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 Posted: Thu Jun 26, 2008 3:59 pm
Ok guys(and girls), just like the topic says. Post your entry here.
May the best story win.
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Posted: Thu Jun 26, 2008 7:55 pm
me and Cody's Boi shall be the judge of these stories so don't throw a fit if you're not a number one winner. and If me or Cody decides to enter the contest then he will judge mine and I will judge his...there will be no let up's since we're captains so you don't have to worry about that, I will judge the reports probably on the 4th of august so have them in before that.
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Posted: Thu Jun 26, 2008 9:10 pm
((I am probably going to lose. But hay; nothing risked, nothing gained, right?))
Far to the north lays a small island known as Dara. Temperatures stay below zero year round, the waters stay fluid thanks to an ancient magic, despite the arctic conditions. Dara to be was a known Pirate haven for the as long as the oldest of dragons could remember, but that changed 300 years ago when the United Forces attacked and driven the Pirates from the Island, in what became known as The Longest Day War, named that because the bombardment of Dara made Night as bright as day for six days before the lines was finally broken. The reason for the siege and capture of the Island was thought to be the elimination of the Pirate threat from the seas in that region...
Since that the only port town on the island was re-inhabited, repaired and renamed to Celesta. Life wasn't easy but it was prosperous for those who lived on there. Crime was almost none existent, Food was plenty, it became the place to live if you didn't mind getting you hands dirty working on a fishing boat or in the mines.
Though miles away, Behind closed doors and in secret, the peace that reigned over the region for all those years is deadly close to reaching the breaking point, as the powers of the united forces begin to split and argued who should have the right to the island and all its recourses.
With the rumors of war a reaching the port of Celesta, many of the younger generation take up arms and become start to form their own rag tag military force to defend the way of life they have grown to love. A few of them have even gone as far as piracy… This is the story of one such group…
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Posted: Thu Jun 26, 2008 9:18 pm
Southern_cross_nemesis ((I am probably going to lose. But hay; nothing risked, nothing gained, right?)) Far to the north lays a small island known as Dara. Temperatures stay below zero year round, the waters stay fluid thanks to an ancient magic, despite the arctic conditions. Dara to be was a known Pirate haven for the as long as the oldest of dragons could remember, but that changed 300 years ago when the United Forces attacked and driven the Pirates from the Island, in what became known as The Longest Day War, named that because the bombardment of Dara made Night as bright as day for six days before the lines was finally broken. The reason for the siege and capture of the Island was thought to be the elimination of the Pirate threat from the seas in that region... Since that the only port town on the island was re-inhabited, repaired and renamed to Celesta. Life wasn't easy but it was prosperous for those who lived on there. Crime was almost none existent, Food was plenty, it became the place to live if you didn't mind getting you hands dirty working on a fishing boat or in the mines. Though miles away, Behind closed doors and in secret, the peace that reigned over the region for all those years is deadly close to reaching the breaking point, as the powers of the united forces begin to split and argued who should have the right to the island and all its recourses. With the rumors of war a reaching the port of Celesta, many of the younger generation take up arms and become start to form their own rag tag military force to defend the way of life they have grown to love. A few of them have even gone as far as piracy… This is the story of one such group… pretty good I like it...once I post mine I'll have cody look at it and see what he thinks...and if anybody else posts a story we'll read it and they might win.
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Posted: Thu Jun 26, 2008 9:35 pm
alright here's mine. This intro does not have too much detail into the past of the character because, well, it's an intro and some things are not meant to be known yet(but you'll find out later in the story). Anyway, the character's name is Denver and he pretty much wants to take over the Sorcerer's kingdom
With my eyes locked fully on the artistry of new creation, I pondered how the world had changed on me in such a short amount of time. Memories of my not-so-distant history came back to me like they had many times during these past few months. How could I have changed so much? I scribbled down more notes and sketches in my notebook. “They will be sorry they abandoned me.” I smiled, pleased by the thought of creating something new that would outwit them all and bring me back to where I belong. I belong in the streets of the sorcerer's kingdom, using my powers to be the closest thing to a non-dictated leader the kingdom would ever have. But their hard-headed current leader couldn’t except that. I was a nuisance. What will I make to prove my point? In concentration I brushed the eraser of my pencil across my lip. “ I will make people.” I decided. “And a world for them to live, with me as their loving leader.” How could I go wrong? Using magic to create people who listen to your commands is no easy task, But, it’s a risk I am willing to take. “A risk,” I rose to my feet, “To prove a point to those who believe they know better.”
