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 Posted: Thu May 15, 2008 8:47 am
A lost little girl was walking around the streets of a busy town, and just when she was about to give in to her depression and confusion, a boy approached her, giving her his hand. The girl sat in awe, and thought he was an angel from heaven.
"Do you want to be saved? Then come with me!" cheerfully said the boy as he tugged her away.
But as he tugged her, the world around her became...different, to say. Everything took a different shape, even the ocean and sky that she once used to stare at for hours changed completely.
Before she knew it, she was in Nowhere Town, at the Nowhere Town's Orphanage. She started pondering on if this was heaven or not, but there was only one way to find out of course...
"Come on! We don't have all day!" yelled the boy from a distance as he ran into the tall and mysterious house.
And so the girl and the boy began to spend their days together, although the mystery of the town remained...
Cover
Splash Page [ Still in Progress! ]
ATTENTION: OLD MANGA PAGES. I AM REMAKING EVERYTHING CURRENTLY.
Character Profiles
Characters Pg.1
Characters Pg.2
Prologue
Prologue Pg.1
Prologue Pg.2
Prologue Pg.3 [ Updated! ]
Prologue Pg.4
Prologue Pg.5
Chapter 1
Ch.1 Chapter Cover [ Updated! ]
Ch.1 Pg.1 [ Updated! ]
Ch.1 Pg.2 [ Updated! ]
Ch.1 Pg.3
Ch.1 Pg.4 [ Updated! ]
Ch.1 Pg.5 [ Updated! ]
Ch.1 Pg.6
Ch.1 Pg.7
Ch.1 Pg.8
Ch.1 Pg.9 [ Updated! ]
Ch.1 Pg.10 [ Updated! ]
Ch.1 Pg.11
Ch.1 Pg.12 [ Updated! ]
Ch.1 Pg.13
Ch.1 Pg.14 [ Updated! ]
Ch.1 Pg.15
Ch.1 Pg.16
Ch.1 Pg.17
Ch.1 Pg.18
Ch.1 Pg.19
Ch.1 Pg.20
Ch.1 Pg.21
Ch.1 Pg.22
Ch.1 Pg.23
Ch.1 Pg.24
Ch.1 Pg.25
Ch.1 Pg.26
Ch.1 Pg.27
Ch.1 Pg.28
Ch.1 Pg.29
Ch.1 Pg.30
Ch.1 End Cover
Chapter 2
Ch.2 Chapter Cover
Ch.2 Pg.1
Ch.2 Pg.2
Ch.2 Pg.3
Ch.2 Pg.4 [ Updated! ]
Ch.2 Pg.5
Ch.2 Pg.6
Ch.2 Pg.7
Ch.2 Pg.8
Ch.2 Pg.9
Ch.2 Pg.10
Ch.2 Pg.11
Ch.2 Pg.12
Ch.2 Pg.13
Ch.2 Pg.14
Ch.2 Pg.15
Ch.2 Pg.16
Ch.2 Pg.17
Ch.2 Pg.18
Ch.2 Pg.19
Ch.2 End Cover
Chapter 3
Ch.2 Chapter Cover
Ch.3 Pg.1
Ch.3 Pg.2
Ch.3 Pg.3 [ Still in Progress! ]
Ch.3 Pg.4 [ Still in progress! ]
Ch.3 Pg.5 [ Still in progress! ]
Ch.3 Pg.6
Ch.3 Pg.7
Ch.3 Pg.8
Ch.3 Pg.9
Ch.3 Pg.10
REMAKE
Chapter 1 : Heaven is Calling..Pg.1
Pg.2
Pg.3
Pg.4
Pg.5
Poleena Arc [ Chapter ??? ] Dear God.
Chapter Cover [ * 3* !!! ]
Pg.1
Pg.2
Pg.3
Pg.4
Pg.5
5/15/08 OPENING YAYZ. Finishing up the pages and the cover.
5/29/08 Finished finishing up the cover. Check out the new pages! Sorry I was gone for a while, the internet went out faster than a blink of light!
