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What a great feeling it is
To know it’s the day I’m suppose to be married
To have my heavenly wife in my arms… to carry
To love and nothing will set us apart
Not even the skies above, because for love I came to far
To let anything like that happen
As she walked, I was nervous, then frightened
I looked at her chest and the heart she held was stolen.
As she walked down the lane…Blood dripping every single second
My mind thoughts began to scramble and toss
I couldn’t tell you if this was reality or a dream
Who would of imagine me at our wedding
Ill have her lying down on me with my legs bending
Screaming, asking how is this possible.
Why is my love taken away from me?

preview of second chapter

I and me the wife that was killed
She suddenly appear and thoughts spilled
She asked herself where is this place
And how I came here
It seems like my memory is erased
suddenly a woman spoke
Claimed she is a guardian
And only the people that are killed
Comes to this place!

Sky High, isn't this the title of a manga?
From your preview of the second chapter, I believe it to be so.
You may want to clarify a few parts.


As for the poetry, I like the mood.
The feeling of human invicibility.
Then the fall of mortality.

And the lines

were peticularly interesting to me because I actually imaged a bride holding a bloody heart that was still beating. Now I can assume that image was not what you had in mind, but still I believe you can make this less chaotic to read and write a tad bit more.