(I was going to name it the magic kingdom but it sounded too happy)
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Posted: Fri Jun 27, 2008 10:05 pm
It is the year 4040 where the times are nothing but despair and suffering that the war has brought... the land is a barren wasteland and the forests are charred... the only green is within the few remaining city parks and some preserved lands that the humans guard with all their might and lives..the war has been going on since the year December 30,3039 the night of new years..
The war has been raging for 1000 years since the demon portal opened in the heart of Darkmare... an isolated and lost civilization that was completely engulfed in the darkness... The heavens, seeing this demon eye(aka the demon portal) sent angels to stop it...The humans caught in the middle of all this saw the angels and thought of this as an enlightenment period and worshiped certain angels as gods... These angels where enlightenment angels who where said to push back the darkness. However, not even the heavenly are pure. The Enlightenment angel who is said to bring light to this land and "purify" almost anything living that is thought to be dark... most of the time "purify" means death... They bring down harsh punishments and believe every action they commit is just. They are cold, and apathetic, murdering for the greater good. They only believe in redemption and purifying the land of the blight the demons have brought, killing all who is unholy, thinking they are the sole justice.
That night of Soul Harvest New Years, the demons that crept from the portal destroyed New York and the skies where red.. ripe with blood. The heavens where getting desperate so they sent various angels instead of the chosen ones thus creating many fallen angels.. Some of these fallen angels have turned to the dark but some are twilight, the ones who are expressionless and want nothing but to end this war. Most fallen angels have developed a lust for vengeance, hate, and a taste for flesh and blood, thus, turning their wings black.
Many more humans where slain and almost became extinct, tied between the demons and angels.. The survivors watched the angels and demons become entangled in the war who ignored the humans as feathers are torn and wings are ripped. The remaining humans do anything for survival and betray their own kind, many either "desert runners" who survive on their own in the wastelands and capture caravans of humans who pass by to steal their goods, or a human who resides in a village. There are the preservation humans, trying to protect the vegetation lands as much as possible...
Religion has been lost to all but the monks. Monks have been mislead by the angels. They worship the angels, and act as enlighteners. They fight for the angels in which they believe are gods and possess magical powers, however, most abuse it and kill anything in which they think is a dark being.
Most angels forgot their task to protect the humans and did whatever it took to survive any means necessary, their focus on only killing the demons. Every day the Demon Eye grew and soon the skies no longer where blue.. but rather red and filled with ash and debris... Darkmare was almost swallowed whole by the demonic portal tearing through the heart of Darkmare's town. Several decades later, the race of supernatural human mages, Darkmareans, where wiped out completely...
The humans never knew about this isolated breed of Darkmareans so when Darkmare was gone... most humans died without a cause... many called this the "infection of the wings" so now the humans are all by themselves... little as they are... The humans are savages and have awakened their ancestor's blood within them, resorting to the tactics of the old for their survival...Even in this futuristic age it was almost brought to oblivion...
The skies are now stained permanently with blood, and the sun never seems to rise. There is only a demonic glow of "day" and then the pitch screaming black night. The air is full of debri and charred ashes. The world is no longer fit for life, only the attempts to grow between the cracks like weeds.
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Posted: Sun Jul 06, 2008 1:57 pm
CHARACTERS:
1)MARCUS TURNTRIP
2)SORU DIGESU
3)AMY RIVERS
PROLOGUE
Everywhere you could see there were fires. Buildings were burning down, or burned down already. General Marcus Turntrip could hear gunfire in all directions. He was hiding at a wall towards an alley. "Well Admiral Soru, are you ready for some more combat son?" Turntrip said as he was reloading his gun. "Sir yes Sir"Soru said confidently.
"Well let's get going then." Turntrip jumped in the alleyway entrance. He started to unload his clip with Soru unloading his clip as well down the alley. Turntrip then shouted at Soru to make sure he would hear him "SORU THROW A GRENADE DOWN THAT ALLEY TO CLEAR IT OF ANY ENEMIES!!!" "YES SIR" Soru shouted back as he pulled the pin out of his grenade and launched it down the alley. When the Grenade exploded Turntrip and Soru ran halfway down the alley and hid beside a Dumpster. Turntrip searched through his jacket pockets and pants pockets and noticed that he had no more ammo. He looked at Soru. "Admiral Soru....do you have any more ammo left?" Soru searched all his pockets and pulled out a clip. "I only have one Sir, do you want it? I have half a clip left" Turntrip looked at Soru in disgust. "That's alright Admiral you keep it" Turntrip said as he threw his gun down the alley and pulled out his knife. "I'm going in, so you better use that ammo to cover me" Soru looked at him sternly "Are you crazy...you'll get slaughtered out there if you don't have a gun" Turntrip looked down the alley and then back at Soru, "Son....If you're as good a soldier as I think you are then you won't have to worry about me." Before he went on his stunt he pulled out a letter and a cigar with a lighter. "If I do die though, be sure to give this to my wife"Turntrip said as he handed Soru the letter. He then lit up his cigar and put his lighter back in his pocket. Then reached in his other pocket and pulled out his headband. "This might be my last cigar so I'm going to make it a good one" Turntrip said as he tied his headband tightly around his head.