6/10/08 Well the god of internet came yesterday and put up the internet again, so here is a new cover, although I am still debating about which one to use and what to do with the other one, and I added text to the covers, but it's only so you actually know what's going on for now.
6/12/08 Updated with new trace pages!
6/25/08 Updated with more outlined pages! Check them out : ) Putting up banners, and more characters.
6/26/08 Updated with some sketchies~ Today I shall sketch, tommorow I shall outline! Afterwards, I will have to get back to studying. Hope you will enjoy these few days! Yay new chapter covers : P
6/27/08 Updated with better pages, and I [ basically ] finished the first chapter. [ Margaret is finally doing the text! HOORAY! : D No moar crappy writing from me? Lol. ] Don't expect an update for a week or two, I am going to be mega busy. Bye bye for now!
7/1/08 Updated with 5 prologue pages that I did yesterday after I finished my stuff. Don't expect me to finish any "stills in progress" for a while.
7/2/08 Updated with lots of "stills in progresses", and finishing them up now, debating on whether or not to use a new cover, yet again, also, I put up character profile thingehs : D
7/3/08 Updated with more finished pages, basically. Also, margaret the text retyper...person! xD [ I gotta come up with an awesome name for that... ] is retyping some of the pages, she is going to take a while, and also since I am making a lot of pages and there are a lot of pages... [ lol. ] But anyways, also updated with some pages with better text.
I was going to be gone this week, but since we are having a money crisis again [ No money for food, AGAIN! At least I still have apples xD Think I can survive for 3 or 4 days with just apples? Stay tuned. ] so yeah, more pages and I'm going on to chapter 3 now. I probably have done too much comedy so far, and around now I will actually have the characters show you around the town xD Yayz! <3 And I've come to the conclusion that the chapter covers are too random, so I'm changing em~
7/6/08 Updated with more updated pages...I guess I should change "new" to updated xD Lol. Since just redoing and such past pages gets a little boring, I go back and forth with making new pages and redoing and such~
7/24/08 REMAKING EVERYTHING. For lolz.
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Posted: Thu May 15, 2008 9:08 am
Name: Kimu
Age: 15
Height: 5'6
Personality: Brave, Social, Tomboyish, yet Girlish.
Flaws: Has a Short Term Memory, and a horrible sense of style.
Likes: Creating and Writing out stories, and hanging out.
Hates: Being forced to wear Azmaria's clothing, and going to sleep and waking up.
References- [x]
Name: Azmaria
Age: 14
Height: 5'4
Personality: Playful yet reserved, and tends to be a worrywart.
Flaws: Taking things too seriously, worrying too much...
Likes: Anything Lolita related, making cloths and helping out Kimu with her stories.
Hates: Kimu's fashion sence, pants, and idiots.
References- [x]
Name: Lenny
Age: 14
Height: 5'3
Personality: Sarcastic to manly, he switches a lot between personalities, that it's even hard to tell sometimes what he is trying to be.
Flaws: Doing things on his own, and can't accept failure.
Likes: Playing on his guitar and making up songs to Kimu's stories.
Hates: People who give in easily.
References- [x]
Name: Poleena
Age: 16
Weight: Anorexic
Personality: Way too crazy or way too quiet, you can never really tell with her.
Flaws: Keeping control of herself.
Likes: Animals, butterflies and birds.
Hates: Loosing control.
Refrences-
Name: Lola
Age: 14
Personality: Another worrywart, and usually dumbfounded.
Flaws: Is kind of slow, in most situations. Also she has weak legs P :
Likes: Lolita, and becoming a different person and experiencing new things, even if she doesn't show it.
Hates: People who show off, and math.
Name: Sarah
Age: 17
Personality: Tough and strong.
Flaws: Can be too blunt at times.
Likes: To be elegant, and flowers.
Hates: People who are like Lola or Azmaria [ Anti-worrywarter! ] : D
Name: Rosa
Age: 12
Personality: Afraid and insecure.
Flaws: ...being afraid and insecure! xD
Likes: To make memories and have new experiences.
Hates: Bullies and people who are as insecure and afraid as her.
