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 Posted: Thu Dec 23, 2004 5:42 pm
It's not that easy to type everything I want to share into this post at once.Plus,I have yet to find my story notebook.So,when I discover the lost,I will post pieces of my stuff here.Which by that,I mean tomorrow. sweatdrop
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Posted: Thu Dec 30, 2004 10:24 pm
Tommorrow, is now in our past. Where'd you go? sad
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Posted: Mon Jan 03, 2005 6:17 pm
Sorry for the delay,I have been loaded with stuff to do,but eventually I will post something...... sweatdrop
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Posted: Tue Jan 04, 2005 5:49 pm
Air Rush
Looking out,
Into the blue sky,
Falling down,
I would surely die.
Resting on a cloud,
In my dreams,
I spread my wings,
But I don't dare scream.
Riding the winds,
My skin flushed,
But I don't care,
For I feel the air rush.
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Fire Ember
A match drops,
Fully lighted,
Sets the house on fire.
Firewood ignited,
Forgotten to be put out,
Forest fire spreads.
A burn,the pain,
Destruction everywhere,
All started with an ember.
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Icicles
As water touches the
Air,cold and bitter,
It freezes to a frozen state,
And dangles from the roof.
Crystaline & bright,
Fragile & cold,
Delicate & prizable,
The icicle breaks.
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Scorch
The mage,
She stands,
Powerful & strong.
She raises her staff,
Its orb glowing red,
A blaze of fire released.
It touches a tree,
Heat searing,
Scorched to a pile of ash.
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Lighning Strike
The gods curse us
With their storms of power,
With their weapons of lightning,
Through thunder,through rain.
The wind howls,
Rushing around,
A flash of silence,
The lightning strikes.
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Okay,those were my poems.The first 2 were the ones I moved from my other thread,the last 2 were my new ones.The third one was one sitting in my notebook,forgotten. sweatdrop Anyway,what do you you think?
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Posted: Wed Jan 05, 2005 3:15 pm
You show great undertanding for feeling of weather and disaster, you have put time into them and I thank you for then enlightenment I have received from it.
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Posted: Tue Jan 18, 2005 5:11 pm
Thanks for the comment.Here's another poem I wrote,but it sorta has the air of comedy that doesn't really make sense:
Overdose
Too much,too little,
not enough,not yet.
A little more,that's too much,
no more,stop right now.
No more of that,put in some,
take that out,we don't want that.
You're cold,you're warm,
you're dead,you're alive,
what's wrong with you,you had to much?
See,isn't it a weird poem?
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Posted: Tue Jan 18, 2005 8:21 pm
I like your poems, though I must agree the last one is a bit odd.
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Posted: Sat Jan 22, 2005 8:34 am
I like the elemental feel in the first set of poems, though shorter or longer lines break the rhythm in some places. As for "Overdose", I really like it for some reason. I guess I've always been a one for dry, kind of morbid humor. Very good. Put a space after the commas, though. That's a pet peeve of mine. whee
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Posted: Sat Jan 22, 2005 10:08 am
I love your poems! I especially like how you showed such a mastery of the elements (Fire, air, water--in the form of ice--and such). I especially liked the one Fire Ember and the other, Scorch. Maybe it's 'cause I'm really interested in fire. I'm not a pyro or anything; it's just something that interests me. I also like that you encorporated some majik (Sorry, I meant to say magic. I'm so used to saying majik in my stories...) into Scorched.
I agree with IRIS HEART about the last one, though. It does seem a bit odd. However, I'm sure with a bit of editing, you can fine-tune it until it's perfect. (Just remember to save a copy of the original somewhere if you're like me and sometimes go edit-happy. You don't want to lose your main message!)
Please post more poems when you get the chance!
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Posted: Sat Jan 22, 2005 5:48 pm
Once again,thanks for the comments.Statistically I must admit something.Really,it's nice of you to like my poems,but I didn't really know I even had skill in poetry.I will still keep posting poems but eventually I will post some of my stories.More poetry will wait until I acually go onto my poetry addiction again. sweatdrop
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Posted: Sun Jan 23, 2005 11:27 am
'Can't wait to see what your short stories are like! biggrin You have a lot of talent with poetry, so it'll be interesting to see your hand at prose.
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Posted: Thu Jan 27, 2005 5:47 pm
Okay,here I go----except I must say that your not going to get alot from me at once since I don't write alot each time I post.So anyway here's a piece from my story:
I looked down.I could feel the heat of the lava below us----burning within the volcano.Jeanette squirmed unpleasantly.She was way too nervous about being lowered into the volcano.I couldn't blame her----but honestly,she should calm herself alittle.I heard a menacing laugh.It was one of the generals of the gang who had kidnapped me and Jeanette(and tied us so they could lower us into a volcano)."Who are you?"I yelled up to her.No answer.She just laughed even more as we dropped ever lower.Jeanette screamed.I had to think fast.I had to keep my mind off that general.
Come on,I'm a genius!I have to think of something.....Suddenly it hit me.I took a deep breath and I iced the rope with my ice powers."What are you doing?"cried Jeanette."You're going to get us killed!""Exactly,"I
said.Before she could say anything else I swung----and the ice broke.
The general walked away,laughing.I didn't have time to waste."Water!"I cried and a wave of water erupted from my free and outstretched hand.The water mixed with the lava and within seconds,the entire form of magma had turned into land.
"Air!"I heard Jeanette cry.She blew the newly formed land to cool it faster.But we were still falling.Jeanette,however,floated herself down.I had to use some of telekinisis in order to land without any serious injury."Well,
Jeanette,it seems that you've finally learned how to use your powers----and your brains."I stated as we both landed.Jeanette opened her mouth to say something but I cut her off."Come on,Jeanette,let's get out of here."
That piece came from the end of my story,when the two main characters get stuck in volcano.It was told from the point of the tomboy character,
Hilary.So,what do you think?(PS:I'll tell you more about my story later!)
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Posted: Mon Jan 31, 2005 4:42 pm
I see you like to do elemental things more, eh?
They are nice, but too literal for me, laughs. Some anyways. The story is interesting, I'd like to see more of it! or the domo shall come for you domokun hehe.
-Nyx
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Posted: Tue Feb 08, 2005 7:46 pm
I agree with Despoinanyx, the story is interesting and I can't wait for more. =^-^=
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Posted: Sun Feb 20, 2005 6:03 pm
I'm not going to write my story today because surprised ne,I think a couple of pages from the story are missing and;two,it needs editing.I will however tell you the storyline of my little novel and spoil you! whee
Ok,so basically the story starts off on this planet,Nebula 13.The planet has this little tradition of giving personality birth gifts to your children when they're born.Anyway,there's this legacy that a Seer will tell the King and the great 'five elders' that after ages of waiting they can finally give gifts to this very worthy baby.After a while the Seer comes along,tells of the lucky baby,and after a while the baby is born.In fact,it's twins!After a couple of years,the twins grow up and they turn out to be complete opposites.During the third year of their lives,the planet befalls a disease that can kill several people in just a couple of days.So,in order to save the twins,the parents send them off in escape pods.Weird,huh?Eventually,they land on the planet Earth and in the city of AACFOS which is a government-organized city for aliens.Bizarre!(The characters really don't look like aliens)The Bad Thing:They don't remember anything.Nada!Zip!Not even their own name.So,then most of the story is based off the fact that they get adopted by different families,and starting from the age of 13 or 14 they keep a diary of their lives.Then it comes to the volcano scene.They find out about their past and----
Okay,I'm not giving away the ending to you.You'll have to find out for yourself when I tell you. blaugh
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