. But I think you misjudeged your character in one case. Seh seesm rather clam or rather irriataed not scared about her situation.Teh he said yes blah blah about my dad and she screams. It just seems forced. I also like your signature smile

writing_Kat


Belesama

PostPosted: Fri Mar 21, 2008 11:35 pm


I actually think the screaming at the end is quite justified. It seems like she's trying to convince herself it's all just an odd kidnapping and his actions made her snap by shattering the illusion she had carefully woven around herself. All-in-all it's a very enjoyable read. I hope there's more.
PostPosted: Tue Mar 25, 2008 9:31 pm


-looks pleased- I'm glad you saw it that way, although clearly I need to make it more um definite since it's caused some confusion as to why she's like AGGGHWTF all of a sudden.

Should be more coming this weekend. In theory. I make no promises though - second chapter is written but not typed up, you see.

d e s d e m o n o


mel0deis
Crew

PostPosted: Wed Mar 26, 2008 5:47 pm



Oooh, louvely. :]

I would definitely want to keep reading it.
It's a fantastic plot. I love it. ^^

Good job. whee
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