Name: Roxy
Age: 17
Personality: Easy-going and bubbly, yet responsible when needs to be.
Flaws: Sometimes gets carried away by the flow way too easily.
Likes: To be accepting and understanding, and asking lots of questions.
Hates: Feeling that she may not be able to stand up too much responsibility, or she may do something wrong.
Name: Mellisa
Age: 1 1/2
Personality: Robotic, and mysterious.
Flaws: Being too naive about the world
Likes: Freedom and wanted to be a normal girl
Hates: People who disobey others
Name: Kumi
Personality: She doesn't really have one, but she is a good actor.
Flaws: Not having much care or emotion for things.
Likes: Bittersweet love, and staring at the moon on top of a headlight outside.
Hates: Others who can't act.
Name:
Age:
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Likes:
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Posted: Fri May 16, 2008 1:01 am
The story sounds nice and mysterious <3 Can't wait till you have more of it finished 4laugh
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Posted: Fri May 16, 2008 12:40 pm
Thank you x3!
I'll get much more done soon, you can count on it. [ I mean I am going to self-publish this after all, lol ]
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Posted: Sat May 24, 2008 3:25 pm
I remember reading this one in the CC forum, I think I already gave my critique on the plot.
I have a question, though. How does one manage to be
tomboyish, yet girly' at the same time?
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Posted: Sun May 25, 2008 10:52 am
I like it! X3 The art is so purty and the lines are well defined and varied and all that!
I just wish it had speak bubbles, so I knew what was going on. ;-:
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Posted: Tue May 27, 2008 9:51 pm
I made a few more pages, but since I am on my mom's laptop, I can't upload it up now, but I will later. [ I'm on my mom's because only on her laptop the internet works :'D Yeah..I've been without internet for 2 or 3 weeks I think, and yet I kept busy somehow @__@' ]
@KazeYami
Glad you do ^^ And thank you!
I put in some speak bubbles, now I am waiting for my friend Margar to put in the text, since she agreed to help me with that.
@Bob The Destroyer
Yeah, hello again : 3 I don't really remember, but ok.
Well, half the time she is girlish, and the other tomboyish. Also she is dressed half girly and half tomboyish @__@' Well, I consider that half girly and tomboyish.
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Posted: Thu May 29, 2008 4:29 am
Updated with new pages :3 ~
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Posted: Sun Jun 08, 2008 2:35 am
Looks nice, I love the art^^.
Just one thing, maybe it's because you haven't put the text in yet. But I don't get what's happening in Ch.1 Pg.2..
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Posted: Tue Jun 10, 2008 10:38 am
Thanks ^^ Glad you do.
Oh, she's running away from the lady, hand thing in the first page xD I added in text by the way, temporary text : 3
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Posted: Wed Jun 11, 2008 4:41 am
I guess it's about time I make a proper comment on this one smile You have a really cute style, I like it. Your new cover looks great, I like it a lot better than the first, which seemed a lot more random than this one.
About the pages... I like the use of thick lines actually. It gives the art a certain kind of cute style I think. But I do think that maybe you could try to vary the line-width just a little bit in the strokes? That way it may be easier to tell everything apart.
On the second panel on page one I am a little confused about what we see. Is that the girls rushing by with her hair to the right? Or is she just looking at a gate of sorts?
Maybe if we could see a little more of this lady that tries to stop her in panel 5, then it would be more obvious what she is running away from. All we see right now is an unknown hand reaching down from above.
I don't know if it is just me, but on the second page I thought someone was yelling "Stop!" at her at the bottom of the page. Maybe showing her legs or something could help the image tell us that she is stopping on her own?
On the third page... except for the two panels that show the girl (I really like the last panel), I find it a little hard to figure out what is happening. Looking at the following page and thinking it over a bit makes me think that she has reached some kind of high edge, and that she sits down with her legs over the edge there? I'm not sure what the background in the first panel is. Is she considering jumping in the next page, or am I completely wrong? ^^;
Someone else may be able to give better ideas for solutions than the lame ones I came up with.
I look forward to more pages smile You've got a really cute style.
