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 Posted: Wed Jul 02, 2008 6:57 pm
Hi. Waffles here. You may recognize me from the afilliates post. If you don't...eh oh well. XD
Anyway, I figured I'd post this here...even though it's rather rough around the edges I'm quite fond of it. Feel free to comment. I love comments very, very much.
Once upon a time
There was you and there was me
It could have been perfect
But it just wasn’t meant to be
Our lives got in the way
We’re never gonna know
If you and I together
Would’ve made a great show
But let’s play pretend
Create our own world
One where you and I
Can be together forever
We’ll write our own story
Add our own twists
Create the perfect ending
And know what we’ve missed
Fate handed us the wrong cards
There’s not much we can do
All I’ve got left to say
Is I will always love you
No matter how far
And if we stay apart
You’re not everything I want you to be
But you’re always in my heart
Let’s play pretend
Create our own world
One where you and I
Can be together forever
We’ll write our own story
Add our own twists
Create the perfect ending
And know what we’ve missed
Can we have just one day?
One chance to know what might’ve been
One short day where the world
Can’t keep me from your arms
One day to know
One day to feel
One day where we can
Just play pretend
Create our own world
One where you and I
Can be together forever
We’ll write our own story
Add our own twists
Create the perfect ending
And know what we’ve missed
Let’s play pretend
Create our own world
One where you and I
Can be together forever
We’ll write our own story
Add our own twists
Create the perfect ending
And know what we’ve missed
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Posted: Tue Jul 08, 2008 5:30 pm
Hello Waffles, sorry it takes so long to reply here, but in our current stage of developement, our writers forum is slower than Gaia's actual writers forum.
I've never been good at critiquing songs, so bear with me. It is very good, and there is an excellent chorus (thats what that stanza is called, correct?), though I find, in my opinion, that there was no need to repeat it at the end.
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Posted: Sat Jul 19, 2008 4:53 pm
The Grey Blade Hello Waffles, sorry it takes so long to reply here, but in our current stage of developement, our writers forum is slower than Gaia's actual writers forum.
I've never been good at critiquing songs, so bear with me. It is very good, and there is an excellent chorus (thats what that stanza is called, correct?), though I find, in my opinion, that there was no need to repeat it at the end.
Yeah, that's a chorus. Thanks for the input on the repeat...that's kinda something I always do with songs, repeat the chorus twice at the end. Perhaps it's time I thought about changing that.
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Posted: Sat Jul 19, 2008 8:51 pm
Spastic waffles The Grey Blade Hello Waffles, sorry it takes so long to reply here, but in our current stage of developement, our writers forum is slower than Gaia's actual writers forum.
I've never been good at critiquing songs, so bear with me. It is very good, and there is an excellent chorus (thats what that stanza is called, correct?), though I find, in my opinion, that there was no need to repeat it at the end.
Yeah, that's a chorus. Thanks for the input on the repeat...that's kinda something I always do with songs, repeat the chorus twice at the end. Perhaps it's time I thought about changing that.
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Posted: Mon Jul 21, 2008 6:59 pm
The Grey Blade Spastic waffles The Grey Blade Hello Waffles, sorry it takes so long to reply here, but in our current stage of developement, our writers forum is slower than Gaia's actual writers forum.
I've never been good at critiquing songs, so bear with me. It is very good, and there is an excellent chorus (thats what that stanza is called, correct?), though I find, in my opinion, that there was no need to repeat it at the end.
Yeah, that's a chorus. Thanks for the input on the repeat...that's kinda something I always do with songs, repeat the chorus twice at the end. Perhaps it's time I thought about changing that.
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