"Now C'mon and cover me and don't let up" Turntrip then rolled into middle of the alley and started to charge his way to the terrorist headquarters Knifing anybody that got in his way, allies included. Turntrip noticed another Terrorist chasing him down Soru I hope you see what I see Turntrip thought. Soru noticed the Terrorist chasing Turntrip down so he took aim and fired....the terrorist went down but in his last effort to fight he threw a grenade down the alley where Soru was at. The grenade bounced off the wall and rolled right in front of Soru.
Soru's eyes widened in fear, So not looking at where turntrip was, Soru threw the grenade back without aiming at all and then took cover by the dumpster. after the grenade exploded Soru took his position again to watch Turntrip's back and noticed that Turntrip was down. "GOD DAMMIT!!!! I NEED A ******** MEDIC!!!!!!!" Turntrip shouted as he was aching in pain. Soru's eyes widened when he saw Turntrip was down. He then bolted down the alley to get Turntrip and dragged him back to the dumpster.
"Sir are you OK?" Soru said. Cough I think this is the end for me Admiral." Turntrip said in a faint voice. Tears started to roll off Soru's cheeks and onto the ground "No.....No you're going to make it General please don't die on me" Soru said in a raspy voice. Turntrip took off his headband and handed it to Soru. "Here take this in remembrance of me....if you think of me while your in or out of battle always look at that headband and remember that I will still be there fighting with you." Soru took the headband and put it in one of his pockets. Turntrip then grabbed Soru's hand "I'm proud of you son you did well" He said in a trembling voice. "Ahhhhhh....I was right, this was a good cigar to go out with." Turntrip paused for a second and looked up at Soru.".....Admiral....tell the others to retreat, this battle is lost" Soru felt the Grip of Turntrip's hand giving out.
Soru started to shake Turntrip "General.......General" after realizing Turntrip has passed away he slammed his fist towards the ground "NOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!" Soru looked up the alleyway "I swear one day I'll come back and kill all of you ********" Soru then started to head back to his camp.
(15 minutes later)
Soru made his way to the camp and a few steps in, Sargeant Rivers approached him. She could tell something was bothering him. "Admiral Soru, where is General Turntrip?" Soru looked up at Amy "He........won't be coming home with us, he.......he has passed away. He told us to retreat...this battle is lost" Soru looked down at the ground after that sentence. "hmm I see said Rivers......I'm sorry for the loss Soru, I'll try and cheer you up when we get home. But right now I'll go tell everyone to pack up and call the aircraft in." Sargeant Rivers then headed towards the center of the camp and shouted ALL RIGHT EVERYBODY PACK YOUR STUFF WE'RE RETREATING. I'M GOING TO CALL THE PLANES AND THEY SHOULD BE HERE IN A HALF-HOUR." Soru headed towards his tent and when he got inside he stared at TurnTrip's sleeping bag. He started thinkin of their friendship and what he meant to him. he then looked up and started to pack his belongings.
(45 minutes later)
"Alright, I think that's everything" said Rivers. "Let's move out". once they got on the plane Rivers walked towards the middle of the alley on the plane "Alright Fleet is everybody here?" She asked. "MA'AM YES MA'AM!!!!" the fleet shouted back. not even 15 minutes into the plane right the plane's PA system went on Pardon the interruption soldiers but we are being attacked by fighter planes so strap up and hold on tight....this plane right could be a bit bumpy."
Soru looked out his window and noticed an enemy plane besides his. He turned his head the other way. Soru then noticed a huge shaking from their plane. He felt the plane slowly going down, so he unstrapped his belt and ran to the cockpit. "You guys do know that we're going down ri" he noticed in the middle of his sentence that the pilots were dead in all the windshields were blown out. he tried to pull the plane back up but realized he couldn't.
Soru climbed out of the windshield and dove out of the plane off the cliff into the water He looked back at the plane and saw it explode pieces. He knew everyone in that plane was dead. He looked back down at the water and noticed a bunch of rock formations. they were tall and they were as sharp as knives. Soru put his head down and his hands in front of him to get ready for the impact.