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Posted: Wed Jun 11, 2008 11:25 am
Thank you for taking the time to make a comment on my manga ^^ Thank you! I try my best to make it cute, or, more realistic, in some cases. Yeah, most say this cover is better, because it shows the main characters. The other one actually was supposed to show events in the story and a few characters, but oh well.
Yeah, I completely forgot about that ^^' I'll keep the thick lines, but I will make sure to make things different to be able to tell things apart. Like, the backgrounds could be less bold, right? I think the characters and the panels really only matter, usually.
Well, on the second page she is running away from her, and she is running away from her to places that she doesn't even know, so it looks like she is just running left and right. Then she just STOPS, and stops as in a sound effect like of thing. What else do you think I could put to make it clear that she stopped? Or should I just take it out completely?
I think leaving out the lady is better, but I could add a page of her asking Kimu things. The lady who stops her doesn't really have to be known though, for people before stopped her, this is just like, a little flashback. Later on more uncovers, like well...I probably shouldn't say it xD But there is more to her, to why she was left on the street, at least this time.
Yeah...I probably should take that out and put in a "still" sound effect or something...or nothing at all...I dunno, what do you think?
To the third page...thank you ^^ I like it a lot too. A high edge, you could say that, but more like a final stop because she has no more energy to keep going on endesly, to a place that she doesn't even know exists, or rather she has no idea where to go to in the first place.
Jumping? Where did that come from? xD
No no, they weren't lames. I mean, we are just discussing on how I could improve things, no harm at all : )
Thank you! I'll update a few more pages soon, even the ones which are still in progress, so you can count on me! ^^
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Posted: Thu Jun 12, 2008 1:51 am
Wee new trace pages! :B I'l probably take a while to finish all of them, so while I have the spark to make these trace pages that fast [ I made them all yesterday in just a lil while! ] I'll make more until pg. 20 or so, then I will start finishing up the trace pages.
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Posted: Thu Jun 12, 2008 5:19 am
No problem, I hope it's a little helpful smile KimuMaysto Yeah, I completely forgot about that ^^' I'll keep the thick lines, but I will make sure to make things different to be able to tell things apart. Like, the backgrounds could be less bold, right? I think the characters and the panels really only matter, usually. Sounds like a good idea, I think that would work smile Experiment away! KimuMaysto
I think leaving out the lady is better, but I could add a page of her asking Kimu things. The lady who stops her doesn't really have to be known though, for people before stopped her, this is just like, a little flashback. Later on more uncovers, like well...I probably shouldn't say it xD But there is more to her, to why she was left on the street, at least this time.
I don't think you need to devote a lot of space to the lady, maybe just show a little more of her in that one panel, so we get a better idea of what she's running away from. Place her somewhere in the background of the picture, you may not even need to draw a proper face on her yet. KimuMaysto Yeah...I probably should take that out and put in a "still" sound effect or something...or nothing at all...I dunno, what do you think? Hmm showing how she stops can be a little difficult. Maybe show a panel with her feet that have stopped running, or her in a pose that obviously isn't speeding along anymore? "STOP" could be changed to "stops" or "still" as you said. I'm not sure though, so only change it to these things if you believe it would work out as well. KimuMaysto To the third page...thank you ^^ I like it a lot too. A high edge, you could say that, but more like a final stop because she has no more energy to keep going on endesly, to a place that she doesn't even know exists, or rather she has no idea where to go to in the first place.
Jumping? Where did that come from? xD Haha, I guess I completely misread that part ^^; Sorry. And new pages already! Ooohhh~! On page 7 I like how the last panel is coming along. The strange perspective helps the idea along the she's being dragged by the boy, while everything around her changes into something strange. The only thing that isn't working very well is the angle at which we see the girl - it's as if we are looking down at the scene from a little above the characters, while she looks like she is drawn in the front-view. It's as if she's being dragged on her back ^^; And I just love the terrified expression she has in the second panel xD I may take a look at the rest of the pages later smile
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Posted: Thu Jun 19, 2008 4:01 pm
YEAHHHHH GO KIMUUU biggrin D
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