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 Posted: Mon Sep 05, 2005 5:43 pm
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Posted: Mon Sep 05, 2005 10:49 pm
Yay for good fiction! Ah, that was refreshing....
And refreshing indeed! Love the concept of the story. Fire snuffed out by Water in some kind of war? Very interesting.
Not sure I'm liking the use of the name Aquarius...the girl shouting "Aqua!" seemed so...not very well thought out when thinking that they are water people...
Also, I was under the impression Shell was 10, 11, or 12 due to her behavior...kinda surprised to see how old she was actually was. That is one heck of a brat sweatdrop
...Now looking back, all the names sound kind of not very well thought out... Shell, Corel, Aquarius....
Other than the names, I am liking it, liking it very much. Give me more! pirate
Oh wait...I owe you more of my story....eh...hehe.... sweatdrop
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Posted: Tue Sep 06, 2005 5:43 am
^^ who the hell are you - oh...oh it's you... You remind me of the husband who goes out for milk and comes back 5 years later without the milk. stare You want more do you... hmm... I'm glad you haven't forgotten about your story. Make the connection! evil
Well at first I was thinking the names are fine (only because I didn't want to put much thought into it ) but now that you mention it I don't really need to call them that. I guess I wanted to make sure you peoeple understood that they were water people or peoople of water. but as you say it's not needed. Ta 3nodding
It's a shame that it is finished and I don't have the heart to change it crying I'll make a note of that when I rewrite it. wink
Glad you liked it. xd
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Posted: Fri Oct 28, 2005 11:56 am
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Posted: Sat Jul 07, 2007 9:27 am
I liked the concept of it. A little confusing with Shell, though. SEVENTEEN?!?
More like seven or eight, to me! The names didn't seem like good choices,
though. Sort of ones that have been used before. Loved it, though. Good job!
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Posted: Sat Jul 07, 2007 12:29 pm
Numikea I liked the concept of it. A little confusing with Shell, though. SEVENTEEN?!? More like seven or eight, to me! The names didn't seem like good choices, though. Sort of ones that have been used before. Loved it, though. Good job! heart
I wanted Shell to be like that cus she's a brat and their family situation has caused her to be llike that. She will always get her way because her dad favours her over the son. But yeah, I need to change those names. sweatdrop
I've come to the conclusion that I like this story and I really will rewite it.
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