Right as he felt his hands get contact with the rocks he woke up and jumped out of his bed. Soru was breathing heavy and shaking in fear. "Whew It was just a dream." Soru said as he was calming down. "I'm glad that plane wreck didn't really happen" He said while he was stretching. He then put on a pair of his camo pants and a wifebeater, and then He went to use the bathroom. Afterwards he went into the kitchen do grab something to eat. "Looks like it's oatmeal for me today."
After he finished eating he grabbed a pack of cigarettes of the fridge then grabbed his boots. After he strapped his boots on he headed towards his back porch. He sat down and lit up his cigarette and then reached in his pocket and pulled out a headband. Soru just stared at it thinking of that war. "Sure do miss you Turntrip." He said as he was putting his headband back in his pocket. After he Finished his cigarette he grabbed his phone and his car keys. He unlocked his Hummer and then he drove off........... . . .
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Posted: Sun Jul 06, 2008 7:37 pm
Not to be rude, but the ranks in your story are way off. A General would not be in battle, neither would and Admiral. One major throw off is that they would not be seen together because they are both of different military branches. An Admiral is the equivalent of a General, however, an Admiral is only in the Navy and Coast Guard. A General is in the Army, Air Force, and Marines. The only way a General and Admiral would be in battle would be if the General was in the Marines and the Admiral was in the Navy and they were fighting on a boat or just got stranded on land.
Another point is a mere Sergeant would not give orders unless they were the highest ranking. In the presence of a General and Admiral, this is nulled.
Haha, military brat here... *waves*
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Posted: Tue Jul 08, 2008 4:34 pm
]darkmageRaven[ Not to be rude, but the ranks in your story are way off. A General would not be in battle, neither would and Admiral. One major throw off is that they would not be seen together because they are both of different military branches. An Admiral is the equivalent of a General, however, an Admiral is only in the Navy and Coast Guard. A General is in the Army, Air Force, and Marines. The only way a General and Admiral would be in battle would be if the General was in the Marines and the Admiral was in the Navy and they were fighting on a boat or just got stranded on land.
Another point is a mere Sergeant would not give orders unless they were the highest ranking. In the presence of a General and Admiral, this is nulled.
Haha, military brat here... *waves* well what if it is all those things you said did happen
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Posted: Tue Jul 08, 2008 4:40 pm
w0lv3rine ]darkmageRaven[ Not to be rude, but the ranks in your story are way off. A General would not be in battle, neither would and Admiral. One major throw off is that they would not be seen together because they are both of different military branches. An Admiral is the equivalent of a General, however, an Admiral is only in the Navy and Coast Guard. A General is in the Army, Air Force, and Marines. The only way a General and Admiral would be in battle would be if the General was in the Marines and the Admiral was in the Navy and they were fighting on a boat or just got stranded on land.
Another point is a mere Sergeant would not give orders unless they were the highest ranking. In the presence of a General and Admiral, this is nulled.
Haha, military brat here... *waves* well what if it is all those things you said did happen
I speak from experience because I've grown up my whole life as a child of an army soldier. Also, I may join the Air Force if all else college fails except for the free ride I have to the officers academy.
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Posted: Thu Jul 10, 2008 9:19 am
well you say old generals wouldn't fight...but look at Patton and look at Eisenhower, they def. fought together, and Soru made the story like that because America is almost out of soldiers in that war hence the reason Turntrip(I think that's what his name is) told them to retreat. and the Sargeant is giving orders because all the other higher ranks are maybe dead. That's what I think anyways wait till Soru posts.
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Posted: Sun Jul 20, 2008 11:23 pm
The sergeant wouldn't be giving orders in the presence of the higher ranks. And the higher ranks wouldn't be in war, no matter what you say. They always stay in the home front. If there are so few soldiers then they would pull out, not send themselves in.
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Posted: Tue Aug 05, 2008 3:17 pm
alright here's the results
1st place - Raven
2nd place - Soru Digesu
3rd place - W0lv3rine
good job everyone, and we hope to hold more contests in the future.
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Posted: Tue Aug 05, 2008 3:29 pm
Hey people smile congrats to all the winners,
]darkmageRaven[ Your story kicked a**.
Soru Digesu: your story was good
and finaly
W0lv3rine: i want the rest of the story damn it.
good job to all who tried
Southern_cross_nemesis im looking forward to seeing something else by you in the next contest.
hope you all had a great summer.
Later.
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